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Reviews by Jan_AQ
Harry laid in a heap on the ground with his eyes pressed closed. His hip felt as if it were on fire, and he was certain that his arm was badly broken. Burning pain was radiating down his leg from his hip, and he didn't think he could move even a little.
Takes Place: 7th Year - Snape flavour: Snape Comforts, Snape is Kind Tags: None Categories: Healer Snape
Rated: K
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Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 30 Sep 2022 / 30 Sep 2022 Series: None - Challenges: None
What a wonderful one-shot. it had the perfect mood, great descriptions, and everyone was in character. Thanks so much for writing it and sharing it with us! I noticed a couple of things to fix: The former potion's professor then started to lightly doze again. All the energy was fading from his body. Remus gave the man a sad slime. Remus gave the man a sad smile. Just as Arthur began to push Harry's char back, the worn werewolf work in his chair. chair woke in his chair. Arthur sat on the edge of Harry's bed to get more on the other man's level. "Why don't you come back to the Burrow with us? Remus, Arthur waved at the man who was watching the interaction with interest, offered for Harry to go stay with him. I think it would be good for him to be out of the public eye for a bit. And I think it would be good for you to be around others who can help you. At least while you recover." Remus," Arthur waved at the man who was watching the interaction with interest, "Offered for Harry to go stay with him. Once again, great story! I was so happy to see a new one by you. :) Author's Response: Ah thank you! Sometimes my fingers type faster than my brain can process! I think I have a few more one shots up my sleeve, we shall see :) Harry Potter is seen as a nutter and a liar. A group of boys attacks him trying to shut him up, when a certain teacher intervenes.
Takes Place: 5th Year - Snape flavour: Snape is Loving Tags: Injured!Harry Categories: Healer Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Rated: K
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Warnings: Bullying
Chapters: 2 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 18 Oct 2022 / 06 Oct 2022 Series: None - Challenges: None
Author's Response: I added a new chapter if you're interested. Also, as far as the paragraph breaks, I wrote this in a google doc, then pasted it here, but instead of the breaks, it had wide gaps like I pressed tab instead of Spacebar, so I just got rid of them, and cried internally. Also, the draught question is answered in the next chapter. Harry has a secret, and he overhears Snape discussing something similar to Draco Malfoy, and realizes that the boy he hated, may understand better than anyone.
Takes Place: 2nd Year - Snape flavour: Snape Comforts Tags: Abuse Recovery Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape, Healer Snape
Rated: K
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Warnings: Rape
Chapters: 1 - Completed: No - Updated: 24 Oct 2022 / 24 Oct 2022 Series: The Darkness Within - Challenges: None
Author's Response: I can't wait to get back to writing this. Harry was kidnapped by Snape, and Snape never became a professor. It's now 1989, and Harry is getting suicidal.
Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11) - Snape flavour: Snape is Controlling Tags: Kidnapped!Harry Categories: Master Snape > Slave Harry
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Suicide Themes
Chapters: 1 - Completed: No - Updated: 24 Oct 2022 / 24 Oct 2022 Series: None - Challenges: None
Author's Response: They speak english, yes, snape is strict, Harry cleans, and gardens, but he's supposed to stay by the cottage at all times, so he can't do too much. Snape used fear to instil obedience. Harry should be 7, But I could be wrong.
Harry was chosen for the Wizards Dueling tournament. The best two witches and wizards from each wizarding school was selected. Severus proposed the idea, but he couldn't have foreseen the wild events that take place.
Takes Place: 5th Year - Snape flavour: Snape is Stern Tags: Spying on Harry! Snape Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Rated: K
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Warnings: None
Chapters: 4 - Completed: No - Updated: 11 Nov 2022 / 25 Oct 2022 Series: None - Challenges: Duelling Tournament
One mistake: He and Malfoy left each other well oalon in the room alone Author's Response: Draco would have. So would Harry. This is already awkward, they wouldn't want to make it worse. Also, the only reason Draco bullied Harry in the books was because his father wanted him to. He did whatever his father said, and anyone could write to Draco's father. Owls always know where to go. Further, no one is here to see what's going on, so he doesn't need to.
Author's Response: you'll see.
Author's Response: Got it. Harry made a sudden, and unusual request, that leaves the whole school stunned. Severus can't believe what he hears, and is in shock.
Takes Place: 3rd Year - Snape flavour: Snape Comforts Tags: Adoption Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: K
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Warnings: Self-harm
Chapters: 1 - Completed: No - Updated: 25 Oct 2022 / 25 Oct 2022 Series: None - Challenges: Random Requests
Author's Response: You got it. Lily had an affair with Severus, and the son she bore as a result, was widely believed to be her husband's, not her childhood friend's. Now that Secret comes to light when a certain reporter finds a letter that never wound up getting sent.
Takes Place: 4th Year - Snape flavour: Snape is Angry Tags: Abuse Recovery Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Self-harm
Chapters: 1 - Completed: No - Updated: 25 Oct 2022 / 25 Oct 2022 Series: None - Challenges: None
The only improvement I can suggest is to watch and make sure all the names are capitalized. You had a harry in there instead of Harry, and professor Snape instead of Professor Snape. The chapters are short, but that is okay when stories are updated quickly. It would be nice to have more details given as well. Thanks for writing and sharing this new story! I'm really enjoying it. I'd love to read more! Author's Response: Thank you for the constructive criticism. I like this site, because the authors on here are so polite about it. |
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