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Reviews by Jan_AQ
A seven-year-old Harriet Potter met Severus Snape on a cold winter day and everything transpires from there.
Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11) - Snape flavour: Snape Comforts, Snape is Cruel, Snape is Kind, Snape is Mean, Snape is Stern Tags: Adoption, Child fic, Girl!Harry, Injured!Harry Categories: Parental Snape > Godfather Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Emotional Abuse, Neglect, Physical Abuse
Chapters: 4 - Completed: No - Updated: 29 Sep 2021 / 21 Sep 2021 Series: None - Challenges: None
Petunia is pretty awful. That poor kid. I'm really glad that Snape was able and willing to show Harriet some magic. That must of been very special. i'm really glad that Snape reassured her about being magic. I really like that Harriet likes glitter too. Totally fits with Harry Potter liking gold and this being the female version. Love it. Thanks for writing this story and staring!
I'm really worried about the frost bite though. Is that going to heal? On her fingers. They might not. I wish Snape had wrapped her in his coat or his body heat. Harriet is no doubt anemic. Poor kid, she clearly needs help. I loved the start! The chapter length was glorious! When Harry was creeping around invisibly after curfew to take a bath with his golden egg, he never expected that he would wake up the next morning in the hospital wing with a charmed pet collar round his neck... But Moody had always been trigger-happy, and when Snape quite literally stumbled over Harry hexed into a staircase, the man wasn't exactly pleased to find him. Will Harry ever get him to take the charm off?
Takes Place: 4th Year - Snape flavour: None Tags: None Categories: Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Rated: K+
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Warnings: None
Chapters: 7 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 08 Dec 2023 / 10 Nov 2021 Series: None - Challenges: None
I love the idea and premise of Harry not being able to sneak around due to a little bell or something. Just how did Snape end up having it on his person? Or did he conjure it? I’m enjoying this story so far and would love to read more! Please update when you can. :) Author's Response: Hi Jan! The next chapter is in the works at the moment, I'm just having some difficulty writing it in a way that will let me wrap the story up in not too many chapters (I have too many on the go!). And though it is a very amusing image to think of Snape just carrying round a little collar with a bell on it, he actually just used a charm which conjures one up. But now you have made me wonder what might make him carry one round with him... Thanks for your review, and I just wanted to say that I have read your story Muggleville a lot (really a lot), and think it's really great, so your comment has made me go all warm and fuzzy :)
I’m really enjoying this story. I loved how Snape caught Harry in the library and paused the collar alarm. The book contents were amusing. Poor Harry. He’s going to be exhausted the next day. Thanks for the update! Author's Response: I agree that it's a bit surprising that all three of them working together couldn't find anything-- but it actually is canonical. I think maybe its a combination of an outdated cataloging system and the fact that they haven't got a solid enough base of knowledge to know where quite where to start. Poor Harry is right-- and the next day will indeed be a lot for him! I've already written the next chapter so it'll be up in a week or so once I plot the final one in case I need to make changes.
Yikes!! Poor Harry. you did a good job showing his immaturity and naivety. Snape is not holding back. Dumbledore seems to want to treat Harry as a child. Interesting contrast of characters. I liked how Harry suggested they call Dobby and Snape did. Everything comes out much faster when people are telling the truth and listening to each other. I enjoyed this chapter. The characterizations and development were spot on.
Haha that was great! Poor Harry. Snape sure is not giving him any leeway at all. Will Harry actually end up punished for any of this? Will his classmates believe what Snape said? Your characterizations, pace, and descriptions are spot on. Poor McGonagall though, being disappointed in Harry. I hope someone tells her the truth soon. Fantastic chapter. I am very much enjoying your updates. Thanks so much for writing and sharing it. Holidays bring with them a mixed bag of emotions. For some, they bring joy. For others: sorrow. But avoiding them outright in a magical castle is nearly impossible.
Takes Place: 1st Year - Snape flavour: Canon Snape Tags: None Categories: Fic Fests > Winter fest 2021, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape, Teacher Snape > Unofficially teaching Snape
Rated: K+
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Warnings: Neglect, Panic attack
Chapters: 1 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 27 Nov 2021 / 27 Nov 2021 Series: None - Challenges: None
The only confusion I had was what year this took place in. It seemed like first year because of the knapsack, but it talked about multiple years. Otherwise, great story! I enjoyed it. Thank you for writing and posting! When the bars on his window are wrenched off by a flying-carful of Weasleys, Harry is glad to be free of the Dursleys. But a malfunctioning Ford Anglia means that the four of them never make it to Ottery St Catchpole-- instead, they crash-land in Severus Snape's garden.
Takes Place: 2nd summer - Snape flavour: None Tags: None Categories: Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Rated: K+
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Warnings: None
Chapters: 4 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 03 Jan 2022 / 27 Nov 2021 Series: None - Challenges: Crashlanding at Spinner's End
Poor George. I hope he gets healed quick. Harry is really going to feel his bruises in the morning. I wonder what Snape has in store for him. Good start! Author's Response: Ooh I hadn't thought that it might have been Dobby, but now you mention it that's a good idea... I must admit I hadn't really thought about why the car broke down. In the book it does start malfunctioning when they are flying to Hogwarts, so I suppose I just moved that up earlier.
I'm surprised Snape didn't give Harry more instructions. Like "Go straight to the bath and then your room." Snape has allowed Harry to do things unattended. Like wait for Dumbledore. I guess he assumes Harry will behave? Or maybe that there isn't anything Harry can mess up? I'm really enjoying this story. thanks for writing and sharing! Author's Response: They were hard on him, weren't they? Reading it back made me realise just how hard they were being-- and perhaps it is being too hard for the level of culpability that Harry has, but it really could have ended awfully. I think that at this point Snape feels that Harry's been pretty well squashed (and he could tell Harry had been crying, too) so didn't see the need to give him more instructions; probably Harry wouldn't have been able to process them, either, since he was pretty well out of it. As for the waiting unattended, I think that Snape just wanted some time free from the "Potter irritant"-- and he weighed up that with the possibility of Harry snooping. Given that he's only there in the summer and maybe the other holidays I don't think that he'd keep too many things of a personal nature in this house, or not in the more public room of the parlour anyway. All he does in there really is read-- and that's where he has tea with anyone who imposes their presence on him. I like to think that he has a nosy old lady as a neighbour so he makes sure to keep that room as uninteresting as possible to thwart her sticky-beaking tendencies. Hmm I like how these reviews get me thinking-- thanks for the comments, and the next and last two chapters will be going up in the next few weeks.
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