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After Harry is caught for exploding a cauldron in 2nd year Potions, Snape insists he keep a firm hand on the boy he must secretly protect. However, he discoveres that there is more to the twelve year old than unruliness and disrespect. Similarly, Harry learns from and gains a new perspective of his professor.

Takes Place: 2nd Year - Snape flavour: Snape is Stern
Tags: None
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Rated: T - Warnings: Physical Punishment Spanking, Neglect, Profanity
Chapters: 32 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 17 Jun 2008 / 25 Sep 2007
Series: Emerald Eyes - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18 01 Feb 2008
Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed)
    Well, it's Friday - my day to review chapters. Got to save - love this chapter. Unlike a lot of people, I actually like Dumbledore, and his interactions with Snape interest me in as far as they reveal insight into Snape's character.

    I loved the part where they could see out in the hallway. I just came from a conference about theory in literature, and we were talking about private sphere and space, the way people act when they think no one is watching. Harry's attitude in the hallway when he thought he was alone showed Snape more about Harry's feeling than Snape would have seen we he was with the boy. In other words, Harry's sad, lonely stance allowed Snape to empathize with him because Snape understands loneliness and confusion.

    One thing I absolutely hated was the part where you told us there are only five chapters left. Why? Why must you end it for us? I hate when things have to end, and I completely loathe the ending of things I have enjoyed and loved. I will demand right here and now that you write a sequel. I love your other story "Starting from Scratch," but we need Snape back.

    And the tickling scene was cute. Snape was trying to be all serious and business while Harry kept squirming. Keep writing, please.

    Author's Response:

    First of all, I'm so glad you have the chance to read and review today, because I LOVE your feedback.  Love it.  ;)  Second of all, I must say I'm jealous that you've just come from a theory and literature conference, because I'm missing school more than I though I would.  I need to go for my master's degree in literature or writing before I go crazy.  Sure, teaching's a hoot, but it doesn't really cut it. lol. 

    Anyway, I'm so glad you picked up on exactly what I was trying to portray with the invisible door scene.  Severus caught on a little bit to Harry's sadness when he was patting the kid's back after his spanking, of course.  But this was different.  High five for you. 

    And...I...suppose all I can say is I'm sorry about the five-more-chapters notice.  *hangs head*  I don't have an idea for a sequel right now, but maybe my imagination will bubble over after I'm finished writing this one.  Don't worry...I won't stop writing for good ;)  I just don't want to drag this story out forever.  I'm stretching out SfS for a few more chapters, because I was afraid that I'd have to begin sleeping with one eye open if I ended that one too soon.  lol. 

    But, yay...tickling...I love Harry.  I know he's squirmy and annoying, but I just love him. 

    Thanks for the amazing review!  Now it's your turn to write... *poke poke*


Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 07 Feb 2008
Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed)
    Got to say - this was great. I love how fast you update. When Snape picked up Ginny, I knew Harry had to feel something for him.

    I've been reading previous chapters in this story, and I've got to say you have done a fantastic job with continuity. You've development the characters, taking your time and paying close attention to dialogue and emotions. Nowhere did I think your rushed or cheated us out of a good scene.

    Write more.

    Author's Response:

    I suppose I've updated quickly lately, because I have no life at the moment. lol.  I live with my sister right now while I'm working in Indianapolis, and it drives her crazy when I baricade myself in my room and just type away.  She says I'm boring.  Ha. 

    Anyway, I think it's interesting that you've been reading previous chapters of this story, considering that I've reread your stories about twelve times each since you've posted them...lol.  I randomly read chapters of ATAPTG when I can't sleep, and THWTF is just all-around entertaining...  Obsessed much? 

    *Sigh* Anyway, you know how much I appreciate your reviews :)  Thanks for sticking with this story!


Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 14 Apr 2008
Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed)
    Okay, I know I haven't reviews in a while, but I'm still reading this story and loving it. In some ways, Harry seems completely out of control, and I almost wish Snape was stricter. Harry keeps dashing around so distracted and frantic, I'm surprised Snape has not reached his limit. After all, Snape sounds sleep-deprived and exhausted, and I think being that way would make him extra cranky. He hates the way Harry plays the hero to begin with, and he would have less tolerance with a 12-year-old dashing around than he would with an older Harry.

    Besides, Harry doesn't listen. He panics, swears, follows his own ideas, runs around like mad - and Snape seems very patient, talking to him, letting him get the feelings out, even putting him to bed for the day when Harry got hysterical. Kudos to Snape for bearing it that long - I expected him to have Harry over his knee at the first sign of angst, telling Harry he was done with the histrionics and Harry can either get a hold of himself or start everyday with a spanking. I think Harry would come around pretty quickly with those options.

    But I'm enjoying reading this story and I can't wait to see where you take these characters. I'm enjoying the ride the whole way!

    Author's Response:

    Hey, Perry :)  Thanks so much for letting me know that you're still reading my story.  Yes, Harry is still Harry.  In a way, he's improved, though.  He and Hermione could have easily taken the last ten minutes before she left to search for the Chamber or could have been doing that all along, actually.  Instead, he's gone to Snape.  And true, Snape's been pretty patient with Harry, allowing him to speak his mind before throwing him over his lap for a spanking... But in this case, it's what Harry needs...more than punishment, I think.  I've read a few stories where Snape is spanking Harry every five minutes, and it just doesn't seem to work.  If a spanking is supposed to be that effective, Snape wouldn't have to keep punishing Harry for his rudeness/impulsiveness, etc. 

    As for a stricter Snape, he'll begin to emerge with the last few chapters.  He is allowing Harry one day to search with him, and that day will be orderly and productive or else.  I think maybe I've just been around teenagers long enough to realize that they bounce back way too easily from chastisement...  They'll be subdued for maybe an hour after a scolding, but then the next day, they're ready for another round of 'let's annoy the adults in any way we can'.  I wanted to give Harry his customary defiant edge but also show a gradual change.  It's annoying at times, yes.  But so are twelve year olds.  I have a twelve-year-old cousin who can be the most annoying thing on the planet, and her parents are quite strict.  *shrugs*

    Anyway, I guess what I'm trying to say is that this story has been a bit of an exploration for me in adolescent angst, attitude, etc.  I try to make it as realistic as possible and stay true to the characters.  But fear not: your strict Snape is just around the corner ;)

    I love that you're still reading this, by the way.  Thanks for sticking with the story :) 


Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29 14 May 2008
Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed)
    I really like this chapter, especially the part with the sweet roll. Kids and pre-teens are notorious for getting sugary stuff everywhere.

    I like how this is heating up and how Lockhart the Idiot's comments give the final clue to the mystery.

    And Snape is really worried about Harry though both of them refuse to admit it out-right. Let's just hope Harry can stay close and not try to play the hero as soon as they reach the bathroom.

    Ah, you're so bad for me. When I want to start writing my own chapters, I'm all "Oh, I need to get started on my own chapters of Harry Potter or . . . I could go read Jade's stuff again." And I never get started.

    Please write more.

    Author's Response:

    I'm pretty sure that even I, as a twenty-three year old, am notorious for getting food everywhere.  I definitely sympathized with Harry in that scene ;)  I always wondered how messy he would get eating treacle tart, since cleanliness has never been a huge thing for him.  Weird thought, I know.

    Alas, the bathroom scene has finally arrived.  Been forever, yes?  I suppose if Harry gets himself into trouble, it won't be completely deliberate.  He's sort of like that...

    And I must say, I simply wallowed happily in your final comment, as I'm pretty sure I've read House and Life w/ Bruce about ten times in the past two weeks ;)  It's unbelievably flattering to know that you like my stuff enough to wade through it more than once.

    Thanks for the awesome review.  I should lock my students in the supply closet, and then I'd be able to write more... *rubs hands together in plotting*


Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32 & Epilogue 01 Jul 2008
Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed)
    This was the greatest ending ever. I was afraid it might end with Snape declaring he wanted Harry to come live with him and everything out of character, but it was so quiet and calm - it was perfect.

    Please write a sequel. I need it - your updates were always a ray of sunshine in my cloud-covered life. I miss getting the update emails and rushing to read what you have written. But if you need a break or want to work on something else for a while, I completely understand.

    I've enjoyed Harry being small in this story, but I would also like to see their relationship as he gets older. It's much easier to move and hush a boy of twelve - it's harder with a sixteen-year-old.

    Just some food for thought - I know you'll make the right decision. I've enjoyed the ride the whole way.

    Author's Response:

    The second I posted the final chapter, I thought...Oh, Lord, here we go.  I knew that there would be a few people who complained about Snape not taking Harry in for the summer.  But I had planned it like that for a long time, and I promised myself I would stick with it.  Of course, now I've left an open door for a sequel, and I'm seriously thinking of writing one once I finish Starting From Scratch.  But I have to say--the fact that you found my ending so satisfying just makes me smile.  In fact, I'm still smiling right now. lol.  I'm so flattered that you've enjoyed my story (and I know I've said that too many times to count).  But it's the truth.  I agree that it would be interesting to continue this story through years until Harry is older.  It would be a struggle to keep the plotline original since Snape/Harry mentoring stories taking place post OotP are so much more common than li'l Harry stories, but it's a challenge I may decide to tackle. 

    Thanks for all of your encouragement, Perry.  I really appreciate it :)


Lily always dreamed of a quiet life. However, her status as wife to Great Britain's Premier Potions Master, and Mother of The Boy Who Lived seemed to quash any hope of a peaceful existence.

This is the story of Lily, Severus and Harry as I'd like to imagine their lives would be.

Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11) - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Child fic
Categories: Misc > All written in Snape's POV, Parental Snape > Stepfather Snape
Rated: K+ - Warnings: Alcohol Use, Physical Punishment Spanking, Profanity
Chapters: 8 - Completed: No - Updated: 22 Nov 2007 / 24 Oct 2007
Series: None - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Let the games begin. 25 Oct 2007
Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed)
    How cute was this? I liked the chapter though it was short. I like that Harry is rambucious and boyish, and Snape is the irritated, annoyed stepfather who yells a lot and ruins Lily's peace. And I love that Lily won't get involved and choses to hide when trouble arises.

    I'm off to read the next chapter

    Author's Response: I love your stories so much! LOL I just wanted to say that first off. The ironic thing is that I'd just used the word 'rambucious' to describe Harry in chapter three!!! Hope you enjoyed chapter two, and I'll just say about how much I admire your writing! :-)

Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: Wishing You Were Somehow Here Again... 09 Nov 2007
Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed)
    Oh, this was great. I keep forgetting that Lily is pregnant, but her response is very accurate. I can picture her laying down on the bed and trying to catch her breath. I loved the way Snape slapped the table to scare Harry and ensure that he had Harry's full attention.

    Please write so more. Given Harry's age, I wouldn't be surprised if he got jealous of the baby as soon as he was born. After all, Harry is used to having Lily and Snape give him all their attention and now they will both be focused on Baby Sapius (yeah, that's my suggestion for the name. I heard it in the Warcraft games, and I have no idea what it means). But I expect Harry will be acting out to get attention.

    That was fun!

    Author's Response: It's funny, I had to remind myself that she was pregnant. It's been a good excuse for her to not be around so much, but that's going to have to change now... And yes, I would imagine him being jealous- it's an awkward age gap, but he's going to have to adjust. I remember when I was a kid my parents always gave me and my brother a small present on the other's birthday to stop us feelng left out. Not that I think it worked! Maybe the baby will give Harry a gift... hmmm.

    I'm thinking of Asophodel. I wanted something suitably Snapey, but I'm considering Sapius for another purpose! Ooh.

    I loved your new story btw.

    Thanks for reading and reviewing :-)

AU. This is a Snape mentor Harry kind of story. It starts with Harry's summer vacation before his Second Year as Snape comes across something that breaks all delusions about the boy's home-life. Please don't flame. I really appreciate constructive criticism but no flames. Please!

Takes Place: 2nd summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: K+ - Warnings: Physical Punishment Spanking
Chapters: 6 - Completed: No - Updated: 01 May 2009 / 08 Nov 2007
Series: None - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 19 Nov 2007
Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed)
    I kind of like this - it needs some work, but I think it's great that you are trying to write a story. We all need to start somewhere, and the fact that you make time to write says that you want to improve. And in the end, you should always write because you enjoy it.

    As I tell all my students, the more you write the better your writing gets. If you find yourself having a lot of typos, print your work and try reading it in hardcopy. My own work always has a few mistakes that I cannot see - I go back later and fix those, and you can do the same. Just keep at it. And email me if you have any serious questions.

    I did like the part where Snape told Harry to drink his milk because that's what all little boys do. It's sort of like what I tell the children I nanny for - "Time for bed because kids need sleep."

    Please keep writing.

Harry becomes Severus' charge during the Christmas break during 2nd year. Will Harry be able to survive his new overprotective guardian? This story may contain mild spanking but is not a main part of the story

Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: 16+ - Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Physical Punishment Spanking
Chapters: 2 - Completed: No - Updated: 14 Dec 2007 / 26 Nov 2007
Series: None - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 28 Nov 2007
Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed)
    I like this. It's a short beginning, but I can't wait to see more chapters. I like how your version of Snape - actions definitely speak louder than words with him. He refuses to do anything with Potter, absolutely refuses, and the next thing you know Snape has the signed document and is caring the boy over his shoulder off to care for him. Seeing Snape's temperament, I doubt that care will be exactly what Harry wants, though it may be precisely what the boy needs.

    I also like the idea that Dumbledore insist Harry has an escort. Sometimes I wondered in the books why someone wasn't ordered to watch Harry every moment as he and trouble found each other eventually.

    And Harry not following Snape - not a good sign this early in your story.

    Can't wait to read more.

Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 14 Dec 2007
Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed)
    Yay! you're posting it here as well! I like this story and want you to write more chapters right away.

    I like Snape's threat of whipping Harry. It always amuses me in novels, usually by Dickens, when characters threaten to whip someone else. By whipping, they could mean anything a light spanking all the way to a ship flogging with a cat o' nine tails. the same goes with the British term "thrashing" which the Victorians prefered over whipping.

    Snape's use of exaggeration or hyperbole as we call it in English literature rather proves that his bark is worse than his bite and that we should expect to hear much more of the same diatribe that Snape liked to gripe out to relieve his frustration.

    Great job!


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