i really love the way this story is going! i can't wait to read more!
| Title: Just A Brother
| 24 May 2011 2:03 pm
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| Reviewer: meadowphoenix (Anonymous)
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This was a great chapter. That muffing was inspired and I like the fact that Kenai and Harry are getting along. Kids change their minds easier, I think.
One point though: Being able to block your mind is Occlumency, and a person capable of it is an Occlumens. Being able to read minds is Legilimency, and such a person is a Legilimens
| Title: Two Sons, Not One
| 23 May 2011 3:57 am
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| Reviewer: hawkswench (Anonymous)
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Harry and Kenai's relationship would be moving faster as they have a common enemy in the form of Umbridge. Sort of the enemy of my enemy is my friend. Are you going to have Severus read the entries that Harry writes? Lets say that someone grabs the book by mistake and then drops it?
:)Yay an update.
I wonder what Snape's thinking now. Nice that he publicly acknowledged Harry.
Good job.
CF
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| Title: Just A Brother
| 23 May 2011 12:59 am
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| Reviewer: Kristi (Anonymous)
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I'm glad that you updated. This was great! I thought the scene where Umbridge wet herself due to the drugged muffin was hilarious. Harry and Kenai should not have tried to hold in their laughter; that just made it obvious that they were the ones who did it. Also, Legilimency is how Severus can "read minds" and tell if someone is lying. Will Severus confront the Dursleys about how they treated his son? Please update again soon!
Author's Response: Legilimency is what the art is called, but one who can preform legilimency is called an Occlumens. Thanks for the review.
| Title: Two Sons, Not One
| 23 May 2011 12:53 am
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| Reviewer: Me (Anonymous)
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Great story. But I still don't understand Snape. HOW can he actually care now? He knew what Harry was like, what he had to go through, (the Dursleys, Umbridge's lines) but he never did ANYthing about it at all. And now suddenly he's all understanding and gentle and letting him off without punishments. The one Forbidden Forest event just wasn't big enough for this sort of change.
Author's Response: He didn't/doesn't know about what happened at the Dursleys, only that Harry stays there during breaks. You might want to go back and re-read Snape's moments, because there is all kinds of insight into why he cares. Thanks for the review.
Luff! Awesome chapter and thank you for updating and not abandoning the story! (I kinda thought that it was abandoned, but glad to see that it isn't) :)
Author's Response: I never abandon stories, and honestly it wasn't that long since I last updated before this. I work two jobs, have a toddler and a husband, and go to school full time, so sometimes real life makes it hard to find time to write. Thanks for the review.
| Title: Two Sons, Not One
| 22 May 2011 11:59 pm
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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I love this chappy dearly. Awesome!
Thanks very very very much for updating! (I was worried that you had ditched the fic, so seeing an update was absolutely superb)
Author's Response: THanks for the review. By the way, I never abandon fics. I have a lot going on in life and to be honest, it really wasn't that long since I last updated.
I've really enjoyed this story, even with the convoluted 'how did he end up with two sons almost the same age' issue. The Severus in your story is alot more IC than in many stories (including mine). The boys interaction has been believable - jealousy between siblings is quite usual especially when one is defending what he believes is his exclusive territory. Keep up the good work!!
Author's Response: Thanks very much!
Author's Response: Thanks very much!
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