Slytherin!
Unable to deal with the pain and loss he felt during the third task; Harry slowly startes to fall apart,the others around him oblivious to it all. The loneliness continues to eat him up until one day, Harry finally snaps. Who will be there save him now and help him pick up the pieces?
Takes Place: 5th Year
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Snape flavour: None
Tags: Resorting, Slytherin!Harry
Categories: Healer Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Membership status: Member
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Reviews by Mervoparkite
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Character Death, Neglect, Profanity, Self-harm, Suicide Themes, Violence
Chapters: 38 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 28 Jun 2014 / 11 May 2012
Series: None - Challenges: Pushed Too Far
Chapters: 38 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 28 Jun 2014 / 11 May 2012
Series: None - Challenges: Pushed Too Far
| Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: What do you Believe In? | 19 May 2012 |
| Reviewer: Mervoparkite (Signed) |
- Excellent extension of the last chapter. Thank you for not holding on to it and making us wait . . . Hmm, do you have another one hidden in your back pocket--this still feels like a cliffie!
Thanks for sharing.
V.
Author's Response:
Lol...I was causing a near riot lol
And you welcome, glad you enjoyed it..
Lol does it...oops..but sadly no I do not it..it'll be only here tomorow..I'm doing this one chapter a day thing...or at least 4 reviews to a chapater before I put the next one on lol
| Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: Freedom comes at a Price | 19 May 2012 |
| Reviewer: Mervoparkite (Signed) |
- Another powerful chapter. I figured that the doors would open once Harry was incapacitated-I'm glad Albus was on the ball and there as soon as the castle let him in.
So, Now what?
Thanks for the surprise update.
V.
Author's Response: Lol thanks, and yea the magic fell because he himself was so close to death
| Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: How to save a Life | 21 May 2012 |
| Reviewer: Mervoparkite (Signed) |
- How amazing! What a wonderfully composed chapter. Without making them all "caricatures" you have made them all real and accept their role in the events. It wasn't pretty, but a wonderful balance of "what's happening" and "what's going on inside."
Thanks for the update.
V.
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it, and I'm glad it came across good as well.
| Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Sticks and Stones | 22 May 2012 |
| Reviewer: Mervoparkite (Signed) |
- Excellent job of depicting the effects of bullying on the victims.
Once again you have an excellently crafted chapter. BTW I love Neville.
A bit of constructive crit-
In your "5th" paragraph you write:
Neville looked down at the hand he was holding, though he never envisioned using a gun like Harry, he himself had thought about it too.
You may want to restructure this sentence. It might flow better if you were to write something along the lines of:
Neville looked down where he was still holding Pansy's hand and thought about their situation. Although he never envisioned using a gun, like Harry had, he had thought about ending things as well.
Your original sentence seems to contradict itself when you are not specific enough at the end of the sentence.
Looking forward to your next update. Good luck on your finals.
V.
Author's Response:
Cool...Thanks for that, I've corrected it. and I'm glad you liked it
I love Neville too he was always so adorable lol
| Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15: Uncle who? | 27 May 2012 |
| Reviewer: Mervoparkite (Signed) |
- Oh, A snowball in the face sounds rather good at this very moment--Hot day at the Ball Park--But, since I enjoyed your chapter, I guess I don't get one.
I guess it's easy to tell that Harry isn't quite balanced yet--he took "the plan" way to easily. And I think he want to enjoy everyone's pain a bit to much.
Rather like the reaction to "Uncle Severus" as well.
V.
Author's Response:
Lol its been cold here so I felt a snowball would work..guss not lol
I'm glad your still into the story and like it of couse.
He's being a bit sadist....he couldnt do away with them so to speak, but he can have this one pleasure..Harry is most defintily NOT healed...he's barely hanging on to his sanity.
I figured everyone would need a bit of humor in this angst ridden story. Thanks
| Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: Emotional Turmoil | 28 May 2012 |
| Reviewer: Mervoparkite (Signed) |
- Very well writen--thanks for sharing.
One note--it would make it easier to read if there were some sort of breaks between POV's took me a moment to catch up to each jump.
Have a good holiday!
V.
Author's Response:
glad you liked it and Thanks.
I put little markers that tells you for different point of views..i hope that helps
you as well, hope its great.
| Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: Emotional Turmoil | 29 May 2012 |
| Reviewer: Mervoparkite (Signed) |
- Yep, that helps!
great job.
V.
Author's Response: tHANKS
| Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24: You don't Understand | 06 Jun 2012 |
| Reviewer: Mervoparkite (Signed) |
- Can someone (maybe sev) PLEASE punch Sirius and Remus in the face? (not that I usually advocate violence, but REALLY!)
Thanks for the update!
V.
| Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: I'm not as strong as they think I am | 09 Jun 2012 |
| Reviewer: Mervoparkite (Signed) |
- Excellent chapter. Thanks for posting.
All I can say is somebody best start looking for Hermionie and Neville right quick. Or there is going to be more trouble on their hands.
V.
Author's Response:
Dont worry they will see...Hermione is...usually good at putting things together..shes ashamed to tell anyone that shes breaking apart.
Neville..will have help, Harry doesnt give him a choice lol
You welcome, thanks for R and R..I appreciate it. :)
| Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28: I was always Alone | 11 Jun 2012 |
| Reviewer: Mervoparkite (Signed) |
- Thanks for the update! Seeing one always makes me smile.
V
Author's Response:
Thanks...Seeing you review makes me smile..so I guess we both win lol