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Reviews For Where Once Was Light
I am curious to know where they are seeking sanctuary. Like how you showed Harry's changing views of Severus, such as the physical contact and the voice being soothing. Nice. Just imagining Dumbledore in Muggle clothing, but still with that ridiculously long white flowing beard! Ha! What an image that would be. Glad he feels terrible though, git! I find the image of Severus cooking appealing. You would think that if the man can brew potions (which according to him is an exact art and science), he would be able to cook practically anything. And the idea of both of them doing something so domestic together like washing dishes is just so lovely. (Could I borrow that, possibly?) IS THAT PLACE REAL!? IF IT IS, THAT'S INSANE! (Just saw your author notes...Wow! And you were there? Even cooler! I must look this place up now!) The image of Sirius mumbling about no sleep is just perfect! I can see him doing that! I'm glad you have introduced more characters! I love more characters! Oh man! What a bombshell old Dumbledore just dropped on everyone there! Nice final sentence! Huzzah! Typo Alerts: First of all, point well taken on the (for example) Severus' vs. Severus's thing. One of my reviewers gave me the advice I gave you, and so I passed it on, since that rule always confused me. Point well taken, and it seems as though both are acceptable. Pick your potion, my dear. "“Apartments?” he frowned slightly." A few sentences back, Lily uses a singular, "apartment." If she uses singular, so should he. "“I love you Lily.”" You need a comma before Lily. "With a loud crack, the two wizard appeared in..." Should read, "wizards." This is a very crazy run-on sentence: "He had been sleeping, the Death Eaters had come, but Snape had come for him too, they had left, and the Dursleys house had been caught on fire." It should be separated a little bit. "He had been sleeping. The Death Eaters had come, but Snape had come for him, too. They had left, and the house was set on fire by the Death Eaters." Simple sentences are not bad...Your mind when you think quickly actually tends to think in simple sentences. "But before the younger wizard to offer again, the Potions Master..." Change "to" to "could." "...looking through a Muggle news paper again." Newspaper needs to be one word. "Tonks and Shaklebolt sat yawning, having..." His name is spelled "Shacklebolt." Author's Response: To answer your question about the dishes, why of course you can SILLY! You don't have to credit me or anything, as washing dishes are, unfortunately, a part of life. *sigh* And I'm glad that you liked Sirius so far and Dumbly's misery. And ugh! That whole silly debate on 's' I just wish English could make up its mind sometime! lol And yes! Llanfairpwllgwyngyllgogerychwyrndrobwllllantysiliogogogoch is a cute little Welsh town that I stopped in on a tour group to England,Scotland, and Wales. Like I said, it was just so beautiful and quaint that I just had to fit it in somewhere in the story! It really was beautful. It had this river that ran though the town, and all of the hills and mountains, and all the trees... I miss it!! I'm hoping to use the places I've been when there in the story. I'd go back to Llanfair any time! But holy pronounciation Batman! My Welsh couchdriver couldn't even say it properly! (But then again, they just now reintroduced Welsh back into the schools) But I'm really glad you liked this chapter, and I'm extremely anxious for your next chappie! I found myself looking for it like every ten minutes tonight to see if it was updated yet. But for another great review, I give you a big ol' hug! (as promised) :)
I am curious what the person who came up with that name was thinking of. Author's Response: What name? Ooohhh, you mean Llanfairpwllgwyngyllgogerychwyrndrobwllllantysiliogogogoch? The translation was at the bottom if you didn't see it. *shrug* I just supposed it was a whole religious thing. But thanks for the lovely review! ^_^ You get a hug!
Great chapter. I look forward to Severus and Harry spending some time together. Poor Dumbledore...oh, well, he should have listened! Author's Response: You know, you're like the first person that feels for Dumbly in this. I gives you a hug though! ^^ Thanks again for the review!!
Author's Response: ^^ You make me so happy! Thanks for the wonderful review and I hope I don't disappoint. Slytherin rules!! XD
Now I can't wait for when everyone discovers Harry is alive. Another great chapter. Author's Response: ^^ Thank you! Glad you liked it! A hug for you!
How can you fight evil when you give up your own morals? You just forget what you're fighting for and in the end you'll not be any better than the so called dark side you tried to eradicate!!! And, as in all things, there isn't just black and white and there is no chance at a perfectly white world - you always need black and grey as well, just like there's no light without shadow. And besides, Albus (though his name might indicate the opposite) isn't white at all, neither in your story, nor in canon! He uses people and I'm sure, even with all his grandfather-act, he also ENJOYS being powerful and playing with his pawns! And he justifies it with talks about the greater good, but that's just that: justifications! Making someone into a murderer by ordering them to kill him is just one example. He might deside to sacrifice himself, but he has no right to sacrifice the life of an innocent child! How could he send a toddler to unloving relatives, right after the child lost his parents and is in need of emotional support and familiar faces? I'll never understand how he could sleep at night and look at his own face in a mirror! So, please, let him suffer, let him face the wrath of the people who really cared for Harry like Remus, Sirius and the Weasleys, he deserves, for once, to face the consequences for his own actions, because normally it's his pawns who have to suffer them and pay the prize for his scheming!!! Thanks for the update - I really enjoy this story! Author's Response: Wow...that's exactly how I feel too! I never understood how Dumbledore could get way with all that he did when he's so obviously using other people! It's sick! I thoroughly plan on having him squirm and face the consequences. Thanks for taking the time to review! It means a lot!!
Anyway, back to the story - serves Dumbles right! I hope he has a good long time to sweat (and that the Order rakes him over the coals). Love the Snape and Harry parts as usual! Please more! Author's Response: Well twenty points to you for learning the name! Glad you liked this chapter too! Thanks again. ^^
Wow, that names a mouthful! :) Great chapter as usual. I can't believe that Dumbledore thinks that Harry is dead. So, I guess if Severus reveals that Harry's really alive and is his son, then Dumbledore will be more receptive. Or maybe Sev won't want anyone to know that Harry is really alive. Author's Response: Thanks for the hug! ^^ Ya, I liked that place, even if it's name was ridiculously long. And if you can just hold on, you'll find out what happens. ^^ Oh! And thanks for the review too! *give another hug*
Author's Response: Thank you! ^^ You get a hug!
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