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Harry's life is turned around and upside down when a late night visitor from the future tells him the unthinkable. Now he must convince Snape to teach him Occlumency, get along with Draco Malfoy and survive through what Voldemort has planned for him.
Takes Place: 5th summer
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Snape flavour: None
Tags: Kidnapped, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Membership status: Member
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Reviews by JolisGSD
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect, Torture, Violence
Chapters: 27 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 23 Jan 2009 / 09 Jan 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 27 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 23 Jan 2009 / 09 Jan 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: The Rules | 13 May 2008 |
| Reviewer: JolisGSD (Signed) |
- That was very funny where Draco was dragged through the Great Hall. After all, why should he be able to sit with the Slytherins for dinner all the time, etc., and Harry have to make do?
I'm wondering if part of your plot is for Harry to end up making more friends with students from other houses.
Good story.
Author's Response:
No, making friends from other houses is not really apart of the plot but it's extra, :) Thanks for reviewing!
| Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: With The Snakes | 29 May 2008 |
| Reviewer: JolisGSD (Signed) |
- This was a good chapter. I was delighted to see Harry's attitude about the prank -- he's maturing a lot!
Looking forward to more of the story.
Author's Response: I like my Harry acting all mature, (smile). The temper thing in Ootp got me kind of irrataited, lol. Thanks for reviewing!
| Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Gryffindor Strikes Back | 16 Jun 2008 |
| Reviewer: JolisGSD (Signed) |
- Harry and Draco are making slow progress towards getting along better, so that's good. I still don't like Malfoy though.
I'm curious if the Snape/Harry interaction will increase.
Good chapter.
Author's Response:
Lol, I'm not going to try to change the way you think about Malfoy. I'll continue with the story and MAYBE you will grow to like him...or maybe ypou will get sdo kmad you want to kill the little ferret, :). Yes,Snape is comimg soon.
Thanks.
| Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14: The Attack | 09 Jul 2008 |
| Reviewer: JolisGSD (Signed) |
- Very nice chapter.
What a good way to let Malfoy see how Harry really lives with the Dursleys!
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!
A near tragedy and a shocking discovery lead two bitter enemies to much soul searching and eventual acceptance of each other. Much angst along the way though. Some Ginny and Harry.
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Alcohol Use, Character Death, Profanity, Violence
Chapters: 43 - Completed: No - Updated: 01 Aug 2010 / 14 Jan 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 43 - Completed: No - Updated: 01 Aug 2010 / 14 Jan 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: The Filial Connection | 19 Feb 2008 |
| Reviewer: JolisGSD (Signed) |
- I was so excited to see that you had updated, but after getting a couple of paragraphs into the chapter I realized that I had already read this chapter on another site. Darn!! The suspense is killing me.
Part of me wants Harry just to tell Snape to go jump in a lake. I'm sure this is hard for Snape, but I'm not feeling really sympathetic towards him because he is still being so nasty towards Harry. That comment about Harry's coma being nice for him, making Harry pretty much beg to go outside, hexing him, etc., etc. I'm curious as to why Snape made the "your coma was nice for me" comment -- is it just because he's a nasty git or is he worried about Harry and just can't express it in any other way? Even so, he needs to improve fast. Harry doesn't need a father figure who is abusive, no matter if the father cares about him or not.
I hope your muses are good to you. I need to find out what Ginny can do for Harry!
Thanks for the story so far.
Author's Response:
Nice to hear from you.
You are right. Harry certainly does not need another abusive relative. Snape's 'your coma was nice for me' comment was really his ill tempered way of letting harry know that Sev finds him incredibly annoying. And as far as the hexing in this chapter--he was feeling very hard done by because he had finally found himself in the unwanted position of having to explain a situation to Harry that he has not really come to terms with himself.
He certainly does need to get it together though or Harry will never accept him.
My muses are being kind to me at the moment you will be pleased to hear, so hopefully an update is definitely on the horizon. (I hope).
Hope to hear from you again.
Lesley
| Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18: The Great Escape | 23 Feb 2008 |
| Reviewer: JolisGSD (Signed) |
- This is a good chapter. Snape finally has come to his senses and realizes what horrible things he has done to Harry, so now he has a reason to work to make a good relationship. Because I'm not as nice as Harry, I hope Harry really makes him work for it!
Nice characterization of the Weasleys.
Also, you've got a good storyline going -- I can't wait to find out why Harry has gone to Godric's Hollow. I hpe you let us in on his feelings and thoughts after he came out of his catatonic state.
Good job. Keep writing please!
Linda
Author's Response:
Well, Snape will never be a an easy character but the man does have brains, so it is easy for him to see his mistakes. And they were monumental. Don't worry, things won't become all lovey-dovey between the two combatants.
Glad you like the Weasleys. I love Arthur.
Godrics Hollow? Harry may not be catatonic now, but he is certainly not firing on all cylinders. This trip was not bloody-mindedness, it was instinct.
Thanks for your kind words. It really is a great incentive to hear compliments from my readers.
Lesley
| Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23: Beware Werewolves with Secrets! | 06 May 2008 |
| Reviewer: JolisGSD (Signed) |
- Harry and Severus are very clearly not going to have any easy time developing a father/son relationship!
That's good that you've got Lupin back on staff. If Severus can sink his pride, Lupin may be able to help him and Harry realize that their relationship can be of great benefit to both of them.
Good chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks for you review JoliGSD,
You're absolutely right. The path ahead is going to be a very rocky one for my two heroes. But I promise, they will get there...one day.
I couldn't have a story without Remus. I know he has been scarce up to now, but I always intended that he have a major role. I love him too much to leave him out. And as Sev is traversing that very rocky path, he may find that he does need Remus's help and advice. Harry is quite a handful after all. Two heads are better than one, at least when it comes to dealing with certain unruly behaviours from a 16 year old, headstrong boy.
Keep reading and enjoying.
~Lesley~
| Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24: Pickled brains and Sauteed Liver. | 20 May 2008 |
| Reviewer: JolisGSD (Signed) |
- This chapter showed that Snape really is going to try. Hopefully he will start to actually like Harry sometime soon. You showed that there will be benefit to Harry in having someone to take care of him, but I'm still not convinced that Snape can do a good job of it. I think Harry needs affection as much as guidance and Snape still doesn't seem like he can actually feel affection for Harry.
So it will be interesting to see how you continue their story.
Author's Response:
Oh, I don't know. Sev is not going to fall in love overnight, but the fact he is beginning to worry aand care about Harry is an indication that he is starting to feel something other than hatred.
I hope you stick around to see how things play out.
~Lesley~
| Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26: Severus Snape and the Foolish Old Man. | 14 Jun 2008 |
| Reviewer: JolisGSD (Signed) |
- this is the third time I've typed this review because the site would accept my previous attempts. Uurrgggg!!
But I'm persevering because I definitely want you to know that I enjoyed the chapter -- indeed, I'm enjoying the whole story.
I particularly liked your scenes with Albus and Severus and the cursed ring in this chapter. Your explanation of the curse was so much better than canon.
I also enjoyed the interaction between Severus and Harry in the potions lab. Harry's awe at Severus' potion making was very well done and makes me hope that perhaps now Harry will start enjoying potions and give it the time and effort to excell. I always felt bad that in canon Severus basically ruined all of Harry's interest in potions. The fact that Severus was patient when teaching Harry to stir and that Harry was so very careful to do it right is also a hopeful sign both for their relationship and for potions.
Good job.
Author's Response:
Thanks JolisGSD, for a lovely, indepth review. And sorry about your troubles getting the review out. Aren't computers the pits sometimes?
I'm rapt that you liked my explanation of the curse And the whole Sev and Albus interaction. I love writing the two of them playing off each other.
And Harry is certainly coming to appreciate Sev as more than just that man who by sheer accident can call himself my father. Of course, he worries about Sev being summoned, but HArry is that type of kid and he would worry about anyone in that situation if he knew they really diodn't want to be there. But to actually begin to appreciate his father for his skills, especially when he has had no interest before, is a big step forward.
I agree with you that Harry could have been interested in potions if Snape had of given him a chance instead of shooting him down in flames at every turn. He certainly started out wanting to excel. And Harry certainly didn't want to let Sev down by stuffing up, not when he knew how important the potion must be.
Until next time,
~Lesley~
| Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: Setback. | 29 Jun 2008 |
| Reviewer: JolisGSD (Signed) |
- I laughed and laughed at your interaction between Severus and Albus. That was brilliant when he woke Minerva up so that she could chastise and control Albus since Severus couldn't.
The interaction between Severus and Harry was interesting. I can see where Harry is starting to grow up a little and realizing that he needs to think before he speaks. I wonder, though, if Severus isn't expecting way too much if he thinks that Harry can so quickly trust him after 5 years of verbal abuse, taunting, etc. Harry has lots to forgive and overcome in his relationship with Severus, whereas pretty much all that Severus has to overlook is his anger at James and the fact that he's been projecting James onto Harry. It's nice that Severus wants to try to build a good relationship, but he is still not willing to do some things (like comforting Harry about Black), so I think he needs to remember that he's the adult and that he has not given Harry too many reasons to respect him or think that Snape really wants what is best for him.
Author's Response:
Thanks Tabitha's mum. I'm glad you enjoyed the interactions at the beginning of the chapter.
You are so right of course about Sev. Harry needs to take a good, hard look at himself, but at least he knows where he has gone wrong. Sev has not a clue that fault lies with him also, other than knowing he has no patience. Duh! He has got to get into 'family' mode. He and Harry are still separate entities, they are not a family.
Just saying I am sorry and I will TRY to be a father is not enough. He has to WANT to be a father much more than just trying. He has to realise that harry needs much more than security and shelter.
Till next time,
~Lesley~