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Kirinin [Contact] Better be Gryffindor!
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Hi!  My name is Kirinin, and I've been writing fanfiction for over ten years, now.  My initial fandom was Ranma 1/2.  After having a lot of fun with this fandom for around five years, I decided to branch out.

My first completed Harry fic is Secret of Slytherin, which was initially on fanfiction-dot-net.  I have to say that writing and posting this story has been one of the most fun and interesting literary experiences I've had.  For one thing, the tale started off as a bedtime story, meant to be shared with someone verbally, so it had to have a certain cadence.  Then, when I initially posted it, the feedback was thoughtful and thorough - to the point that people brought up and argued issues I'd never even thought of.  Some or the reviews themselves are works of art, and I've met a lot of great people through their analyses of the story. 

It's wonderful to be able to share SoS with a new fanfiction community here, and give the story some more life.  :)

Secret of Slytherin now has a sequel called Geas of Gryffindor.  While Severus and Harry are very important characters in that tale, they are no longer its sole focus, which is why I have chosen not to post it here.  Please check it out on fanfiction.net, or on Archive of Our Own, where I am posting Secret of Slytherin and Geas of Gryffindor under the same penname.

I tend to like many if not all of the canon characters in the HP Universe, and really dislike it when an author is willing to demonize one set of characters to make the others look better.  My favorite characters to mess with are the Trio, Draco Malfoy, Severus Snape and Remus Lupin, but I'm willing to read anyone, so long as they're written thoughtfully.

As a final note, I tend to recommend stories I've enjoyed in my Author's Notes; I also have a C2 for Harry Potter fics on my fanfiction-dot-net account.  That is all.

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Past Featured Story Child's Play by libertineangel starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 133]
When Draco accidently uses a black curse on Harry and turns him into a baby, Dumbledore appoints Snape as his carer. Follow Harry's slow, strange journey back to fifteen - accompanied by Snape ...

Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Baby fic, Child fic, Deaging
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: T - Warnings: Alcohol Use
Chapters: 29 - Completed: No - Updated: 02 Sep 2008 / 08 Aug 2006
Series: None - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 14: Prophecies: The Morning of the Quidditch 18 Feb 2007
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    Draco IS fun to work with. He and Snape are what makes writing HP Fanfiction worthwhile, because they are devilishly complicated. You can make them behave well or badly, so long as you keep them speaking in the same "voice", which always opens up worlds of possibilities.

    They also both tend to tell the truth when other characters would tactfully keep their mouths shut, which likewise makes them ever so much fun to play with!

    -K

Title: Chapter 15: Trials and Tribulations: The Match 24 Feb 2007
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    I think Lucius hitting Draco isn't out of the realm of possibility. I think, however, that Lucius could probably hurt Draco more with a look or a well-placed comment than his fist. He just seems like that kind of guy.

    -K

Title: Chapter 16: Big Trouble 24 Feb 2007
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    Awww. Sweetness! There is so much familiarity here in dealing with small children - you can always see that moment when they go from pouting and whining to being geniunely upset. You've captured baby-behaviour very well.

    -K

Title: Chapter 19: Baby Harry and the Meeting of the Order 24 Feb 2007
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    Children often pretend to know how to do less than they are actually capable of. I look after my niece and nephew with their grandparents every summer (in absence of their mum and dad). My niece, aged four or so (and the younger of the two) enjoyed being the littlest so much that she would often claim ignorance concerning the simplest tasks. For instance, when putting on her shoes, she claimed she could not tie them. We solved this by telling her she could not go out unless she'd put her shoes on herself, similar to what Snape does when discussing the beef stew (you'll eat that like a grown-up or you won't eat anything). This process repeated itself constantly and in every possible venue for about a week (complete with horribly annoying 'baby voice') before disappearing almost entirely. It would still pop up once in awhile after that, but in a very different context: she would fall back on this behaviour when she *thought* she was too young to accomplish a particular task. Once reassured that she was capable, she would dubiously try it out, and respond with surprised delight if/when she succeeded. She had been the littlest for so long, that she was convinced of her incapability in some ways. She gained confidence over the course of the summer months until she was more than willing to try anything new.

    Hope that helps you write little Harry. :)

    As for Sirius and Severus. Hmm. I think that if you're going for a more equitable relationship, Sirius would have to witness Severus truly in the parent role and accept that. If Sirius really loves Harry, seeing Harry being cared for so well will have an impact on him. Since Severus hasn't yet fully admitted to himself how much he cares for Harry, this would be difficult to arrange in the immediate future; I think Sirius would have to be able to see that Severus *loves* Harry, yet Severus hasn't said that to Harry or thought about it, himself.

    If you're looking for a less equitable relationship, the same thing is required. Severus would have to show himself to be Harry's parent, except that Sirius would be so very jealous of this that it would actually make him hate Severus more, for stealing Harry away from him.

    I see either option as plausible.

    BTW, Lupin's calling Harry 'trouble' and carrying him like a sack of potatoes was adorable.

    -K

Title: Chapter 20: Reflections 24 Feb 2007
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    The only thing I fear is that you have set things up so that Snape could possibly get over his hatred of Sirius but that Sirius could never get over his hatred of Severus. There is literally no way for Snape to prove himself. With how resolute Sirius seems, he could watch Snape being tortured about Harry's location or the true nature of his 'illness' and still believe that Snape was keeping the secret for some darker, more nefarious purpose. When you distrust someone that way, their every action takes on the aspect of the sinister.

    Of course, if you're not planning to 'fix' this, that's fine, but it does seem that you mean to...

    -K

Past Featured Story Ashes of the Phoenix by Solitare starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 183]
Sick and tired with the way the Dursleys were treating him, Harry decides he has had enough. Leaving the house he makes his way towards the Leaky Cauldron only to encounter the one person he didnt want to see...

Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Slytherin!Harry
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: 16+ - Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Alcohol Use, Self-harm, Violence
Chapters: 24 - Completed: No - Updated: 23 Apr 2018 / 02 Oct 2006
Series: None - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 1: Enough is enough 20 Feb 2007
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    Okay, *wow*. You've put together the first, ONLY realistic scene of a beating I've ever seen done in fandom. Honestly, I don't even read these stories anymore - or not usually, anyway - because Harry sits there and takes the beating, and phases out because he's somehow "used" to the blows.

    Your story is different. Harry remains in character instead of cowering in a corner (this thoughts about attempting to reach his wand are well-done). The first blow comes so suddenly that he doesn't know he's been hit until he hits the floor - gut-jarringly realistic, there. And there's a horrible pain in his knee before it goes somewhat numb. You seem to actually know what you're talking about. Lo and behold!

    ;)

    -K

Title: Chapter 2: An Abnormally Large Nose 20 Feb 2007
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    Hmm. Well, you've got the "Luminos" here. That should be Lumos. You've also got "vindicated" used in an odd way. In the words of Inigo Montoya: "That word! I do not think it means what you think it means." Maybe you were looking for "vindictive"? Hmm. Grammar errors and misspellings distract me from any potential awesomeness...

Title: Chapter 4: Never Cross a Slytherin 20 Feb 2007
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    Grimwauld should be Grimmauld, and literate should be articulate (as Harry is speaking and not writing). You need a beta!

    Snape having Harry alone in the same house as he is, warded to the nines, sounds like a great Death Eater opportunity to me. What's to prevent Snape from giving Harry to the DEs? I don't think Snape *would*, mind you, because I think he's loyal to Dumbledore; what I mean is that from the perspective of the DEs, this is the perfect opportunity for Snape to kill Harry off. One would think that Draco would report this to his father and there would be Trouble. I'm liking your setup, though. :) I do sort of wonder what you believe Draco's loyalties to be, however.

    But maybe you like Draco and he is firmly on Dumbledore's side? I like him. :)

    -K

A Season of Cherries by lesyeuxverts starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 23]
After the war, Severus works to fulfill Albus's last wish. Harry suffers from the trauma of the war and the loss of his friends.

Takes Place: 8 - Post Hogwarts (young adult Harry) - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: K - Warnings: Character Death
Chapters: 1 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 07 Oct 2006 / 07 Oct 2006
Series: None - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 1: A Season of Cherries 05 Feb 2007
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    Oh my god, this might be the first time in years that a story has made me *cry*. Wow. What's even more impressive is that you've managed to gain my sympathy so very *quickly* with such a short story.

    The repetition in the beginning of the phrase "cherry blossoms" was poetic enough to remind me slightly of a Sestina, which if you haven't heard of you ought to look up - it's a poem in which seven words are repeated throughout, but in good ones all you notice is the rhythmic cadence. In the beginning of your story, I noticed the phrase was repeated in every paragraph in a slightly different way. It's details like that that make this such a well-written piece of fiction.

    The idea of Snape feeling completely trapped there, of feeling as though he has been sentenced to a kind of hell where he watches (and watches over) his own mistakes is heart-pricking. He feels he can't change anything that's happening to his charges, and that must be horrifying.

    Harry's desire to live in the past is so strong that he doesn't even *notice* Snape trying to help him, at least not the first several dozen times. When Snape offered him the draught and he was trying to pretend that Snape was yelling at him was so heartrending. Harry's so devoted to his past that he would rather pretend to experience even one of the worst aspects of it: Snape's enmity.

    Perhaps the most terrible part of this story overall is that Snape has lost the ability with Potions that he so prized.

    The details with Cho, Creevey, Draco and Pansy are especially good.

    Rather obviously, I'm blown away. Good show!

    -Kirinin

Past Featured Story Reading the Signs by lyra starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 388]
Harry is hurt and loses his voice. Will Snape help him find it again?

Takes Place: 2nd summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Physical Impairment
Categories: Healer Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: K+ - Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect
Chapters: 25 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 16 Mar 2008 / 15 Jan 2007
Series: Going Through the Motions - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 11 Feb 2007
Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
    Sweet. :)

    -K

    Author's Response: Thanks :)


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