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Reviews For Where Once Was Light
Author's Response: Oh no!! *dramatic music* lol Thanks for the review!!
After all, he is only 13 and has no muggle or magical first aid training, only his memories of the hospital wing... and he had up until now no clue that Severus Snape and Lilly potter, nee Evans knew each other, not to talk about her sister. Well, he will learn a lot this summer, I look forward to read more! Poor Severus seems to be injured badly. Surprise,surprise: Petunia not only recognizes Severus, but she really helps him and is even willing to hide him. Author's Response: Thanks for the great review!! I'm glad you like it!! :)
Author's Response: Let it fall! lol Thanks for the review!
Author's Response: Why thank you! :) Glad you liked it!
Author's Response: Opps! Sorry. Thanks for telling me! I'm glad you like the story though! Sorry about the cliffee though. But don't worry, it won't be a cliffee for long! ^^ Thanks again!!
Author's Response: Thank you! I like to keep things interesting.
This is another really great fic, the second from last line was just so cute! The last line...uh oh, I detech a rat!!! LOL! What an awful joke! *coughs embarrassedly* moving on from that... I still love your writing style. It's just the way you insert small things which just really make the story special. It's brilliant to read! Author's Response: YAY! Someone wants a pinecone!!! You can have as many as your little heart desires!! And thanks for another complement! That really made my day! And I'm glad that everyone seems to be picking up my "little things". YAY! Twenty points to you! Thanks again!
Hilarious that he can't think of anything for Dudley to do but stand in the corner. Aww, Severus's happiness at learning his son should not look like James, shattered the next second. Merlin! Mine was too! Oh, okay. Phew! *smirk* Noticing Severus seemed too excited about all of this. Of course he would be. The practicing thing is pretty interesting. Leave it to Snape to practice, and I loved Harry's thoughts on the practicing. Hmm, staying with the Weasleys. (Won't even lie, I am not a huge fan of pretty much that whole family with the exceptions of Fred, George, Bill, and Arthur, but that's just me...) Poor Severus, now a fugitive. Only two days have passed? Severus made one heck of a recovery in two days for being so injured... I KNEW IT! I KNEW THAT BOTTLE CAP IN THE YARD WAS GOING TO COME BACK! AND WORMTAIL STOLE IT! I KNEW IT WAS COMING BACK!!!! Typo Alerts: "Noticing Vernon and… the other boy- he would really have to learn that whales name- were in the room,..." Whales needs to be possessive to form whale's. "“You are distress,” the professor stated bluntly." Change "distress" to "distressed." This applies to both cases (the sentence after that: "“I assume that you’re distress is rooted in that letter.") "His mother had fallen in love with a man, so..." Change "a" to "the." First thing that popped into my brain when I read that was, "Well, I hope she fell in love with a man!" *giggle* "Heck, even all the Slytherin’s liked the man. Even the Slytherin that were in trouble with the man still seemed to admire Snape." In both case of the House name, use "Slytherins." "But that fact had not yet bloosumed in the Potions Master’s..." "bloosumed" should be spelled, "blossomed." "...Harry realized that the man was in his elements when angry or intimidating." Keep "elements" singular there for "element." Author's Response: The wonderful things about Severus's, are Severus's are wonderful thing! They can heal quickly because they're wizards, and they won't admit that they're tired or hurting when they really are! ^^ And hurrah for you! You guessed it!! Twenty points to you!! And because of your wonderful review, I say, don't worry about the Weasley. I have a plan! *shouts dramatically* ... sorry about that. Thanks again for the review!!
And it is Harry's birthday. *giggles at Severus, "Dear Merlin, what now?"* Typo Alerts: "But his effort was futile as large tears rolled down his shallow cheeks." Did you mean "sallow" as in describing a yellowish-hued or sickly complexion, or "shallow" to imply lacking physical depth? "Sucking up it up and pushing down his phobia, Severus adorned his professor mentality before placing a hand on the rail and silently glided down the steps." Two mistakes in that one. Firstly, remove the first "up" in the beginning of the sentence. Secondly, your verb tenses are all over the place in the second half of the sentence. Either use the following combinations: Present tense: "adorns/placing/gliding" or Past tense: "adorned/placed/glided." "The Muggle shuttered visibly." "Shuttered" means something along the lines of, "to close," while "shuddered" means "to shake, quiver, tremble, shiver." "“Come on, of you want to get out of here,” he coaxed." I think you mean, "if you want to get out of here..." "But I know it would have ment the world to your father if you took his name." Change "ment" to "meant." Sorry I have been completely lax the last few days. Will try better. Author's Response: Don't worry it. HAHA! Poor Neville, never thought about that. But, yeah, you're thinking a little too fast, methinks. But I'm glad you liked Dudley complaining. He would, you know. Thanks again for the great review! I'm looking forward to your update!!:)
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