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Sequel to A Time and Place to Grow - After spending a summer with Snape, Harry begins his sixth year at Hogwarts. But Snape is keeping an eye and a firm hand on him, and a new teacher, split loyalties and a looming fight with the Dark Lord await Harry.
Takes Place: 6th summer
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Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Membership status: Member
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Reviews by wynnleaf
Rated: T
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Warnings: Physical Punishment Spanking, Violence
Chapters: 23 - Completed: No - Updated: 13 May 2010 / 02 Apr 2007
Series: A Time and a Place - Challenges: None
Chapters: 23 - Completed: No - Updated: 13 May 2010 / 02 Apr 2007
Series: A Time and a Place - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18 - Sweets | 04 Dec 2008 |
| Reviewer: wynnleaf (Signed) |
- Good chapter. Nice to see an update. The ending was quite ominous, especially after Harry had been thinking about life without Snape.
As Harry comes of age, he must discover the secret of how Voldemort cheated death and find a way to defeat this evil once and for all. Along the way, he will have to contend with Death Eaters, shadowy Ministry officials and suspicions that threaten to tear his own allies apart. And he will need to delve farther than ever before into the mysteries of the mind where victory can only be won by freeing the chained souls.
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Snape Equal Status to Harry > Comrades Snape and Harry
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Snape Equal Status to Harry > Comrades Snape and Harry
Rated: T
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Warnings: None
Chapters: 31 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 13 Jul 2007 / 16 Apr 2007
Series: Harry Potter and the Enemy Within Series - Challenges: None
Chapters: 31 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 13 Jul 2007 / 16 Apr 2007
Series: Harry Potter and the Enemy Within Series - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: The Hogwarts Express | 16 May 2007 |
| Reviewer: wynnleaf (Signed) |
- I noticed a recent review wondering why Harry automatically assumes Snape is guilty. I can't recall if you refer to it during this book, but in Enemy Within, Harry *knows* that Snape very efficiently killed a number of Death Eaters after he and Harry were attacked on the road. I always felt you did an excellent job there with Harry's reaction to Snape's ability to do that. And it therefore always has made sense to me in this book that Harry would quickly assume that Snape is indeed the one behind these deaths. And you're right, it fits in with canon Harry to always think that Snape is likely to do practically anything.
Very excellent story, btw. I haven't been reviewing here, as I'm reading it on one of the other sites most of the time.
| Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Tea and Immortality | 16 May 2007 |
| Reviewer: wynnleaf (Signed) |
- I really liked the way you get into the landscape of the mind with this and have Harry begin to learn about it through Dumbledore.
Great job of working in canon info about the horcruxes.
| Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Dumbledore's Garden | 16 May 2007 |
| Reviewer: wynnleaf (Signed) |
- Well, according to Ron's revelations, Knight has reason to particularly hate death eaters. And with Snape's comments about Harry mistrusting aurors, I wonder if I should be suspicious.
| Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14: Castle in the Mind | 16 May 2007 |
| Reviewer: wynnleaf (Signed) |
- Excellent way for Dumbledore to find out some of how Harry really thinks about Snape and the conflict it raises within him. It's too bad Harry won't remember it, but canon Harry isn't often highly self-aware anyway, so maybe it's something Harry's personality wouldn't deal well with facing up front anyway.
| Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31: Endings and Beginnings | 13 Jul 2007 |
| Reviewer: wynnleaf (Signed) |
- I can't log into Sugar Quill at work, so I'll review here on P&S.
Truly wonderful ending! Throughout "Chained Souls" I have been very impressed with how well you wove the HBP backstory of Snape into your story. Even though the story is AU, your Snape is (to date at least) so canon!
Thank you for a very satisfying ending. Like many, I'm half dreading DH. When I was worried that you'd kill off Snape, I wasn't sure if I could deal with finishing your story and then the very next week reading DH. Other grim or tragic stories might not bother me, but yours is so well written and the characters so well drawn that I knew the impact of your outcome would be much stronger than for most fan fic stories. What a relief that you ended everything so well.
I love the way you pulled together lots of threads. I had felt sure that the Healers Gamble would have some importance later, and Dumbledore's explanation was perfect and quite believable.
The Afterward, in particular, was well done because it seems to fit the characters so perfectly. Exploring the way Harry and Snape were affected by the aftermath of the war was important as well and was done most effectively.
In short, superb story and congratulations on getting it all done before DH!
When Harry finds an injured Snape on his doorstep and must hide him from the Dursleys, he has no idea that this very, very bad day will be the start of something good.
Harry and Snape are thrown together by annoying relatives, a series of strange dreams, and Voldemort's latest hunt for Harry, but their greatest challenge may well be surviving each other. This will be a long summer unless the two can find a way to work together. A slow-burn enemy-to-mentor story.
Alternate 6th summer (and part of the school year): post-OotP; ignores HBP and DH.
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: Canon Snape
Tags: Injured!Harry, Injured!Snape, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Harry and Snape are thrown together by annoying relatives, a series of strange dreams, and Voldemort's latest hunt for Harry, but their greatest challenge may well be surviving each other. This will be a long summer unless the two can find a way to work together. A slow-burn enemy-to-mentor story.
Alternate 6th summer (and part of the school year): post-OotP; ignores HBP and DH.
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: Canon Snape
Tags: Injured!Harry, Injured!Snape, Snape-meets-Dursleys
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect, Violence
Chapters: 61 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 08 Mar 2021 / 30 Apr 2007
Series: None - Challenges: Battered Snape for Breakfast
Chapters: 61 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 08 Mar 2021 / 30 Apr 2007
Series: None - Challenges: Battered Snape for Breakfast
| Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 - Hostility, House-elves, and Headmasters | 18 Jun 2007 |
| Reviewer: wynnleaf (Signed) |
- I love your story and the direction you've taken it thus far. In particularly, I like your having kept all of the characters very canon. The Dursley's aren't so abusive to be beyond what's suggested in canon. Harry acts like Harry. And Snape is in character as well. Please don't take this wrong, but now that Dumbledore is entering the picture I'm so afraid of the story going off in a non-canon way. So many stories which involve Harry's abuse at the hands of the Dursleys have Dumbledore being utterly uncaring and willing to *knowingly* send Harry back into any degree of abuse. Canon Dumbledore was not being informed (as far as we know) that Harry was being hit by the Dursleys, or even that Harry was being starved. Somehow, many writers want to, in an otherwise very IC story, have Dumbledore learn about all manner of abuse and still send Harry back to it. Sorry to rant a bit. I realize that Snape seemed to be giving Harry the option of telling Dumbledore or not, so maybe Dumbledore won't be told of the abuse in this story. Or maybe you'll have a whole different approach. But still, I just worry because I do love the story and the characters have all been so IC to this point.
Author's Response:
First, allow me to say how thrilled I am that you like this story enough to be worried! Hmm...it's hard to reassure you without giving anything away, though. ;) I really, really want to know your thoughts after reading the next chapter. Which means I've got to get to finishing it... Please keep reading!
Voldemort is dead, but the world is going to hell anyway. Harry is forced to go into hiding as Snape's son. Little does he know, it isn't just a useful disguise.
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Resorting, Slytherin!Harry
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape > Severitus Challenge
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Resorting, Slytherin!Harry
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape > Severitus Challenge
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Alcohol Use, Romance/Slash
Chapters: 29 - Completed: No - Updated: 06 Oct 2013 / 21 May 2007
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 29 - Completed: No - Updated: 06 Oct 2013 / 21 May 2007
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 | 18 Mar 2008 |
| Reviewer: wynnleaf (Signed) |
- I think I read most of this quite a while back, but am not sure that I ever reviewed. I went back just now and read a lot of the older reviews and your responses. Now my comments.
First, I love your writing style. I like the very original idea of having Dumbledore die at the end of OOTP, thereby removing much of the explanatory info Harry gets at the end, the prophecy, etc. And it really makes it very believable that members of the Order, in particular Lupin and Snape, would have a very difficult time dealing with their own feelings about Harry.
In many ways Sirius, and in your story Dumbledore, died because of Harry's mistakes that eventually led him to go to the Department of Mysteries, thereby forcing the Order to go rescue him. Lupin, in your story, has lost someone extremely close to him with Sirius' death. We know from HBP that Lupin would have also been grief stricken at Dumbledore's death. And Dumbledore's death would have vastly affected Snape as well. And that's just the emotional toll on them. They're also having to deal with a great amount of trouble from Fudge and public opinion, all stemming from, as they would see it, the inability of Harry to do as adults instruct him to do, and instead take matters into his own hands. In your story, Lupin and Snape have gone through all this trauma and stress and are now risking Azkaban to keep Harry safe. Their attitude toward him isn't right, nor is it calculated to get the responses they really want, but it *is* very human and understandable.
I love the way you've written everything from Harry's point of view and his slowly growing realizations of what's really going on. And of course, the reader sometimes "gets it" before Harry.
I don't see this as an extremely dark story, but it does have a grittiness to it that is very appealing, as the characters react with very believable, if flawed, responses and attitudes.
Your take on Lupin, by the way, is excellent. This is a guy who was so protective of *himself* that in POA he kept vital information regarding the safety of hundreds of children, and Harry in particular, secret for months solely so he wouldn't lose the goodwill of Dumbledore. And after POA, he did not contact Harry in any way to offer any support, leaving that to Sirius. Even after Sirius' death, in canon, we don't see Lupin attempting to contact Harry to offer any comfort or support. And in POA he is willing in very cold blood to kill a cringing, pleading unarmed man in front of 3 thirteen year old kids. I don't dislike Lupin, but he is a very flawed character, even in canon.
I also find your depiction of the relationship between Snape and Lupin to be fascinating, as Snape continues to have a somewhat negative view of Lupin, even as he also apparently cares for him. And of course, that's a very Snapish sort of way to be.
I hope you're able to continue this story as it's quite original, a fascinating set of character studies, and very well written.
Author's Response:
Reviews like yours are not only awesome for their own sake, but also provide so much food for thought. Truly, thank you for taking the time.
Dumbledore is usually such a prominent character in fics involving Harry developing some kind of positive relationship with Snape, but in 99% of them he is the same character recycled over and over. The kindly manipulator who does things (sometimes ugly things) for "their good." In most stories Dumbledore makes me gag. To have him meddling and twinkling his eyes throughout my story... no. I wanted him gone from the start. Fortunately this also presented some interesting subplots, like the unrevealed prophesy, chaos in the Ministry, and no one around to "control" Snape.
I think you've really hit it -- when there's clear and present danger, the instinct for a lot of people is to control, not pacify and coddle. Especially when we're talking about controlling a teenager who has tended to resist more gentle efforts to persuade him to keep his head down. They're *not* getting the results they want, but perversely that just makes them come down harder on Harry. For example, in canon as well as in my story, Lupin resorts to emotional blackmail (recall that whole "your parents died for you and this is how you repay them?" thing in POA). Why? Because it had the appearance of working. So when dealing with an uncooperative Harry, while really, really *needing* Harry's cooperation, what does he do? Disregard the damage he might cause and go with what works, of course. It's human nature.
Canon Lupin hasn't been big on preserving Harry's emotional wellbeing.
In fact, Lupin's pretty spineless in canon. I can't help but agree with the Red Hen Publications summary of him. You might like to read it: google "Red Hen Publications" Enigma (including the quotes). In short, it explains:
"She [Rowling] never wrote him as evil. She wrote him as weak. Let somebody down in a major way, I could believe . . . betray them to an enemy, no."
| Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 | 31 Mar 2008 |
| Reviewer: wynnleaf (Signed) |
- Another excellent chapter. Snape's view of Harry has not seemed to change at all other than the little bit of surprise he had that Harry was willing to help him while at Grimmauld Place. Other than that, as far as I recall, there's no change, and certainly no softening, of Snape's view of Harry. And Snape's attitude toward Harry can only make Harry resent and dislike him even more than he did before. It makes me wonder what if anything can get these two to care about each other. Of course, it's not believable if any change between them happens too quickly. If you intend such change, you're clearly taking the slow approach. :)
I think the predicament you've put your characters in makes for a lot of tension, but I find I can't blame any of them too much. It's natural that Harry would feel a good deal of anger, resentment, guilt, loneliness, grief, etc. He needs the support of adults who have the emotional ability to help him.
But then all he's got are Snape and Lupin who have their own problems. They're risking their lives, or at least imprisonment, to protect a boy that they feel is so prone to reckless behavior that he could at any moment jeopardize everything with some imprudent action. Lupin has both physical and emotion stresses to deal with, and Snape does, too, even though he's not displaying them like Lupin does. By the way, it's interesting that you show Snape as being well aware that Lupin is going through a lot of stresses, but we don't see any corresponding understanding on Lupin's part for Snape. Maybe that's just because we only see their interaction through Harry eyes?
I've noticed some reviewers commenting on Harry's "rights." I realize that ideally he should have a lot more support and understanding, but I'm not sure how he can get it, or what could reasonably be given to him. That Lupin and Snape are working on a way for him to regularly visit Ron is actually pretty good, considering the circumstances, even though Harry doesn't necessarily see that.
Love the story and your insight into all of the characters. Good to see this update!
Author's Response:
I'm slightly confused about Harry's "rights" as well. As a human being, he deserves to be treated with basic kindness/consideration, but his entitlement to anything beyond that is debatable. In my eyes, he *is* being treated with basic kidness/consideration, even by Snape. He's being protected, fed, clothed, his education provided for, he has not been cast out among strangers, and (unknown to him) Lupin is trying to ensure some kind of future for him by trying to get Snape to accept some responsibility. He's not being beaten or starved, in any case, and Snape's treatment of him is really nothing new. Aren't we used to Snape's ways by now? You can't change Snape (and why would you want to?). Really, the only thing Harry's not getting from anyone is support for his emotional issues. However, like you pointed out, all he's got is Snape and Lupin, neither of whom have their own emotional issues under enough control to help anyone else. If Harry's problems were not so huge and overwhelming, would it still seem like he's being treated terribly?
Ah, but there is progress creeping in on the Snape and Harry front. It's just that... I think it will disappoint the fluff-lovers. Hey, I did warn that Snape wasn't going to turn into mother of the year. He grew up with a crappy role model for what family means, his child/teenhood was warped, he has issues up to his neck, he's not a nice person, his emotional range is somewhat stunted, and he has spent years cultivating a dislike of Harry. I am not going to rehash the old "I only acted like I hated you because I had to" excuse. They'll just have to deal with the reality that you don't always like the people you love. I'm just going to go with my own interpretation of what it means for Snape to care for Harry as a father.
| Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 | 22 Jun 2008 |
| Reviewer: wynnleaf (Signed) |
- Actually Snape is rather better in this chapter, it's just that he's pretty aloof to Harry and not acting what would be "caring" for most people. But he isn't angry at Harry for any altercation with Lupin. He tries to get him to finish breakfast. He, albeit impatiently, gives Harry a calming draught when Harry's getting too upset, and he does try to explain and remind Harry about the fact that they are playing roles and they have to stick to them.
What I particularly like about this story is Snape and Lupin being in such difficult circumstances themselves (risking their lives/freedom and such for Harry), playing roles, Snape dealing with this new situation with his son, etc., because all of this stress for Snape and Lupin makes the ability to support or help Harry far more problematic.
One thing that I don't think either Snape or Lupin see is that, to whatever extent, they do have each other for some emotional support through this highly stressful situation, whereas Harry doesn't really have either one, what with Snape still disliking him and Lupin having to play a role of not really knowing Harry, and also having so many of his own concerns.
I'm curious as to what will change Snape's opinion of Harry, by the way. Harry needs some sort of father figure so badly, that he may gradually want that from Snape (his approval, etc), even without Snape changing, and I think you're already hinting at that. But what will change Snape's viewpoint?