Slytherin!
Because of ward problems, Harry had to live with Snape for the summer until they were fixed. Everything was going fine until there was a little misunderstanding, though...
Takes Place: 6th summer
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Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Membership status: Member
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Reviews by pdantzler
Rated: K+
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Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 16 Dec 2006 / 16 Dec 2006
Series: Late Understanding - Challenges: None
Chapters: 1 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 16 Dec 2006 / 16 Dec 2006
Series: Late Understanding - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 1: Late Understanding | 18 Dec 2006 |
| Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed) |
- Good short story. I loved the ending especially, but I have to say that I wish you had chose to make it longer, at least eight chapters. So much happens that the narrator has to tell us that we never get to see any of the action. At the first fourth at least seems like back story or flashback. Remember, what people really want to see in fanfic is drawnout scenes and actual conversation. If it seems like to much work to make this into a long story, you might want you consider making your next story longer. Plot wise, you had alot to work with. Develop your characters and your scenes, and you'll have humdinger all the way around!
Keep on writing.
Perry
Author's Response: This is a oneshot because I write so many Harry and Snape stories (long ones). My plot lines would overlap way to much with all my other stories if I expanded oneshots like this. I am currently writing 3 long chaptered stories (one of them a three or four story series), so to expand on this would just be repeating issues in my other stories and plotlines that are overused in other guardian fics. I understand what you mean, though, and thank you for taking time to say something.
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Harry is hurt and loses his voice. Will Snape help him find it again?
Takes Place: 2nd summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Physical Impairment
Categories: Healer Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Takes Place: 2nd summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Physical Impairment
Categories: Healer Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: K+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect
Chapters: 25 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 16 Mar 2008 / 15 Jan 2007
Series: Going Through the Motions - Challenges: None
Chapters: 25 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 16 Mar 2008 / 15 Jan 2007
Series: Going Through the Motions - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 | 21 Mar 2007 |
| Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed) |
- Aw, that was great. I really like this story. The idea of pre-verbal communication has interested me for a long time, and the removal of voice is almost the same thing.
Well done!
Author's Response: Thanks! Harry not being able to speak certainly makes things interesting. I think it makes their relationship easier -- no bratty retorts :)
| Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 | 16 Jan 2007 |
| Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed) |
- Very scary, but great. Can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Thanks! I hope to have an update soon.
Literature professor Severus Snape has always considered Harry Potter to be a problem student. “Just like his father” he always thought. That opinion changes when Snape is saddled with overseeing Harry’s “rehabilitation” after a botched suicide attempt. The two begin a strange journey towards something not unlike friendship with the help of poetry, which they both share a love for.
Takes Place: 6th summer, 7th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe
Categories: Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Takes Place: 6th summer, 7th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe
Categories: Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Suicide Themes
Chapters: 2 - Completed: No - Updated: 13 Apr 2007 / 09 Apr 2007
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 2 - Completed: No - Updated: 13 Apr 2007 / 09 Apr 2007
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: Suicide’s Note | 14 Apr 2007 |
| Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed) |
- I like this. As a lit student, I recognized the poem immediately, and I could so see my professors as Snape - "DO NOT plaguerize!" I look forward to reading the next chapter.
Starting the chapter where you did, in media res, of in the middle of things for all you non-Latin scholars, I thought was an interesting style of writing. Most writers would have shown the suicide attempt, milking it for all its angst and despair, but it happens off-screen, so to speak. So I'll just keep reading.
Rock on!
After Harry is caught for exploding a cauldron in 2nd year Potions, Snape insists he keep a firm hand on the boy he must secretly protect. However, he discoveres that there is more to the twelve year old than unruliness and disrespect. Similarly, Harry learns from and gains a new perspective of his professor.
Takes Place: 2nd Year - Snape flavour: Snape is Stern
Tags: None
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Takes Place: 2nd Year - Snape flavour: Snape is Stern
Tags: None
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Physical Punishment Spanking, Neglect, Profanity
Chapters: 32 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 17 Jun 2008 / 25 Sep 2007
Series: Emerald Eyes - Challenges: None
Chapters: 32 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 17 Jun 2008 / 25 Sep 2007
Series: Emerald Eyes - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 | 28 Oct 2007 |
| Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed) |
- Love the way Snape makes him look at him while telling him what to expect next time Harry screws up again. You've done a great job and I really can't wait to read more. Please hurry and write more.
| Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 | 07 Nov 2007 |
| Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed) |
- Really liked this chapter. I loved Hermione doing the hand-slapping thing to get Harry's attention. I can see Harry not liking her doing that, and she was so cute with her scolding Harry for even thinking swear words.
I like Snape's grabbing Harry's hand to keep him from popping his knuckles. I enjoyed the way that you made it deliberately unclear as to whether Harry was doing it to annoy Snape or whether Harry did it just because he was annoyed. Great how Snape didn't yell, but held his fingers as if Harry was a naughty five-year-old.
The putting his head down on the table was a terrific ending. It said so much about how Snape viewed the boy - as an almost out-of-control child that needed a time-out. I can see how everything was adding up against Harry and he felt overwhelmed. I think the two swats helped him snap back to reality, and hopefully Snape will straighten him out in the near future. Harry seems to suffer from a great deal of stress, but I bet Snape will catch on before anyone else can.
Good job!
Author's Response:
Hi! Thanks for such an awesome review :) I believe, even in canon, that Snape is perceptive, and even though he may not let on, he is careful about the way he reprimands...well, in my story anyway...lol.
I altered the last part of this chapter several times, and finally came up with the "head down" conclusion. If Snape would have just hauled off and given him a full-blown smacking, it wouldn't have had a very positive effect.
I'm so flattered that you're enjoying my story! Like I've said before, I'm a huge, HUGE fan of your Time and Place series. I think I've read them through about ten times each..lol. Thanks again for reading and reveiwing :)
| Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 | 11 Nov 2007 |
| Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed) |
- How excited was I to see that you had updated. I read this chapter several times, and I've got to say it gets better with every read. I liked it so much. From the beginning with Harry still laying on the table to the heartwarming ending, I loved it!
Let's see if I can pick out my favorite parts. Snape telling Harry that he knew he was up to something, and then Snape's proclamation of "I knew it!" when he finally caught Harry. That moment was great, and I could see the pleasure on Snape's face at the satisfaction of being right. Nothing is greater for an adult than being right, and I think Snape was glad that he had not been mistaken the whole time and that his "rightness" was not in danger.
Ron and Hermione were cute as well. The part where Harry's Cloak got caught in the door was very scary, and I kept thinking "run, run, you silly boy!" I liked that Ron knocked over the armor, and I could picture Hermione's face when she heard it.
Snape's reaction fit wonderfully. I was so glad he didn't yell, didn't waste time lecturing, just marched Harry down to his office and prepared to punish him. Making Harry bend over his lap was a great touch as it showed Snape wanting Harry to understand that he had got himself in trouble and he was responsible for his own actions.
After reading this chapter, I began to shake my head over ATAPTG. I finished it a while ago, but after your story, I wish I could go back and make my Snape less talkative and more a silent authoritive figure like yours.
And the ending seemed so realistic with Harry crying way too hard, and Snape knowing something was amiss. Please hurry and write the next chapter so I can see how Snape reacts. I really don't to write more until I see more from you.
Well Done
Author's Response:
Wow...this review is awesome in all kinds of ways. Thanks very much for it! I tried to write the punishment scene as realistically as possible. And don't you shake your head at Time and Place! lol...Your story inspired me! But I'm incredibly flattered that you find my Snape believable.
And okay...let's just type our chapters at the same time and post at the end of the week. That would be quite lovely.
Thanks again for reading and reviewing!
| Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 | 28 Nov 2007 |
| Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed) |
- I liked this a lot. You don't neglect Ron or Hermione, but show them arguing and fighting like real kids would. It was so sweet when Ron went and sat on Harry's bed so they could talk. Harry pushing Ron eralier did not seem OOC - I often wondered how many fights would break out at Hogwarts between all the children. The way they half-fought, half-wrestled seemed very appropiate for their age and gender.
Harry's clothes made me laugh. He was so worried about them, trying to pin them up and get them right, and had he let Snape help him right off it wouldn't have been such a big deal. I liked that Snape realized how ridiculous Harry was acting and didn't swat him for yelling and carrying on.
I look forward to reading more. I want to know where they plan to go from here and what will happen with the Heir of Slytherin.
Keep writing.
Author's Response:
Hi! Thanks so much for taking the time out to read and review my stories! I know you're busy...I appreciate your wonderful, thorough reviews :)
I always thought that Ron and Harry didn't fight enough in canon... I'm glad you enjoyed that part.
The oversized-clothes scene was probably my favorite to write so far.
I should have a new chapter up soon! (How about you? lol)
Thanks again!!
| Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 | 14 Dec 2007 |
| Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed) |
- I really like this chapter. I think this story gets better and better as you go. I look forward to reading more and I can't wait to see what Snape decides to do with the huge snake that keeps slithering around.
You Rock!
Author's Response:
Thank you! You know, I feel like it's easier to write each chapter as I go, which is a good thing, I suppose. I have plans for the basilisk, but sometimes when I write, I tweak a bit here and there from the original plan. So we'll see... lol.
I really appreciate your constant support of my story. Your reviews always cheer me up :)
Thanks again!
| Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 | 18 Jan 2008 |
| Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed) |
- This chapter was so sweet. Oddly enough, I'm playing Die Hard in my study. Alan Rickman is in that, so I had no problem imagining Snape saying all this. The part where Snape talked to Harry made me go "Aww." I think the stress is starting to get to Harry, and I hope Snape straightens him out once and for all.
Malfoy's such a brat. He goes around looking to create trouble - at least Harry only stumbles upon and doesn't try to stir it up like that sneaky little blond boy.
Can't wait for more.
Author's Response:
Hey! Thanks so much for leaving me some feedback :) I've actually never seen Die Hard. Maybe I should?
I did mean for this chapter to have a bit of the 'sweet' factor, but hopefully it wasn't too mushy. I get a bit worried about that. lol. There will be a discussion in the next chapter for little distraught Harry.
I shake my fist at Malfoy. I used to like his character, but the more I write Snape/Harry fanfiction, the more difficult it is to find a soft place in my heart for Draco. Unfortunately. But you're right about the differences in seeking out trouble.
I'm so glad to hear you're still enjoying the story! By the way, I'm dying for a new chapter of 'House'. Can't wait to see how Harry reacts to being stuck in knee-pants... lol