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AU / Death Eaters besiege Hogwarts. A spell from Dumbledore is going astray. A cauldron explodes during potions class. And the old castle enfolds its own magic. Can some students survive the next twenty-one days?
Takes Place: 5th Year
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Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Membership status: Member
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Reviews by Serpenscript
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys
Chapters: 15 - Completed: No - Updated: 20 Dec 2011 / 03 Jun 2011
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 15 - Completed: No - Updated: 20 Dec 2011 / 03 Jun 2011
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 15: Day nine - Tuesday, tenth of September | 13 Sep 2012 |
| Reviewer: Serpenscript (Signed) |
- *bemused* Would commenting help get an update? It's been nearly a year, and ending on such a cliff-hanger!
It is a very good story, and very unique, and I really like the character depth and development. Seeing the characters grow from more than they were is wonderful, and I especially like Nott's growth and the friendships with the Slytherins.
And I'd LOVE to know more about what's going on behind the scenes. How is Hagrid handling the news? Remus? What is Narcissa up to, is she more sympathetic to the light? Neville's comments about Luna 'knowing' things - will she be able to shed light on the trapped class' condition to the rest of Hogwarts, and would anyone listen to her if she did?
I think one thing that would help, though, is a Beta-reader who speaks English as a first language. You write very well, VERY well, but one can tell English isn't your native language. Some phrases don't quite make sense in English, and they can throw the reader off a bit. A good beta can correct those things fairly easily.
I'd be willing to beta and proofread if it'll help with updates :) I'm no good at helping with plot, but I can correct grammar and word choice. Let me know if you're interested!