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Reviews by Sternenlicht
SEQUEL to: Harry and the Changed Time Line!
How much has Harry changed the future? Will he be able to adjust to this new time line he constucted while being in the past? Will his dream about a family just for himself come true? Takes Place: 6th summer, 8 - Post Hogwarts (young adult Harry) - Snape flavour: None Tags: Alternate Universe Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: K
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Warnings: None
Chapters: 37 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 07 Sep 2007 / 10 Jul 2007 Series: The Changed Time Line - Challenges: None
I'm glad Harry's new timeline seems to be quite harmonious, even though there are problems as well. Now, let's find out what memory he gets back! Author's Response: LOL After so many chapters you must know me well enough to know that I won't do anything to Lily :-) (sorry for the misleading hint) *still grinning* - and thanks for your review :-)
I think you portray the conflict Harry has with his returning memories very well- on the one hand he wants them, needs them, yet on the other hand they are bothersome to him. I love how Severus supports and cares for him. So, he goes back to pranking, does he? I'd sure like to see some more pranks...
*g* Still loving it, especially Harry's new role in Hogwarts, but got to run now- we're going to finally watch OotP!
Harry and his parents are not communicating- I foresee a great explosion. At least I hope there'll be one before Harry goes off and does something stupid! Author's Response: Istn't Harry already stupid enough??? No, there won't be an explosion ;-) Thanks for reading - and for your review :-) After Harry is caught for exploding a cauldron in 2nd year Potions, Snape insists he keep a firm hand on the boy he must secretly protect. However, he discoveres that there is more to the twelve year old than unruliness and disrespect. Similarly, Harry learns from and gains a new perspective of his professor.
Takes Place: 2nd Year - Snape flavour: Snape is Stern Tags: None Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Physical Punishment Spanking, Neglect, Profanity
Chapters: 32 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 17 Jun 2008 / 25 Sep 2007 Series: Emerald Eyes - Challenges: None
Your Harry is just the right mix of meek and defiant, and your Hermione has it right- most of the time. Wonderful! Author's Response: Thank you! I really try to keep all characters in canon as much as possible, because I think a story is easier to relate to, because we're used to the way J.K. writes her characters. I quite adore prickly!Snape as well...lol. He's really fun to write, as well as Harry. Thanks again for the review! Harry has been depressed for weeks until one day during a potion's exam he finds out that Snape has taken matters into his own hands...
Takes Place: 5th summer - Snape flavour: None Tags: Alternate Universe, Slytherin!Harry, Snape-meets-Dursleys Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect, Self-harm, Suicide Themes, Violence
Chapters: 8 - Completed: No - Updated: 16 Jan 2009 / 09 Oct 2007 Series: None - Challenges: None
Sequel to Hide Yourself Away! Please read or skim that first before you read this one, or else you’ll be quite lost.
Harry and Severus return to Hogwarts to finish out the third year, and encounter more problems, in the form of an escaped convict and a meddlesome Headmaster, but are aided by new and old friends to discover a truth that was hidden away. Takes Place: 4th summer - Snape flavour: None Tags: Alternate Universe, Azkaban Character Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Physical Punishment Spanking, Profanity, Violence
Chapters: 26 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 19 Apr 2008 / 27 Mar 2008 Series: Hidden Away - Challenges: None
She hogs screentime (the entire last chapter comes to mind), is amazingly beautiful, all the guys love her at first sight (and become beastly once she doesn't return their affections), has "speshul powers", somehow seems to substitute for both Ron AND Hermione (at least in the amount of interaction between her and Harry), has a tragic past and the will to live on, is the apple of the eye of not one but TWO teachers, seemingly has Snape more wrapped around her finger than Harry does, is astonishingly sweet even through her hard lot, is a transfer student... need I say more? I'm very sorry for being so direct, but maybe you could consider doing a Mary Sue Litmus Test? Here's one: http://www.theninemuses.net/hp/work/marysue.html (the one I use to pass my characters through (original work) is a bit more rigid, though). Again, I'm very sorry if I offended you, but I kind of entered the fandom with Merlin Missy (Dr. Merlin)- that was sometime in 1996 when I first went online and found out about fanfiction. I hope you'll still continue this story- maybe with a slight shift in emphasis on certain characters? Author's Response: Hmm . . .I respect your opinion, but I have to say that I don't agree with all of it, perhaps I need to be clearer on certain points, so here goes. First, this is an AU fic, which means, at least to me, that I redo some critical points and introduce new plot twists and characters into an exisiting timeline. It's a what if type of story--what if Severus were Harry's Dad and Lupin had a neice that came to Hogwarts and became Harry's friend, ect. With that in mind, I have made my major characters different from JKR--they are Snape, Harry, Aria, and Remus. The rest are supporting characters, which is why you don't see too much of them--sorry, otherwise I'd be rewriting POA and that's not what I want to do--it'd be pointless since JKR's done it already, I take the major incidents in her book and alter them to fit my own universe. As for Aria, I feel that perhaps I need to clarify a few things: 1) she is A major character, so she shares the spotlight with Harry, Sev, & Remus and is one of the things that make this an AU fic. 2) she is NOT fanatastically beautiful, if I gave that impression i will do a rewrite, because what I wa sintending was that she was ordinary but her smile made her a pretty girl--which to me does not mean a model. Her looks are secondary, which is why I do not really mention them beyond ch 1. All the guys were like "oohh a new girl!" they did not fall in love with her. Yes, harry likes her, that IS intentional. 3) the only boy who tries to go out with her is Draco whom she dislikes because he's an arrogant bigoted snob, there is no mention of anyone else trying to date her. The parallel here is James/Lily/Severus, where Lily rejects the popular James and chooses Sev it's the same with Aria rejecting Draco and choosing Harry. History repeats itself. 4) Aria's past is similar to Harry's--she can empathize with him the way no one else except Sev can, he needs that. Like Harry as well is her will to overcome what has happened to her. 5) Remus should defend Aria, she is family as Sev will defend Harry because he is family. Sev treats Aria the way Remus treats Harry, as a relative, but he will get on her ass too in future chapters when she steps out of line, it simply hasn't happend yet. And Sev is hard on Harry because he is his son and that is how he is, especially because Harry was favored by Dumbledore and the rest of the staff the previous years. 6) Aria's powers are more curse than blessing--people hate her for being a slipper, it is a disadvantage, unlike the Marauders Animagus gifts, so I wouldn't consider her powers such an asset, she is an outcast her only friends are Harry and Mandy. 7) Aria is not sweet-tempered, she is feisty and that temper will get her in trouble soon enough, and she will pay for it like Harry. 8) the tranfer student, what's wrong with it? I didn't want her to come from britain--JKR's characters all do and I wanted mine to be something different--hence America, with wandless magic, since I'm American and I can relate better to certain things, references and background. It is my understanding that a Mary Sue character is one that is flat, a cardboard archetype, with no background or is missish or perfect. James fits that persona--rich kid, handsome, ultra popular, all the girls want him, is an Animagus, gets away with murder cause he's Dumbledore's pet, is Head boy, walks off with the most popular girl, and then dies the perfect hero's death. Again, you are entitled to your own opinion, and as another writer once said, you can't please everyone.
Author's Response: Glad you liked it, although Hermione and Ron aren't as major player sin my stories as they are in canon--I only follow canon so far, since this is an AU fic. |
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