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To Have a Father by Crystal Cove starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 264]
During the summer before his third year at Hogwarts, Harry somehow ends up in a reality where Severus Snape is his father. AU, Sevitus — Includes Sirius!

Takes Place: 3rd summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Rated: K - Warnings: None
Chapters: 30 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 17 Sep 2009 / 20 Aug 2007
Series: To Have a Father - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 14: Illness 08 Aug 2008
Reviewer: trust severus spy (Signed)
    Where Sev is telling Sirius “You will refrain yourself from referring to me as your lovebug, Black...,” there's a small correction needed.

    He could say one of two phrases.
    Either: "You will refrain from calling me" (WITHOUT using the word 'yourself');
    Or change the verb: "You will RESTRAIN yourself from calling me".

    "Restrain" is a reflexive verb, meaning it gets used with a "-self"word (oneself, yourself, himself, etc.).

    The verb "refrain" is not reflexive, so it does not get used with a helping "self" word.

    You're a good writer with good ideas. Not being critical here--just helping you fine-tune your skills. Forgive my impertinence; I mean it in a friendly way.

    Author's Response: Well thank you, I really appreciate that! I'll fix that error as soon as I can and again, thank you for pointing it out to me.

Title: Chapter 15: Storytelling 08 Aug 2008
Reviewer: trust severus spy (Signed)
    I REALLY like the backstory you've given this Severus. It's believable, and helps shape our understanding of him. Good job!

Title: Chapter 20: Strange 08 Aug 2008
Reviewer: trust severus spy (Signed)
    Thanks for this most recent chapter!

Title: Chapter 21: Travel 12 Aug 2008
Reviewer: trust severus spy (Signed)
    Hope Harry gets back to his original universe soon!

Title: Chapter 24: Miracle 28 Aug 2008
Reviewer: trust severus spy (Signed)
    Ooh, the suspense!
    But before we find out, an observation. While in the French language it would be the other ending, nevertheless in English, the words end in -ENT and -ENCE: existent; existence. Also, it's "niece".
    Now: back to the story!

Past Featured Story Better Be Slytherin! by jharad17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 737]
As a first year, Harry is sorted into Slytherin instead of Gryffindor, and no one is more surprised than his new Head of House.

Takes Place: 1st Year - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Slytherin!Harry, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Rated: K+ - Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Alcohol Use, Neglect, Profanity, Violence
Chapters: 51 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 18 Mar 2009 / 21 Aug 2007
Series: None - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37 18 Jul 2008
Reviewer: trust severus spy (Signed)
    Great chapter!

    Author's Response: Thanks!

Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 42 19 Jul 2008
Reviewer: trust severus spy (Signed)
    The correct verb in your sentence, "Either by enslaving the boy or by leeching the magic from his core" should be LEACHING, not "leeching". It's a process of extraction, not bleeding something out.

    Wonderful, wonderful story. You are one of the handful of authors who are able to maintain the canon feel of the HP characters. I love your work, am extremely glad you updated, and look forward to more! (Soon, if possible!, hint hint!)

    Author's Response: Thanks for the review!  I'm not sure of the verb correction, honestly -- I was going for a verb that meant Voldie would act like a leech and suck the magic out of Harry.  But leaching works, too.  Hmm.  I hope to have another chapter done soon, but right now I'm working on one for "Before the Dawn."

Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23 07 Aug 2008
Reviewer: trust severus spy (Signed)
    Harry's rage and fury finally bursting out, his house-mates' concern for him ALL triggering Severus' realization--FINALLY!--make this one of your best chapters ever. Great job.

Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 43 08 Aug 2008
Reviewer: trust severus spy (Signed)
    What a lovely way to depict The Mirror of Erised: including Severus.
    I also like the natural way Harry and Ron seem to be starting to become friends.
    Well done, well enjoyed, well appreciated!

    Author's Response: Thanks!  I am trying to make Harry and Ron be more civil, at least.  We'll see how it works out.

Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 47 12 Nov 2008
Reviewer: trust severus spy (Signed)
    Oh, I hope they do reconcile--I get as moody about it as both of them do, when they aren't getting along!

    By the way, excellent job weaving canon "Stone" plotline in with your Slytherin one. A "10" for you!

    Author's Response: Thanks!  A reconciliation is on order; we'll see if it gets here on time. :)


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