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Past Featured Story O Mine Enemy by Kirby Lane starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 700]
When Harry finds an injured Snape on his doorstep and must hide him from the Dursleys, he has no idea that this very, very bad day will be the start of something good.

Harry and Snape are thrown together by annoying relatives, a series of strange dreams, and Voldemort's latest hunt for Harry, but their greatest challenge may well be surviving each other. This will be a long summer unless the two can find a way to work together. A slow-burn enemy-to-mentor story.

Alternate 6th summer (and part of the school year): post-OotP; ignores HBP and DH.

Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: Canon Snape
Tags: Injured!Harry, Injured!Snape, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Rated: T - Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect, Violence
Chapters: 61 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 08 Mar 2021 / 30 Apr 2007
Series: None - Challenges: Battered Snape for Breakfast
Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 - An Experiment in Civility 17 Aug 2007
Reviewer: Jade_Sullivan (Signed)
    I. Love. This. Story. The question-for-a-question game they play is so brilliant. I loved it in the earlier chapter and I thought it was even better in this one. I wasn't expecting Snape to ask about the polyjuice potion, but of course he'd ask something like that, because well...he's Snape. lol. I think my favorite part was definitely when Snape finally answered Harry's question about Legilimency being more difficult to learn than Occlumency. I love how he acts so indifferent towards Harry, but finally gives in and answers his question...you know he's just dying to teach him Occlumency...if Harry would be willing to learn...and keep his mouth shut. lol. Hmmm...maybe he will... Will he?!

    Excellent job with this chapter and the whole story in general. I'm enjoying it so much and can't wait for the next update!

    Author's Response:

    I. Love. Your. Review. ;)  It's so nice to hear all the specific things you liked!  Yeah, I liked that he answered Harry's question, too.

    Hmm...the question: Will Snape teach Harry Occlumency?  Well...Dumbledore essentially left the decision up to Snape, and Snape is still refusing, which is why Dumbledore is taking over.  The only way our two favorite characters would join up for those infamous lessons again is if Snape changed his mind.  So...will he?  You know I can't answer that!  ;)


Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 - Visions of Sugar Plums 27 Aug 2007
Reviewer: Jade_Sullivan (Signed)
    What an intense chapter! I was not expecting the ending at all, which makes it even more wonderful. God...poor Harry!...if he was anxious before, I can't imagine what seeing the future will do to him.

    You did a nice job with Harry's angry rant. I loved the part where Harry felt sort of trapped between Dumbledore and Snape...but found himself leaning more towards Snape.

    This story is just so great! I can't wait for more :)

    Author's Response: Thank you, thank you! It really was a pretty serious chapter, so I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it. Yes, poor Harry! What's a boy to do?

Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 - The Second Prophecy 04 Sep 2007
Reviewer: Jade_Sullivan (Signed)
    I saw that you had updated this morning and saved it to read until this afternoon, because I wanted to delay the gratification, I guess...lol. I've been hoping for an update and read this chapter as slowly as possible to make it last longer.

    God, this chapter was incredible. The juxtaposition of the two prohecies is brilliant. I never thought that there could be a worse prophecy than Harry's.

    Also, I really enjoyed the scene where Dumbledore was scolding Harry and Severus, telling them to put aside their differences. I guess I really love ashamed!Harry almost as much as ashamedbuttryingtomaskit!Snape. lol. But poor Dumbledore. I have a tendency to get annoyed at the man, but this chapter really made me sympathetic towards him.

    Have I told you how perfectly you characterize Snape AND Harry? Harry tries hard to be mature, but he is so torn between adolescence and adulthood. The way you write him just really emphasizes that fact.

    I'm anxious to see if Harry has any more dreams/nightmares and how Severus deals with it. I sure do love Snape's subtle, comforting gestures. *sigh*

    I feel like....reading this chapter again. So I'm going to do just that. You are such an amazing writer, though! Keep it up!

    Author's Response:

    Delaying is fine, hehe! I like it when reviews are spread out sometimes, because I get to enjoy them longer. ;)

    Thanks for the comments re: the prophecy & Dumbledore. It's nice to know what you like & don't - and I admittedly didn't know how my introduction of a prophecy would go over. So thanks for the affirmation, hehe!

    And feel free to read the story/chapter over and over as many times as you want to!!! lol!


Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18 - A Lesson in Being Slytherin 10 Sep 2007
Reviewer: Jade_Sullivan (Signed)
    So, I had to leave this story about 3/4 of the way through and come back to finish it an hour and a half later...you know...because lunch was over. And let me tell you, it was quite a torturous experience. I'll never do it again. lol.

    But Oh. My. God. This chapter was so GOOD!! I loved everything about it. I actually laughed outloud when Harry was trying the breathe-and-count-to-one-hundred exercise. It struck me as funny. And the conversation with Snape via Dobby was brilliant. I loved that part. Poor Harry, trying so hard to be respectful...lol.

    And actually, I like the subtle civility between Harry and Snape. If they link arms and skip down the hall too soon, it's just not realistic.

    Okay, and favorite scene: the mirror shard. *sniff* The best moment in that scene is where Snape is filing down the sharp edges. Nothing is spoken, but there is just so much tension/emotion in that scene, you could cut it with a knife. It just made me want to dash at the two and demand a group hug.

    Oh, and I really enjoyed this line as well:

    “Wow. Um, wow…you put all that thought into every petty thing you do? No wonder you always manage to make my blood boil. I’m, um…I’m actually tempted to be impressed, if you weren’t always thinking against me…”

    I guess there's nothing left for me to do but reread this chapter. There are only about three stories that make me scroll to the top immediately upon finishing and yours is one of them. *dramatically high-fives you*

    This is pure brilliancy. Keep it up!

    Author's Response:

    I'm on my lunch break now, as it so happens! :)  I am so glad that you came back to finish it, though; otherwise, you'd have missed some Harry angst.

    Thank you, thank you, thank you so much for your kind review!  I am glad you enjoyed reading the chapter as much as I enjoyed writing it.  And whew! Good thing I scrapped the linking arms & skipping down the hall part from the next chapter! hehe ;)

    Go - reread! and then reread again! You won't hear any complaints from me. ;) 


Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 - Squinting at Snape 17 Sep 2007
Reviewer: Jade_Sullivan (Signed)
    Oh dear God, I can't wait until the next chapter! lol. I am now going to have the image of a singing Snape in my head for the rest of the afternoon. Brilliant. ...Snape, singing in the shower...Snape, humming a tune in the car (if he drove one)...

    Anyway, the dialogue was really great in this chapter! I love how you write Harry. All of the "ums" seem to be perfectly placed, and his voice is just so...so...accurate, for lack of a better word. *is tired*

    I also loved how Harry kept trying to get into a fight with Snape, but he wouldn't allow Harry to make him angry. Although, for a minute there, I thought that crap was going to hit the fan. But, yay Snape! Way to hold it in! The anger, that is.

    This line was definitely my favorite and made me laugh outloud:

    “She sang to me,” Snape answered, surprising Harry by not kicking him out of the lab.

    "Oh." Yeah, definitely not going to ask Snape to do that. Just the thought would have been enough to cause Harry to shudder if he weren’t already shaking.

    **Loved it. LOVED IT!!!

    Oh, but Snape, I can sense you softening! A tad, anyway. He may not actually tuck Harry in, but I'll be he WANTS TO!! *points accusingly* Yes, Snape, you do.

    I just loved this chapter so much. I love your Harry. I love your Snape even more. I just....*sobs with joy*

    Thanks for the update :) You're the best!

    Author's Response:

    Haha! Snape humming a tune on his way down the corridors to Potions class...now that would probably cause more than a little shock to Hogwarts, yes? :)

    Thank you for the review! It made me smile so much to hear what you liked!


Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20 - The Scent of Safety 05 Nov 2007
Reviewer: Jade_Sullivan (Signed)
    That was brilliant. I've been waiting for an update forever, and I have to say that the wait was completely worth it.

    I was gettin' a little nervous coming down to the end of this chapter like "No, I don't want it to end!!" But I have to say, that the last few paragraphs were sufficiently satisfying. Definitely filled the Aww-factor for today.

    I love the way you write Harry. I LOVE it. You write him so realistically, not just through dialogue, but also in his actions. One of my favorite parts of this chapter was where Harry was laughing uncontrollably. It was great.

    And then Snape going back and forth calling Harry by his first name, and then Potter, and then Harry again. That was amazing. And he even chuckled! Your Snape is perfect. I'm very impressed how you keep him SO in character but are still able to interject a few moments of kindness. It's much more effective than fluffy!Snape.

    I'm sad this chapter is over. Guess that means I'll just have to read it again... lol. By the way, I'm holding you to the promise of a finished story. I think I'd go slightly crazy if this masterpiece were incomplete.

    Keep up the excellent work. Your writing is inspiring.

    Author's Response:

    Thank you, thank you for the review!  I am glad you enjoyed the chapter!

    I'm glad to hear you like my characterizations of Harry and Snape - I'll try to keep it up with your expectations! :)


Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 - A Lesson in Being Gryffindor 20 Jan 2008
Reviewer: Jade_Sullivan (Signed)
    Hmm..quite possibly the best line I've read in a long while:

    “Once. I sneered; you cried. It was very satisfying.”

    **I laughed outloud.

    I shouted for joy when I saw you had updated and received strange looks. But honestly, the fact that you updated just made my entire weekend. So thank you.

    Harry was perfect in this chapter--his uncertainty, the way he kept awkwardly smoothing down his fringe, his outbursts. I love how you've characterized him. Your Snape is quite witty, which makes me adore him. You've added dry humor to this story, which I completely love.

    I marvel at your ability to keep Snape in character for so long. Makes me want to throw my story onto the floor and smash it with my shoe. I wonder if their mentor-ish relationship will develop any further--they aren't close by any means but it's strangely satisfying to read.

    The dialogue---oh, yes the dialogue--is stunning. And it's so realistic with all of Harry's 'ums' and 'ers'...

    And now, I'm nervous. The thought of Harry locked away in a dark basement is quite terrifying. But I can't wait to see what you do with this story. You know how to keep your audience in healthy suspense ;)

    This was brilliant, as always. And long (thank you!) Write soon!

Connections by FoxyElvenPirate starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 91]
Snape and Harry story in which they discover a special connection between them. Takes place in the first year when Harry is 11. Some chapters will contain corporal punishment. Mentor/adoption fic.

Takes Place: 1st Year - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption, Alternate Universe
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: T - Warnings: Physical Punishment Spanking
Chapters: 12 - Completed: No - Updated: 21 Apr 2008 / 09 May 2007
Series: None - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 - Doubts 01 Jun 2007
Reviewer: Jade_Sullivan (Signed)
    I simply love this story. Everything is so well-connected. I really enjoyed reading the part where Snape is thinking over the past night, because it is so characteristic of him. You've created a perfect Snape. The concern is there, but he's still uncomfortable with it. However, it seems as if it's becoming more difficult for him to talk himself out of actually caring for Harry.

    I'm always so excited when you update, and I absolutely love your writing style!

    Can't wait for more :)

    ~Jade

    Author's Response:

    *blushes profusely* Aww...thank you so very much, Jade, for all your kind words. I am thrilled that you are enjoying the story. As for Snape's characterization...well, I just write him as I see him. And at times as I am told to...the Potions Master is a pushy muse to have! And you are quite right, Snape does care and it's going to start coming out more and more until he can't hide it any longer. But that will be a few chapters, lol. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing; I really appreciate it.

     Fox


Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 - Discussion of Duty and a Dismissal 21 May 2007
Reviewer: Jade_Sullivan (Signed)
    I love this story! I have to admit, I'm a sucker for the relationship you've created between Snape and Draco. It's lovely. I've always thought he should have been punished for the Remembral scene. Glad to see that Draco's remorseful in the end, however. I like how your story captures him as a misunderstood eleven year old rather than just a hopeless brat. Anyway, nice work! I'm very much looking forward to the next chapter :)

    ~Jade

    Author's Response:

    Hi Jade,

    Thank you so very much for your lovely review. I'm delighted to hear you like the Snape/Draco relationship. The little Dragon was my first love of 'Sev's boys' (even though Harry is now just as dear to me) and so you will see more chapters with them interacting. I have always thought Draco was a good kid underneath, he just needed someone to actually care and hold him accountable for his actions without being excessive or cruel like I feel Lucius would be. Snape is just the man for the job. The question is, is Snape up to dealing with both Draco and Harry?? Stay tuned and find out. :)

    Thanks again for reading and reviewing. The next chapter should be up soon and I am glad that you are enjoying the story so far.

    Fox


Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - Trouble With a BIG Capital Lumos T 23 May 2007
Reviewer: Jade_Sullivan (Signed)
    Wow, you update fast! I love how descriptive you are with your writing--especially during the Halloween feast :) I'm so glad Snape is beginning to feel concerned for Harry, and I also like the fact that he was virtually punished no more or less than Draco. Snape, deep down, is a fair man.

    Great chapter! I'm anxiously awaiting more :)

    Author's Response:

    Hi Jade,

    Thank you so very much for the wonderful review. I love trying to get the picture in my mind into print, so I'm glad that the descriptions work for you and that you like them. I've always loved reading and writing details, though now I find myself writing a lot more dialogue than I used to. It depends on where the characters want to take me as a good bit of the time I'm just along for the ride and trying to type fast enough to keep up!

    And yes, Snape is beginning to care, though he's still plenty hesitant. At least he finally took the first step. Yay! You caught what I was trying to do with the boys' punishment. Pretty much the same thing for the same 'crime'. I agree, Snape is fair. Stern as all get out, but fair. :)

    I'm almost done with the next chapter so hopefully not much longer to wait. Thanks again for reading and reviewing.

    Fox

     



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