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Reviews For Where Once Was Light
Author's Response: lol Yeah, they're all gunna be a little depressed for a while. But no worries! Thanks for another review!! ^-^
OMG!!! I don't know who I feel worse for, the Weasleys, Hermione or Harry himself!!! How shocking. What a temper our favourite Potions Master has, doesn't he? I wish that Harry could relieve his friend's pain and tell them that he's alive. I'm really beginning to like that Mrs. Cadogan. She's too cute; wanting to play poker with Harry, the minute that Severus is gone. Author's Response: lol That's Mrs. Cadogan...lol Yeah, been sick since Friday, and still feel kinda crappy. :( But, being sick gives me time to write and tell everyone to leave me alone and I have an excuse! ^-^ I think I'll live *drama queen* lol And yes, Sev+temper/ Siriusx Dumbledore= NOT GOOD!! (you like my math? some people say I'm not good at it! lol) And don't fret too much about the whole "HARRY'S DEAD!!!!!" thing. Things will get better. :) And I'm so glad you liked the chapter, and thanks again for reviewing!! ^-^
Author's Response: ^-^ Thanks so much!! I'm glad you liked this one too. Don't worry about the whole "OMG!! HE'S DEAD!" thing. It won't be too angsty. lol Although one could really play up on that, but I won't! ^-^ Anywho, thanks again!!
Snape would so be able to tell if Harry were daydreaming or not. And if caught, he definitely would make him sit some more. Aww, again. Love Harry's request for a walk with Mrs. Cadogan. But what made it? Severus smiling. Aww... I really don't know why, but the comparison of the English vs. Welsh and Severus vs. James & Sirius, struck me as a very interesting comparison. I had to point it out. I don't even know why I liked it so much...It was very interesting. Is that spoon thing true? I think I read something about that, but really? Is that how it works? Cause that is pretty cool! A thought hit me while reading this this time about that whole Peter thing. Did you choose Peter because when you say it, it has a striking similarity to Potter? I can see how that would work. Just a thought. Is that why you chose Peter? It would make sense since Severus usually calls Harry, "Potter," anyways. Just thought of that... HA! Poker! *laughs out loud!* How does Dumbledore know he's not with the Dursleys? Other than the house burning down? Does he know that Severus took him? See? I'm as nervous as Severus! I do like how you made Severus shift the blame to Dumbledore. Nice! Sometimes I like Sirius, and other times...yeah...like this one. Jerk! I was glad that Severus basically beat the crap out of him. Muhahaha! Oh dear, poor Harry. Now he knows another reason why he can't contact anyone. That would psych everyone out! Harry writing letters from beyond the grave! Whoa! *giggles* Typo Alerts: "...she had glanced at her father’s newspaper wrack..." I'm pretty sure it should be spelled "rack." ""But I know that you are all wondering about the meeting your mum and I the other day.”" A phrase or word is missing between "your mum and I" and "the other day." Something needs to be there like, "had", "were at" or "attended." Those would work well. "Why had she ever subscribed to the Daily Prophet?" Do you mean "ever" or "never?" DOes she get the Daily Prophet? "Harry had gripped and complained..." Should be "griped" not "gripped." "He was only giving Harry rules similar to those that he gave his Slytherin." Makes "Slytherin" plural. "...after the Dark Lord’s fall, left Severus hurting social…like always." Should be "socially." "...new blue jeans, some that actually hit his frame..." "hit" should be changed to "fit." (I read it and had a rather comical image of a pair of jeans smacking Harry as he tried to struggle into them.) "...there were some strains that fell in his eyes." Change "strains" to "strands." "“No much, sir,” Severus lied." Should be "not." "...Headmaster commanded, none to gently." Change to "too." You say complement several times when it should be "compliment." E.g. "Again, taken back by the unexpected complement, if a complement it really was..." "...binding over backwards to protect Potter’s miserable life..." Should be "bending." Author's Response: Yay for long reviews!! lol Ahem: first off, yes, the spoon thing is true. I happen to own a Welsh Love Spoon...and I want MORE!! sorry bout that...and Peter/Potter....heehee, yeah, that's why Sev kept it. You caught me! Yay you!! And Dumbledore was in the house when Petunia left and told Harry that they'd be back, 'member? Huh? lol No, it's okay. It's been a while since I worked on this one. *sorry!* And I'm glad you liked the whole Wales vs England, Sev vs Sirius and James thing. I rather liked that too, and it's true, really. The Welsh were a bit...standoffish when we met some of the locals because our tourguide was English. lol Coach driver was Welsh though...*shrugs* But thanks again for another review! It's so good to hear from you!! ^-^
P.S. - what is "prompt" fest?? Author's Response: Awww!! Thanks!...but, uh, I think that you reviewed on the wrong chapter. lol That's okay! I still like you for it! ^-^ And thanks so much! This review really made me smile! And I know, I always thought Sev would have a bit more know how that the average wizard too. That's kinda why I did this. lol Thanks for noticing! And a prompt fest is where the authors on this site can place random ideas out during a set time and then other authors can pick and choose ideas and try to make a story out of them! It's really kinda fun! I've already got three chaps. of mine done. You can read about it on the homepage if you want. Thanks again!!
School yes it's such a bother at times lol! And sick :( seems everyone is falling ill lately my friend as well, he had a fever missed two days of school, he's bumed that he couldn't turn in his work. I've never had a baby sitter in my life, well only once but my mom went to the hospital so I don't think that counted. >_> Are baby sitter's that boring? Or like Mrs. Cadogan? :P Sirius is really the way I imagine him, rash and very Griffyndor lol! I hope Harry doesn't fall into a panic because of it, but then again if he did I wouldn't blame him. Also last thing, many writes have mentioned something about a prompt fest...what's that? Author's Response: LOL thanks. I'm not too sure what babysitters are like. I've just always had my grandma and grandpa look after me. ^-^ Or I've just stayed alone...but Mrs. Cadogan is loosly based off of my other grandma. hehe! And thanks! Sirius is just...cranky right now. lol And the prompt fest is were there are different prompts that you can look at on the home page and pick like two of them and then write a story using them. There's a whole big schpeel about it on the homepage. You'll find it! ^-^ And don't worry, I just found out about it like a week ago! too! Thanks again for the nice review!!
Explaining Snape's difficulty with apologizing was interesting, considering "unapologetic" is after all a Slytherin trait...*grins* "James won't teach him anything too useful!" *snort* Hilarious. Aww, if only Lily had woken up a few seconds earlier. I don't know why, but the image of Snape and Harry having ice cream is hysterical. I just can't picture it...well, I can but it's really, really funny! Isn't the demolition of the Dursley home out in the papers? Even the Muggle news...that would be alarming, if someone's house was just torched one night. Weird that Hermione (with Muggle parents) would not have heard of that... (I could be wrong here, because it's been a while since I read the books...Didn't Ron get Pigwidgeon during Goblet of Fire? And since your story takes place before 4th Year, he should still be using Errol. I could be wrong though, but I swore Sirius gave him Pigwidgeon during the trio's 4th year. But, hey! Your story, your artistic license! But now I need to look it up...for my own curiosity...) You don't have to sing me a song, unless it makes you happy...Then, by all means, sing away! Hope the time until your next update goes a little better. Typo Alerts: "It was only when he was too the breaking point with guilt..." "too" should be "to." "...until the hour was decent and Harry would walk." Did you mean "wake" instead of "walk?" "You may shutter at the name, but I think you..." Should be "shudder." "I know he’s love you." SHould be "he'd." "In that face there was Severus Snape, just as there was Lily Evans Snape." Lily's maiden name and her husband's name should be hyphenated to read "Evans-Snape" otherwise it would read that her middle name is Evans, not her maiden name. "...while and cups being picked up and sat down." Should be "set" not "sat," since inanimate objects cannot sit down. *giggles* Though the image is funny. "...wizard walking down the isles of a Muggle supermarket." Should be "aisles." "...elder wizard tucked away both before nodded towards the door." Either add "he" to make the phrase "before he nodded to the door," or change the ending on "nod" to be "nodding." "...looking at him a little bit on the worried." Either add the word "side," after "worried," or change the end of the sentence to read, "...the boy was also looking at him worriedly." "For his part, Severus thought he might go made with waiting." Change "made" to "mad." "Both went to be distinctly happier than the night before." Change "be" to "bed." "...not meeting the full approval of the cleaver little witch, but..." Change "cleaver" to "clever." "...only been parted for about a months time." Should be "month's." "...she hoped that nothing terrible wrong had happened." Should be "terribly." "Hermione thought through just about ever possibility that she could..." Should be "every." Author's Response: Thanks Raven. Yeah, although there's more reading in college, I really don't think it's too bad. I just get annoyed with people. *rolls eyes* Some times they're really dumb. And I'm glad you liked this too. I didn't think it turned out quite how I wanted it, but I couldn't think how to change it, so I'm glad you liked it. YAY! And I'm *winces* ashamed *hangs head* to have fallen behind in your brilliant story. BUT I'm going to try and catch up tonight. I don't have anything, so I'm going to play catch up! YAY!!! And for you, my dear, I shall sing, "Lift Thine Eyes." I think that is a very pretty song, and it's usually sung by three women, so let's pretend it can either be sung as a solo or I have two of my other friends here with me. ^-^ Thanks again!!
Author's Response: Shopping when you both want stuff and need stuff is the best I think. ^-^ And I will try to update as soon as I can. For you I will sing "Et Tra La La Y El Punteado." ( Yay more Italian!!)
Author's Response: LOL No, it's Harry's... but boy would it have been funny if it had been Hermione's!! lol Thanks for a nice review!!
Author's Response: lol Glad you like Mrs. Cadogan. And yes, I dream of a better world. lol Thanks for the review! |
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