I'm so glad you did more to this story.
Evidently from this chapter, Harry never had occlumency lessons before in his 5th year.
Aw, I'm so glad that Harry is getting his potion, and Snape and him are finally breaking the ice.
Nice chappie, and I can't wait to see what happens next. Will Draco and Harry become friends, and how will Snape and Harry's relationship progress.
| Title: The Secret That Harry Couldn't Bare
| 21 Nov 2009 3:54 am
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| Reviewer: helga1967 (Anonymous)
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Um...the end? really? may I assume there will be a sequel? it seems like a rather random story if there isnt one, it was more like a good start to a story rather than a complete one :)
| Title: The Secret That Harry Couldn't Bare
| 11 Nov 2009 9:57 am
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| Reviewer: Lady Rosewolf (Anonymous)
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That was so good... but it would be much better if you continued!!! Pls write more!!
| Title: The Secret That Harry Couldn't Bare
| 10 Nov 2009 2:49 am
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| Reviewer: Jenny70503 (Signed)
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I love this!! So angsty, so intense. Perfect!!!
This was a good story. A sequel to it would make a lot of readers very happy. There are loose ends to clear up and father and son need to get to know one another.
| Title: The Secret That Harry Couldn't Bare
| 09 Nov 2009 9:13 pm
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| Reviewer: Baghi (Signed)
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Yeesh. *blinks back tears as the story tugs on heart-strings* Great story.
| Title: The Secret That Harry Couldn't Bare
| 09 Nov 2009 3:41 pm
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| Reviewer: AJ (Anonymous)
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I love this story so much! It's well written and most of all, the description of the workings of each characeter's mind is astonishing!
Please please pleeeease do a sequel!!!
Author's Response: No sequel, but I will be adding more chapters to this story.
Quite an angsty chapter! It felt very good to finally have Harry spill his guts figuratively (after he spilled them literally) to Snape. It does seem rather an abrupt ending, though. If you wish to end the story here because your title seems to be the endpoint, that's fine. But the story does feel like you've stopped it where it feels like it should be taking off. Might I suggest a sequel? Think about it first, of course. Now that Harry has connected to his father, and Severus has discovered he has a son, a whole new world lies before them both. Whatever you decide as writer, it's up to you.
One correction, offered with respect. In the paragraph beginning: "My whole life, has been a wasted lie," Harry finally managed to choke out, confusing Severus even more. What was he on about? Now that Harry was there sitting in his office crying, a CHORD was struck in him..." The saying is a musical analogy, like an important harmony being heard for the first time.
Anyway, thanks for all your hard work. Good story.
Author's Response: Yes, the musical analogy was what I was going for, but it was very late when I was writing and was apparently too tired to spell anything right. Thanks for the help though.
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