the Ginger Cat
Slytherin!
When Harry wakes one morning, he discovers a badly injured Snape in his living room, and tries to hide him. But Petunia discovers them and reveals a secret she has kept for thirteen years--one that will change the course of Harry's life forever, and Severus's as well. AU, pre-GOF.
Takes Place: 4th summer
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Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Kidnapped, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Membership status: Member
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Reviews by dancingkatz
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Alcohol Use, Character Death, Physical Punishment Spanking, Profanity, Violence
Chapters: 35 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 19 Aug 2008 / 15 May 2008
Series: Prince Manor - Challenges: None
Chapters: 35 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 19 Aug 2008 / 15 May 2008
Series: Prince Manor - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 24: The Dark Bond | 15 Jul 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- This was a fan-ta-bu-lous chapter. The battle of wills with Voldemort, Lily's last stand, the explaination of the protection on Harry, Draco acting like a worried (big) brother, Smidgen taking up her real avatar-power in the dreamscape, and Sev being the worried Dad... it was all great! And Draco's last line: "What is wrong with you, Harry? You get permission to sleep all afternoon and you're acting like it's a punishment. Are you sure you're a real teenager?" was hysterically funny. You done great!
Author's Response:
Thank you very much! I tried to give Harry a memory of his mother that didn't just have her dying, but showing she was a tough witch in her own right who protected what she loved best before falling in battle to a much stronger opponent. If she hadn't been so weakened from the Mother Guardianship spell, she might have given old Voldy quite a fight, she was no pushover. And I thought it sweet Draco would go all big brother like on Harry, since God knows he needs one to keep him from throwing himself headfirst into danger. Smidgen is actually pretty powerful on her own ground, as you saw, her size is deceptive, she has a great deal of magic like all the fae creatures.
Glad you liked that last line, it was an improvisation! :)
| Title: Chapter 31: Unexpected Tidings | 05 Aug 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- Me, me, me! Put the Malfoys away somewhere they'll forget what sunlight ever looked like!
Yay for Siri! Growing up at last. I admit I was as worried as Harry about the big mutt's reaction.
Chicken pot pie? Yum! Now I'm starving!
Bravo on another excellent chapter!
Author's Response:
I agree! They need to be put away forever in a deep dark hole. With lots of spiders! *shudders*
Yes, Siri had to grow up sometime, and better late than never.
I could go for a chicken pot pie right about now too!
| Title: Chapter 32: The Scales Of Justice | 06 Aug 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- Whew! That was an exciting chapter! Well done!
Well, I have have one quibble. In Britain, trial attorneys are called barristers and attorneys who do real estate, business and family law are called solicitors. In this case Mr. Dresden and Mr. Knave would be barristers. Also, the prosecutor is known as the King or Queen's Counsel and the wizarding equivalent could possibly be known as Minister's Counsel, I suppose.
Pardon my going on about it but I have a friend who is a barrister and lived in England for six years so Americanisms in HP fics tend to stand out to me.
Terminology aside, this was wonderfully written; you kept the energy and tension up through the whole chapter and I was chewing my fingernails as I waited for the jury's verdict. Again, most excellently done!
Author's Response: Thanks for the info, I had no idea what legal proceedings were like over there today, I'm more familiar with British history, like during the Elizabethian era. This chapter was very tense, as it had to be, since I didn't want to ruin the dramatic effect of the verdict. The next chapter will be more angsty, with some humor thrown in to balance it out.
| Title: Chapter 34: Medallion | 14 Aug 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- A wonderful, wonderful, wonderful chapter! As I had no clue who the Manor would pick, I can't say I was surprised at the choice but it is exactly right.
An O in HOM, Who-hoo! Way to go Harry! Draco's idea of asking Dumbledore about combining the two tests is a good one, now we'll just have to see if the Headmaster is agreeable. Albus might do it just to try to get Harry's trust and affection back (not that I expect Harry to trust him ever again).
Great job!
Author's Response:
I had toyed with the idea, briefly, of making them both heir, but then decided that wouldn't work, so it came down to Harry, since he was the one who really loved Prince Manor with everything he had.
Harry really studied hard for that grade, which is why Sev gave it to him. Dumbeldore might indeed let it stand as a kind of apology or a flag of truce between him and the Snapes. But they probably won't ever trust him again.
| Title: Chapter 35: Farewell to Prince Manor | 19 Aug 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- Sequel, please! With sugar and chocolate and caramel and whatever else your heart desires on top of it!
I so enjoyed this entire story. I love the idea of Harry and Draco being brothers and think its terribly sweet that Draco sent Hermione Athena as a present from a secret admirer.
I'd really like to see Harry's "unveiling" to the school, Draco admitting to Hermione that he is her secret admirer, some father son bonding scenes in the dungeons, Smidgen interacting with someof Hogwarts less material denizens (sic her on Peeves, please?), Harry and Draco defending each other... oh, the potential!
You write so well and I really, really love your characterizatons, especially Severus. Thank you for such a great story.
hugs,
Dancingkatz
Author's Response:
Yes I agree, this story has a lot of potential for a sequel and my crazy brain is already spinning with ideas for a plot line. I'm thinking maybe an alternate ending for the tournament and then a return to the manor in the summer. Smidgen would be having the time of her life fighting with Peeves. And draco and Harry could get into oh so much trouble fighting with each other's housemates, couldn't they? Poor Sev would probably have a stroke.
Sev's my favorite to write about, but I love Harry and Draco now too.
While you're waiting for the sequel, there's always Angel and Shadows to read.
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Snape is left dying in the Shrieking Shack after giving Harry his memories convinced that Harry is going to his death. When Snape dies, he is given a chance to send his soul backwards in time seven years to give Harry a chance for a better (and hopefully longer) life. Will switch back and fourth between being Snape centered and Harry centered.
Takes Place: None - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Slytherin!Harry, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Takes Place: None - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Slytherin!Harry, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Rated: K+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect
Chapters: 12 - Completed: No - Updated: 05 Jun 2009 / 17 May 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 12 - Completed: No - Updated: 05 Jun 2009 / 17 May 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 1: Prologue & Chapter 1 | 10 Jul 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- Second chances are wonderful things so long as the person takes advantage of them. It looks to me like Sev is going to take advantage of his second chance. I liked how he explained his "change of heart" in particular. Very Slytherin of him to use the actual truth even if he's the only one to know that it is the truth. I also liked the little ocmments about hte other staff members and the description of what each would be doing in the staff meeting. I couldn't help but chuckle at that.
That said, I found a few spots where you used the wrong form of a word or the wrong spelling in the case of sound-alike words ("I'm bear a degree of responsibility for Harry..." should have been I bear a degree of responsibility for Harry..." and "only Dumbledore new about..." instead of "only Dumbledore knew about..."). I don't know if you rely on your word processor's spellcheck exclusively, but you might want to have someone else proofread before posting as more than a few of these kind of errors can throw your reader out of the story.
The storyline is a really nice idea and I like how you are handling the character of Severus. I look forward to seeing how he deals with the Dursleys when he goes to get Harry.
Response to Burned Hedwig Challenge... After blowing up his aunt, Harry's uncle abuses him farther than his mental capacity can stand. Even his cousin is concerned, and sends a letter by way of owl "To Whom It May Concern" pleading for his cousins sake for help. But Harry needs more than to be taken from his family. He needs to gain the will to live.
Takes Place: 4th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption, Physical Impairment, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Healer Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Takes Place: 4th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption, Physical Impairment, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Healer Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect, Profanity, Self-harm, Suicide Themes, Torture
Chapters: 7 - Completed: No - Updated: 19 Feb 2010 / 08 Jun 2008
Series: None - Challenges: Burnt Hedwig to the Rescue
Chapters: 7 - Completed: No - Updated: 19 Feb 2010 / 08 Jun 2008
Series: None - Challenges: Burnt Hedwig to the Rescue
| Title: Chapter 2: Sleep Disturbed | 18 Jul 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- Excellent chapter! Good for Dudley! At last he's starting to become aware of the needsand feelings and conditions of other people. I wouldn't expect him to turn into a saint but this is encouraging. And now that Severus is there Harry has a chance.
I really liked the way you handled the descriptions and the conversations. I especially liked the way you showed Severus' frustration when Hedwig arrived in the middle of the night. Of course, he wouldn't necessarily know that Hedwig was Harry's owl so his assumption that it was Dumbledore pestering him was perfectly reasonable. Bravo!
Author's Response: thanks, i'm glad you liked it. i'm glad you liked my dialogue and my descriptions... and severus is, of course, severus.
When Fred & George stole the Marauder's Map in their first year, they didn't expect the secrets it would reveal years later. How will Harry & Snape adjust to the new discoveries & how will it effect the wizarding world? AU, canon through OoTP. SEVERITUS.
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Teacher Snape > Professor Snape, Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape > Severitus Challenge
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Teacher Snape > Professor Snape, Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape > Severitus Challenge
Rated: T
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Warnings: None
Chapters: 18 - Completed: No - Updated: 15 Jun 2011 / 11 Jun 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 18 - Completed: No - Updated: 15 Jun 2011 / 11 Jun 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 8: Mischief Managed | 21 Jul 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- Very fun! I loved the riddles and it is certainly something the Marauders would do! Don't want to make it too easy for anyone to access the map, after all. Lovely writing and descriptions. Bravo!
Author's Response: Thank you! :)
Harry hears something interesting on Halloween night...
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys
Chapters: 1 - Completed: No - Updated: 11 Jun 2008 / 11 Jun 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 1 - Completed: No - Updated: 11 Jun 2008 / 11 Jun 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 1: Crescendo | 20 Jun 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- Nicely done! I always figured that Snape had to be a musician (piano or cello were my picks for his instrument). When Harry said, "I can't hear my mum screaming when you play," it made me cry. I look forward to the next chapter and have added this story to my favourites.
Author's Response:
Oh, wow, it made you cry? I'm honored! And yeah, I've always thought of Snape as a musical type too.
Thanks so much for adding this to your favorites! You've made me super happy!
-Elise
| Title: Chapter 1: Crescendo | 10 Jul 2008 |
| Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) |
- Please, sir may I have some more?
OOC or not I love this and want to see more of this.