Ravenclaw!
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After little Harry Potter runs away from his relatives’ home for the sixth time, Albus decides something drastic must happen. Instead of sending a friendly witch from family services like he had done before, he sends Severus Snape in hopes of scaring the boy into staying put. But when a blizzard interferes with plans, Severus learns why Harry keeps running away and a change of plans ensues.
Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11)
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Snape flavour: Snape Comforts, Out of Character Snape, Snape is Stern
Tags: Alternate Universe
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Membership status: Administrator
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Reviews by Jade_Sullivan
Rated: K+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys
Chapters: 36 - Completed: No - Updated: 11 May 2024 / 23 Oct 2017
Series: None - Challenges: Runaway
Chapters: 36 - Completed: No - Updated: 11 May 2024 / 23 Oct 2017
Series: None - Challenges: Runaway
| Title: Chapter 2: Time at the Hotel | 29 Oct 2017 |
| Reviewer: Jade_Sullivan (Signed) |
- I'm really enjoying this story! I think you've written "young" Snape in a believable way. It's difficult to characterize him as a softer person without making his characterization overly "sweet" and nauseating, but I think you've found a great balance. He still seems like himself. And I appreciate his speaking like a normal person. It adds to the realistic charm of his character. Another aspect of this story that is very well done is the indication that Harry comes from an abusive home. I think it's very easy to characterize the Dursleys as complete monsters, but they're more ignorant than anything, and you portrayed that well.
Looking forward to more of this!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review and short analysis! I am trying my best to keep Snape as Snapish as I can. I agree, some stories I've read where Snape is all of a sudden a big teddy bear at the first mention of abuse is a bit nauseating and, to me, a bit too fast of a personality change. I hope I can continue portraying Snape well and realistic for the rest of this story. For the record, I am a huge fan of your Emerald Eyes! I loved that story!
| Title: Chapter 3: Stay | 10 Nov 2017 |
| Reviewer: Jade_Sullivan (Signed) |
- My Lord, I love this story. My heart hurt for Harry...you nailed that scene. Can't wait to settle in and read the next chapter tonight!
Author's Response: Thank you for your review! I am so glad you love the story.
| Title: Chapter 5: Rules and Regulations | 16 Nov 2017 |
| Reviewer: Jade_Sullivan (Signed) |
- First of all, still loving the story! Secondly, I can't help but throw in my "two cents" about Severus and his parenting skills... :) It's easy to forget that he came from a working class family with a father who lost his temper often. It's no surprise that Severus was mean and bitter and short-tempered as a teacher. Some readers like to pretend that he would have been Father of the Year to Harry, but that isn't very realistic. In canon, he lost his temper all the time. I can easily see him losing his temper at being disobeyed and resorting to physical punishment. I can see him regretting it and feeling guilty about it as well...like any other human being. Realistically, people swat their kids out of anger...or shout at them...and, yes, it stems from anger, but that doesn't mean it doesn't happen. It also doesn't mean that person is abusive...
I came from a very loving home, but my dad lost his temper more than once... We always got over it and moved on...it's not unusual behavior...
What you've shown consistently throughout these first few chapters is Severus' discomfort and frustration. He's frustrated that this duty was dumped on him, yet he can't do what he knows is morally right...hence the nightmare of Dumbledore scorning him. This is going to make him unconsciously more protective of Harry, and his restricting Harry and being stern about it is more in character than Snape cuddling him and reassuring him. Snape's father wouldn't have done that for him, so why would he know gentleness?
Don't feel like you have to justify your writing to anyone. Literature shouldn't give you warm fuzzies all the time... If that's what someone wants, then let them write their own marshmallow version of Severus and bask in his unreality... Stay true to your characterization of him...I think you're spot on, here :)
Author's Response: Thank you for your encouraging words. I am still pretty new to all of this and I’m not always sure how to respond to readers sometimes. I just do my best to stay positive! I’m glad Severus is true to himself (canon self) and that you really enjoy his character in this story. I am doing my best to make him as realistic as possible in a situation like this. And I’m sorry if I can’t give the warm fuzzies some people are looking for, but to those who know Snape and enjoy his bitterness, I shall keep writing for you. I do promise to update soon! And thanks again!