the Black Cat
Ravenclaw!
Harry cant swim. It's a secret he has yet to share with any of his friends at Hogwarts. However, regular meet-ups with a familiar looking Mer-creature at the lake soon provide him with a teacher. As well as a friend.
Takes Place: 1st Year
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Snape flavour: Canon Snape, Snape Comforts, Snape is Kind, Snape is Secretive
Tags: Creature!fic, Disguised!Snape
Categories: Healer Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Membership status: Administrator
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Reviews by Jan_AQ
Rated: K+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect, Out of Character
Chapters: 6 - Completed: No - Updated: 26 May 2022 / 10 Jul 2019
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 6 - Completed: No - Updated: 26 May 2022 / 10 Jul 2019
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 1: Prologue | 15 Jul 2019 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
- Love it! Can't wait to see what Snape's merman form is like. Cool premise! Great writing so far. Great descriptions. Everyone is very much in character. Fabulous start.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I was so nervous writing and posting this chapter thinking I hadn’t quite got the characters right yet (especially Snape) but thank you for the kind words! It’s really boosted my confidence and given me more motivation to continue writing this story. Thanks again for the lovely review!
| Title: Chapter 2: Chapter One | 19 Jul 2019 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
- Noooo! Poor Harry. Of course Draco probably doesn't know Harry can't swim. I really liked using Draco as the antagonist. It makes the scene similar to what Snape had to go through, being outnumbered, and bullied. Good development of plot and movement in the story line. I liked how Draco was a bully, but multidimensional. I picked up how it hinted where his bullying ways came from, parroting what another likely said to him...an adult probably his father to Draco, and to house elves. Thanks for the update!
Author's Response: Thank you! I’m glad my efforts to make a similar parallel between Harry and Snape’s experience with bullying by the lake didn’t go unnoticed- although I only noticed it myself as I was writing it! Yes! I always felt that a lot of Draco’s behaviour in the books/films was due to having learnt things from the people he grew up around. Thank you for reviewing! Hopefully a new chapter will be on the way soon!
| Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Two | 20 Aug 2019 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
- Hahaha! I love it. Of course Snape wouldn't rescue Harry right away. I loved his thoughts and actions - very in character. The descriptions are fantastic. I wonder though why Harry isn't coughing and sputtering after breathing in water. Other than that, I enjoyed this chapter immensely. Thanks for writing and posting!
Author's Response: Thank you!!! I’m glad you enjoyed this chapter! Oh good, I was worried that my version of snape wasn’t in character (dealing with a mer-snape is proving to be difficult in places ahahaha) oh I’m sorry! It is rather confusing at the moment with the constant jumping of POV with characters, hopefully that will simmer down soon enough now that Harry and snape have met up again. But Harry being seemingly fine when he wakes up will hopefully be explained in snapes POV in the next chapter! I am going somewhere with this story! trust me ahahaha. Thank you again for reading and reviewing!!
| Title: A Boys Tail | 27 May 2020 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
- Good chapter! I really liked the room of forgotten things. Cool that Hogwarts had a swim team once. Poor Harry, having his swimming dreams squashed down though. I enjoyed the pace and set up of this chapter very much. I just wish Harry could have told the truth to Ron, at least that Malfoy shoved him into the lake.
| Title: A Boys Tail | 27 May 2020 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
- Cute! I'm glad that Harry has an idea of where Neville's remembrall is, but I wonder if it was placed in the lost and found room or not.
I bet that Harry will take the opportunity to visit the room again and get a pair of swim trunks.
This chapter was interesting, had a good diversion of the boys and potions class. The editing was a little rough, there were several mistakes with missing capitalization but nothing else major.
Not much happened in this chapter. It's okay as a transition chapter. I would of liked more pov from Snape's perspective.
I found it a little strange that Hermione is friends with Ron and Harry already - I can't remember if they had an incident with the troll yet. It is also a little strange that the merman incident is enough to distract Harry from learning about magic. I mean, it's magic! Maybe it would distract him from homework, but isn't magic cool and interesting enough to keep the attention of an 11 year old boy?
Otherwise, the story is good. I'm glad that you were able to update. Thanks!
Author's Response: Ah! You’ve hit the nail on the head there. Harry will find any excuse to go back to that room, whether Neville’s remembrall is there or not ahahaha! Ah yes. My editing isn’t too great at the moment! I’m having to work on my phone because my laptop is broken and writing is tedious on here. Thank you for pointing this out to me though! I’ll make sure to go back and edit my mistakes at some point. Ah yes you’re right. Snape pov is definitely needed. His POV will certainly be more frequent in the next upcoming chapters, but perhaps I should re-edit this chapter and include it here too. Ah you’re right! I this story is not too canon-compliant with philosophers stone, so I guess Hermione already being friends is quite confusing. I was still going for early stage friendship but I don’t think it’s really coming across that way at all! I’m going to have to tweak that. Thank you so much for the lovely review and the constructive criticism! It is so welcome, especially considering I’m still quite new to writing! much love x
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Ginny's is not the only valentine Harry gets. After eating the chocolate gifted to him by an anonymous admirer, Harry realizes he is very much in love with none other than the handsome Gildery Lockhart. But will Gilderoy love him back? Why is Hermione suddenly in love with Snape? And who is the mysterious blonde beauty Snape has been seen with? (Warning: Mention of rape. But no worries, it is not overly dark, and no inappropriate relationships between students and teachers actually happen.)
Takes Place: 2nd Year - Snape flavour: Canon Snape
Tags: None
Categories: Healer Snape
Takes Place: 2nd Year - Snape flavour: Canon Snape
Tags: None
Categories: Healer Snape
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Character Death, Out of Character, Rape
Chapters: 17 - Completed: No - Updated: 03 Aug 2021 / 06 Aug 2019
Series: None - Challenges: Teacher Attack!
Chapters: 17 - Completed: No - Updated: 03 Aug 2021 / 06 Aug 2019
Series: None - Challenges: Teacher Attack!
| Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 | 12 Aug 2019 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
- Oh boy. Great start!! Poor Harry. I bet Hermione is just tricking him. I’m loving the set up to get Snape’s help.
Author's Response: Yes! Hermione realized he's not himself and doesn't want to trigger any aggression while she takes him to get help. And the love potion makes Harry very willing to believe that other people are in love. (It was never outright stated what love potions do, but seeing how Ron didn't think it the slightest bit strange to be in love with a girl he'd never met, and was happy to drink something Slughorn gave him to "make him braver" or whatever excuse they gave, I figured love potions make people very open to manipulation in general)
| Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 | 12 Aug 2019 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
- I want to know if Lockhart actually went that letter, if he is as bad as Snape and Hermione think he is. So far, the story seems to be setting up for some sort of confrontation, where Snape can be hero. Harry’s thinking needs to be corrected too. Someone other than Hermione needs to look into what Harry thinks is normal. I think you should continue the story for a couple more chapters. End on some sort of resolution. All in all, I really like your characterizations. Very well done with the dialogue of the characters, every one seems to be in character and very reminiscent of their book versions from The Chamber of Secrets. Very well done.
Author's Response: Thank you! I always try to keep people in character. :) And yeah, I have ideas for more plot. Some things will come to light about Lockhart.
| Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 | 18 Aug 2019 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
- I’m loving this. Harry hardly ever gets to spend time with Hermione’s family in most fanfics. Great original twist! Funny that Hermione’s parents trust her so much as to let her share a room with a boy. Haha but it IS Hermione after all. I bet Snape is on the boat. Dumbledore would never let Harry be away from magical protection for long. Or maybe this is Snape’s ideas? I can’t wait to find out. Thanks for the update!
Author's Response: Exactly, she's Hermione. She's so sensible her parents sometimes wish she got up to more mischief, because when Harry first meets her, she's a bit like a small adult, which her parents feel just isn't healthy. (They don't know she set a teacher on fire in her first year and brewed an illegal potion in second, of course.) I suppose some parents of sensible daughters might distrust the boy in this scenario, but Harry is a sweet and polite child (rather moreso than Ron) and the Grangers know perfectly well that, since Hermione trusts him, she's likely been alone with him at some point in time, anyway. Snape has a completely unrelated reason to be on the boat, which will be revealed in the next chapter. But it's well possible he decided to keep an eye on Harry while he's there.
| Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 | 21 Aug 2019 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
- Ahhh I love it. Rose must be related to Harry! Ahh! Great development. For an original character, I thought she was alright, a little bit insecure, maybe a little bit blank. I would of liked to know more details about her, some quirks in her appearance, a habit that made her seem more real. She kind of feels like a plot device so far, but an intriguing one. I hope to learn more about her. I loved the awkwardness of meeting Snape at the museum. I’m really enjoying this story so far and would love to know what happens next.
Author's Response: Oh no, poor Rose, I never wanted her to be a mere plot device. :( I hope you feel she's more rounded as a person in next chapter. Thanks for your comment!
| Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 | 23 Aug 2019 |
| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) |
- Harry is so clueless, I love it. Fantastic chapter, it had me grinning. I loved all the little details. The only thing that stood out was that Rose wasn't startled when Harry spoke Parseltongue. Either it's a mistake, or her familiarity with the snake language needs to be explained some more. I loved that Snape bought them all ice cream, and slipped up when Harry called him out about not hating him. I really feel like Snape is trying to watch out for Harry, warn him of things in his best interest. Fantastic story and chapter! I'm really loving it so far. Please update when you can.
Author's Response: I imagined Rose to be distracted with the raven, still. Snake noises coming out of a pet shop wouldn't have caught her attention. Snape taught her that parseltongue exists and she doesn't have prejudices against people who can use it, so she is pretty much unfazed when she finds out via Snape's scolding. (Now that you mention it, though, perhaps she should have asked more questions, as one would upon finding out a friend has an amazing skill. I figure she didn't want to risk anyone overhearing her.) Thank you for commenting!