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Reviews by Foolish Wishmaker
Harry is 7 years old and treated literally like a dog by the Dursleys. Will he be rescued by the wizarding world? Will he ever be fit to take on the mantle of The Boy Who Lived? Now Complete!
Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11) - Snape flavour: None Tags: Adoption, Alternate Universe, Child fic, Snape-meets-Dursleys Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect, Violence
Chapters: 27 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 03 Sep 2007 / 18 Jul 2007 Series: A Boy Called Whelp - Challenges: None
Great chapter. More Charlie sometime, please.
Voldemort's forces are growing stronger and more organized. Despite warnings of this by the Order's spy, Harry Potter is captured. When he's rescued, will Snape be able to prove that he is useful as more than just a spy to the Order?
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None Tags: None Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Violence
Chapters: 23 - Completed: No - Updated: 24 Oct 2007 / 19 Jul 2007 Series: None - Challenges: None
Now, a couple of things I noticed: "Albus Dumbledore was a man that" Things THAT, People WHO. It should be "Dumbledore was a man who." "a man that did wear his heart" Same as above. Should be who, not that. dark lord Should be always capitalized. It's his title and stands in for his name. auror Also should be capitalized... not for any really good reason, but because Rowling capitalizes it. DeathEater Always two words, not one. Author's Response: Thank you! I mean that. I'll get those changes in sometime today or tonight. I really appreciate that you let me know the mistake and why it should be fixed. You're a good teacher. I can't say enough about how happy I am you like my Snape. I hope I can keep him up to those standards. I am definitely in the 'Snape is one scary guy' camp. Thanks and enjoy.
the boy who lived Should be capitalized. And possibly separated by dashes, although that's up to you. deatheaters Capitalized and two separate words. anyways Despite rampant misuse, there is no such word. The word you want is "anyway." Misspellings of canon words and names is always more irritating than any other misspellings or grammar problems. I once got crucified for misspelling "Krycek" on an X-Files mailing list... and it wasn't even in a fic! Author's Response: Thanks for the review and thank you very much for the corrections. I've got a beta now...YAY! and we're going back over all the chapters and fixing them. I'll watch for those mistakes. She's already fixed the 'Death Eaters' for me and probably others. I'll go back and check now. I had no idea anyways wasn't even a word! Learn something new everyday. :) Thanks and enjoy!
Great chapter. I hope Snape's not off to do something dangerous. But he probably is. Author's Response: LOL Glad you liked that one. Dangerous is a relative term... ;) Thanks and enjoy!
LOL!!! Ooh, stupid Harry going with them to where he most definitely does not belong. Snape's going to murder him. Author's Response: Glad you liked that line! Lord, she's a clutz! LOL Snape has been standing in line for that priveledge for soooooo long. ;) We'll see... Thanks and enjoy! SPOILERS for HPDH. The Forest of Dean didn't go as smoothly as it should have....
Takes Place: 8 - Pre Epilogue (adult Harry) - Snape flavour: None Tags: None Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 23 Jul 2007 / 23 Jul 2007 Series: None - Challenges: None
I'm sure the fanfiction will start to pour in once people have had a chance to sort out their feelings and the new info. I know personally I'm not ready to start writing anything that takes book 7 into account... in fact I'm not ready to continue my fic that ignores book 6, let alone book 7, until I can figure out what new info can be pulled into it and what will simply have to be disregarded. Anyway, this was a nice piece... good job. The summer after 5th year, Death Eaters find Harry abandoned in the Dursley house and bring him to Voldemort. Will one particular Death Eater give up his position and his hate to save his enemy's child? Eventual Snape mentors Harry fic.
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None Tags: Alternate Universe Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect, Profanity, Rape, Torture, Violence
Chapters: 43 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 05 Nov 2007 / 23 Jul 2007 Series: Walk the Shadows - Challenges: None
EEEP!!! Oh no, another one to add to my favorites.... I like the premise. The end of this chapter really had me on the edge of my seat.
Author's Response: No doubt! Maybe he'll learn that lesson, anyway. :-) |
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