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Title: Coup d'état 19 Mar 2010 1:01 am
Reviewer: darkorangecat (Signed) [Report This]
    Great description of how tired Severus was, you built it up quite nicely so that the reader felt sorry for him when faced with a handful of students upon his arrival in the dungeons. I think it is wonderful that Hermione is now in Slytherin. Nice work.

    Author's Response: Thanks. I really wanted the reader to feel for poor Severus by the time he reached the dungeons- too tired to think and, oh dear, got to deal with House politics. I'm glad that Hermione's resorting has recieved such a positive response ^^
Title: Coup d'état 18 Mar 2010 11:57 pm
Reviewer: Stefunny2010 (Signed) [Report This]
    Aw:) I LOVE it! Harry seems to have come to some sort of peace with himself, at least for now, which is great! Slytherin is definitely the House to watch though I cant wait to see what happens between Gryffindor and Slytherin now. Great job!

    Author's Response: Thanks ^^ I'm glad you enjoyed it
Title: Quills and Inquisition 18 Mar 2010 8:23 pm
Reviewer: Kristeh (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, I'm looking forward to this confrontation! I'm glad that Severus knows what she really is.

    Great chapter!

    Author's Response: Thanks ^^ I hope the chapter lives up to your expectations :)
Title: Culpam Poena Premit Comes 18 Mar 2010 8:34 am
Reviewer: silverstargirl (Signed) [Report This]
    Pity that Severus is a law-abiding citizen....not that Petunia didn't get a good dose of just desserts, but I guess I'm just too vindictive to be satisfied. :D I would have added in a spell that would teach her the true error of her ways by making her experience what Harry did, as well as what Severus did to her. I actually think that his first spell will prove to be the most effective; she has lost her baby..poor thing...NOT!

    Great chapter!

    Author's Response: I thought about that but, considering how much Petunia loves and idolises Dudley, it feels like it would be far more effective to make him go through the torments- in his dreams- and wake up reviling her. It's sort of like the difference between having a life-threatening illness yourself and watching someone you love dying; if it's you who is ill, you can bully yourself into keeping your spirits up whereas, if it's someone you love, their pain will cause you an anguish which you cannot reason away. Think about Lily's plea to the Dark Lord "Not Harry, please no, take me, kill me instead"; she would rather die herself than watch her baby killed and I think that, for Petunia, knowing that Dudley had suffered, albeit for one night, what Harry had suffered, would be far worse than if she was subjected to the experience for every day of the rest of her life.
Title: Culpam Poena Premit Comes 18 Mar 2010 7:08 am
Reviewer: missny1 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Sev was very creative, but the thing that would destroy any mother is your child hating you. Good for dudley, revenge is sweet!

    Author's Response: Thanks ^^ I'm glad you approve on my style of justice lol!
Title: Culpam Poena Premit Comes 18 Mar 2010 6:30 am
Reviewer: darkorangecat (Signed) [Report This]
    Those do sound like just punishments. I like that the things which Petunia prised the most are being deprived of her. Seems quite fitting.

    Author's Response: Thanks ^^ I thought so too.
Title: Muddying the Waters 18 Mar 2010 6:21 am
Reviewer: darkorangecat (Signed) [Report This]
    I love it! The firsties taking it upon themselves to resort Hermione. I really do hope that it will actually happen. I think she would be a great addition as a Slytherin to this story. Excellent writing! :D

    Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I thought it'd be rather sweet and funny for the 'evil' house to turn around and put Gryffindor to shame lol. Hermione's very intelligent, ambitous and has a fair degree of cunning, so I agree that she'd be a great addition to Slytherin.
Title: Culpam Poena Premit Comes 18 Mar 2010 5:39 am
Reviewer: Stefunny2010 (Signed) [Report This]
    I love that Hermione could possibly (most likely) move to Slytherin! I didnt see that coming, I did think that she and Harry may become friends but this is even better! And I definitely think Petunia got what was coming to her! You did a great job with both of these chapters:)

    I just have one question, did Dudley really not notice anything going on? I know he is only 11, but after Vernon died didnt Dudley notice how mean his mom was to Harry? Or did he truly believe that Harry deserved it? Or maybe Petunia really did threaten him too? I dunno, anyway just curious.

    Author's Response:

    Dudley did know what was happening to Harry but he had been indoctrinated by his mother to believe that Harry was a freak who deserved whatever he got. It takes a bright, inquiring mind to look at the situation in which one has lived all their lives and think 'this is not right because of a, b and c' and Dudley just doesn't have that type of mind; In the cannon, Dudley accepts it when Harry is locked in a cupboard, starved, emotionally abused and treated as a slave and, indeed, endorses and aids his parents neglect by beating Harry up and frightening away potential friends. In this fic, Dudley 'sees the light' and, like many people who suddenly find themselves complicit in abuse, he pretends that he knew all along that what was happening was wrong but was too scared to speak out.

    Thanks for the compliments; I'm really glad you like the idea of Hermione being in Slytherin. In the canon, we see the Slyths from an outsider and aggressor's point of view. Although it is arguable that some of the Slyths would not have developed into nice people whatever the circumstances, there is a degree of self-fulfilling prophesy: Harry is told that Slytherins are evil, backstabbing bastards and, because he treats them with suspicion and contempt, they act like evil, backstabbing bastards. However, from a friendly, insider's point of view, the Slyths are going to show the nice sides of their characters and, with the softening influence of Harry and Hermione, could develop very differently.

Title: Culpam Poena Premit Comes 18 Mar 2010 4:51 am
Reviewer: amsilcox (Signed) [Report This]
    I think there is so much more that Severus could do to Petunia. I will leave it up to your discretion but oh what there is yet to affect her. Does Dudley have any magic in him or would he be considered a squib? I really am enjoying this story. Will Hermione get resorted into Slytherin and will Severus help her get new school books and what will happen to the girls in the Gryffendor dorm.

    Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Dudley is a squib- no magic in him whatsoever- but I can't tell you anymore (much as I want to) because I really shouldn't spill too many spoilers for the plot.
Title: Culpam Poena Premit Comes 18 Mar 2010 2:59 am
Reviewer: Kitsune-chan (Signed) [Report This]
    I like how you've portrayed Petunia and Eileen; it always annoys me to know end when the women are portrayed as angels and the men as complete, bullying jerks. Petunia as the 'nicer' one or even a victim completely annoys me; I view her as worse, and the one much more prone to being abusive. Your portrayal of Vernon as nice is something I have a little bit of an issue with, but not enough to decrease my enjoyment of the story. Love your Tobias; I wish that we could have seen more of him than that brief glance.

    The revenge thing by a teacher (especially Severus) is a bit overdone, although you're doing it well and giving it some twists of your own. Still, could stand to be... individualized more.

    One little nitpicky thing (I'm really pedantic about factual stuff): in the year 1000, they wouldn't have been using Middle English yet; instead, they would have been speaking Old English (Anglo-Saxon), which was an entirely different language, not yet having been influenced by a dialect of Old French called Anglo-Norman (also had added a lot of German influences). Salazar's manuscript would have had to have been translated sometime after 1100, when Middle English started developing after the Norman conquest; preferably, late fourteenth century (vaguely intelligible at that point). (Information from a website on the history of the English language)

    Wow, I'm -really- prone to prattle on, aren't I? Sorry for the super-long review, but succintness is not my forte by a long shot (unless I'm trying to write long essays, in which case my brain only ever supplies the most concise way of wording something. Stupid brain).

    Anyways,keep up the good work! (My nit-picking aside)

    Author's Response:

    Thanks for the review. I know that my Vernon is rather 'Alternate Universe' but I really wanted to mirror Severus and Harry's lives.

    Considering what most of my reviewers have said, I don't think they would have been all that pleased if I let Petunia off scott-free lol! However, Severus's revenge is just the beginning of the story.

    As for Slytherin's book, I have the problem that, if I wrote in actual Anglo-Saxon, I'd have to spend a couple of hours on the translation and then add huge long paragraphs in the End Notes, translating it back into Modern English. And then there is also the fact that Slytherin's phrasology, I feel, adds charm to his writings (which, if I used Old English, would be lost to any reader who couldn't understand Anglo-Saxon.) Therefore, I've compromised by germanic words (and spellings) where I can and throwing in the odd bit of Old Norse or Latin. Sometimes one needs to find a balence between authenticity and practicality.

     P.S. I have a BA in English Literature and I specialised in Old English ;)


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