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Reviews For Where Once Was Light
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Author's Response: Another Draco fan, good to see! Thanks for the review!!
O.O Was your Snape in prison and tortured or something by Moody? Yikes! Would this cover the period in which he was considered dead and Lily's happiness died? Oh no...He spoke before he thought. The poor man. And Poor Harry! He is terrified of Slytherin without his father. So, here's a question: If Harry hadn't managed to skip the previous Feast(s) would he have been resorted earlier? Like Draco checking out the reaction of Snape as possibly being something else. I love Draco...Interesting! (HA! Moody scaring the wits out of everyone! *laughs* Oh! And he had the nerve to sit in Snape's chair!) Oh man, Draco and Harry as roommates! HAHA! Snape is blackmailing Draco! HAHA! Nice touch at the end there, changing the uniforms! What a slap to reality for Harry. Poor boy. Typo Alerts: "The Gryffindor flame was about to be distinguished by the Slytherin water!" I think you mean "extinguished" there instead of distinguished. "Harry found that he could not look to long at this man, but whether it was from disgust or pity, he did not know." Change "to" to "too." "Snape shouted, a vain in his neck looked as though it were going to explode." Change "vain" to "vein." "“Overreaching?” Snape let out a mirthless laugh. “Overreaching?..." Do you mean "overreacting" like Dumbledore says? "He also in those eyes Lily…" I think you are missing the word "saw" in there somewhere. "If only he had managed to skip the Fest again this year!" Fest should be "feast." "...Weasley in his year stood up and started yelling something that was drown out by all the other talking." Should be "drowned." "Patsy cried from Draco’s right." Is this Pansy Parkinson? Cause It's Pansy, not Patsy. If it's someone new, then whoo-hoo, but I was wondering. "Dumbledore hired an Auror to keep the Slytherin at bay while Professor Snape could flaunt his freedom and his betray in all of their faces?" Is it supposed to be "Slytherins," and "betrayal," there? "... he sent up spark that popped and imminently caught everyone’s attention..." Should be "immediately." "Snape stood up for them to the other professor,..." Should be "professors." "Patsy wailed again, and ..." Again, is this Pansy? "“Despite Dumbledore’s lack of really concern,” Snape’s lip pulled back in disgust, “you are going to have to stay here in the dorms with the other Slytherin.”" Change "really" to "real" and "Slytherin" to "Slytherins." "As the other Slytherin made their way in, they paused ..." Should be "Slytherins." ""Am am here to ensure that you will all perform..." SHould be "I am..." Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it! And as for the re-sorting before... I might explain it later, but I don't think I can put it in the story...my thought was Harry had to realize that he was something OTHER than a James Potter clone, really. Harry wanted to be just like his dad, and when he found out that his dad WASN'T James, he's whole ideas crumbled. The Sorting Hat knew about Harry and Sev- I mean, after all, it can go inside your head and find everything out, like how you'r mind works and it's patern and all that- and wanted to put Harry where he REALLY belonged, but at Harry's request, did not. So, I might have to put my full reasonings in somewhere...maybe in an author's note or something... But glad you liked Draco...and the reaction of Moody. You'll find out about Snape's past later on. I promise. And the last line was a bit of a slap in the face. Thanks for another review Raven!!
How perfectly Slytherin to make each of the two boys responsible for the other. And then to take it a step further and make them responsible for anything that might happen to the other? Awesome indeed. I'll be very interested to see where Moody fits into all of this. You've really created an interesting year for yourself. LOL As for the reference, (World's Only Living Heart Donor) it's from a movie I own. In fact it's one of the few remakes I like better than the original. Sabrina, with Harrison Ford. Author's Response: Five points to you Cee!! That's one of my favorite movies with Harrison Ford. And I think it's better than the original too. ^-^ And I'm SO going to love writing this year. I love drama and fourth year had some of the most drama in it for me...and of course I'm going to put even MORE drama in. It should be interesting. Thanks for the review!!
Ooh, I love this. I can't wait to see the fireworks. This is so gooood! Want more!!! Please? Author's Response: ^-^ Thanks Pandora! And yes, you guessed it. There will be fireworks, that I can promise you. And CONGRATULATIONS on being review number 400!!! YAY!!!!
Loved this chapter. Poor Harry and Draco and fake Moody better watch out. Author's Response: Five points to you!! Love that moive! Nice one! Indeed, Moody's gunna be lurking...
Author's Response: Really? Oops! Sorry about that, but thanks for catching it! ^-^ And I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for the review and here's a chocolate frog! :D
Author's Response: Yay! Thanks! Have a chocolate frog!
Typo ALerts: "Harry turned around to see a wave of redhead swarm him." Should be "redheads." "he had the whole summer to prepare, and he was usually to one that stood watch at the gates..." SHould read, "usually the one." "...Severus found himself in his usual place, sitting tall and ridged." Should be "rigid." "His being term meeting with Trelawney had not helped..." This confused me. Is this supposed to be something like, "His beginning of term meeting with Trelawney..."? "...well, your Slytherin aren’t going to be very…cooperative..." Pluralize (is that a word? *laughs insanely*) "Slytherin." "He wouldn’t let himself get capture. The boy had stood up to the Dark Lord his first year and second years,..." Should be "captured." And it should either be "first two years," or "first and second year," or "first year and second year." "The Head of Slytherin began to feel a bit uneasy as his snakes would each sneak glance up at him, only..." Either should be "sneak a glance" or "sneak glances." "...turned his attention to the Hat, and his collogue, hoping the nagging feeling..." Should be spelled "colleague." "...the Potions Master was extremely neat, boarder line germ phobic in some areas, but was he going to wean everyone off the “old” Snape slowly? Seemed possible." Change to "borderline germaphobic." And if he is going back to his old, greasy self, wouldn't he be weening everyone back ONto that Snape slowly, rather than off? It just got me a little confused. I could be tired though. "He had know something bad was going to happen!" Change "know" to "known." Author's Response: Ah yes, the Red Sea. That made me giggle when I typed it. And since the adults know that Snape went to the Dursleys, Harry's allowed to tell them since they'd probably find out anyway. So he just tells them a story HE wants them to believe. And yes, Trelawney's a bit of a fraud...even though she's a seer too, Severus can just predict more often then she can. You'll find out how she found this out later. YES! Harry's a Slytherin now!!! So prepare yourself for a lot more drama and Malfoy!! XD And I may put this in in the notes of next chapter, Harry really goes from "fire to water" since that's the elements Gryffindor and Slytherin are affiliated with. So, I'm going to have so much fun with Sev and Harry really soon and throw off Ron and Hermione and Draco. It's gunna be great! XD ...I hope. So I'm glad you're interested, and I'll try to update soon. Thanks for another awesome review Raven! *gives hug*
Typo Alerts: "...Dumbledore interrogated his son, but he still wanted Harry t be able to hold his own against that Headmaster." Add an "o" to that poor singular "t" in that sentence. It happens. "...even though he could tell the old woman could get onthe Potions Master’s nerves." Separate "onthe" in there. "“I’ll miss you to ma’am.” And he meant it too." The first "to" needs to be "too," too. "Severus nodded, sitting down next to his son, ready to case the spell." "Case" should become "cast." "“Harry, we cannot simply runaway from everyone, or from our problems.”" Separate "runaway." "...he was going to have a hard time treating Severus like the Potions Master he had know." SHould be "known" right at the end there. "And board the train. Do not terry out here too long." It should be spelled "tarry." "...he did not have time to dwell on his sense of loss as he heard several loud cried from behind him." Change "cried" to "cries." Author's Response: ^-^ Yeah, I liked that line too (am I allowed to say that???) But I thought it was dry enough to be Snape. And maybe we'll get to see Mrs. Cadogan again...maybe... and neither Sev or Harry want Harry to look like James anymore. It's really a matter of pride for both of them. And yep! Sev took the cloak! XD Nicked it when Harry wasn't lookin'. XD And you'll see that things will get a lot more exciting... Thanks for the review Raven! |
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