Potions and Snitches
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Title: Chapter 15: Crime and Punishment 07 Aug 2009 1:56 am
Reviewer: Raven Knight (Signed) [Report This]
    Nice descripton on how Vernon sounds when he complains about Snape breaking his nose. It was nice and vivid. HAHA! He "disconnected" the telephone! That is so funny... Oh, oh dear. He made Vernon quit his job. Oh dear. How would the Dursleys maintain the house bills, now? Harry stopped almost saying Snape mentally after he gave the "change your clothes orders." Very interesting. Just standing there will be torture enough for Dudley. I almost feel bad for Petunia...Almost. I mean, yes, what she did was wrong, but without her, Severus would not have even known that he and Harry are related. I wonder if he would think of this and be slightly more lenient with her.

    Typo Alerts: "Dazed, Vernon allowed the help and seemed able to register that sitting on the ground was not a place that he would want to be at." The word "at" does not need to be in the sentence. "...bloody talking about,” Vernon had the nerve to speak at all." It is only oddly worded after the dialogue. May I suggest, "...Vernon said, surprisingly having the nerve to speak at all." "...good for you,” Snape went back to his pacing." Just a question: When did he start pacing? "Vernon was almost as bad, still shaking with fright, while Petunia stood up slowly, but all but ran from the room." Change the first "but" to either "and/yet." "Sure, the Weasley’s assured him that what his relatives..." Weasleys does not need the apostrophe, because it is not possessive but plural. Also in a later part of the same sentence, "...but no one had ever told Harry that he did not in someway deserve what he got..." separate "someway" into two words, "some" and "way."

    Author's Response: Thanks for another good review!!^^ And by the way, I REALLY liked your last chapter! Made me scared, but interested. Thanks again!!
Title: Chapter 16: A Time for Answers 07 Aug 2009 1:32 am
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    I would be pleased to donate to the "Make Ivy-Green Smile Fund". You definitely deserve a smile, oh young author!

    You do know that your updates are the bright spot of my day.

    I love how Severus dealt with Dudley, and Petunia, and I'm dying to know what he does to Vernon.

    Author's Response: Thank you for your donation! It really did bring a bright smile to my face! Glad you liked it! ^^
Title: Chapter 16: A Time for Answers 07 Aug 2009 1:25 am
Reviewer: B00kw0rm92 (Signed) [Report This]
    Oooooh. Wonderful! I almost feel sorry for Petunia. I can't wait for the next chapter!

    Author's Response: Thank you very much!! ^^
Title: Chapter 16: A Time for Answers 07 Aug 2009 1:15 am
Reviewer: Phoenix1 (Signed) [Report This]
    So Harry has to do his homework, and Dudley has to do dishes.... nice turnabout for a change. Looking forward to more interactions between Snape and Vernoun.

    Author's Response: Teehee! Don't worry though, Vernon's not going to like Snape any better after they leave. Thanks for reviewing!
Title: Chapter 16: A Time for Answers 07 Aug 2009 12:51 am
Reviewer: Fairner (Signed) [Report This]
    The reason Petunia gave does make sense, a whole heck of a lot =) Ah but there's the Vernon problem now...hopefully it'll be dealt with.

    Author's Response: Yes, Vernon's not going to be too pleased... oh well! ^^ He's got no say in the matter! Thanks for reviewing!!
Title: Chapter 15: Crime and Punishment 06 Aug 2009 8:05 pm
Reviewer: S.S (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Love the new chapter starting to get really interesting can't wait to see what snape has for the dursleys next

    Author's Response: Thank ya kindly! Glad you like it!
Title: Chapter 15: Crime and Punishment 06 Aug 2009 7:47 pm
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Fun to read!

    Author's Response: Thanks!! :)
Title: Chapter 15: Crime and Punishment 06 Aug 2009 7:03 pm
Reviewer: Kristeh (Signed) [Report This]
    Wonderful chapter! Severus' handling of the Dursleys was just perfect!

    I am really enjoying your story!

    Author's Response: Thank you!! :)
Title: Chapter 14: Reintroductions 06 Aug 2009 6:59 pm
Reviewer: Kristeh (Signed) [Report This]
    Ah, Vernon is his usual charming self, isn't he?

    Loved the scene with Severus and Harry. I'm so happy that finally they each will have someone and not be alone any more.

    I don't think the Dursleys are in for a pleasant morning, lol!

    Author's Response: lol No indeed! Glad you liked it! Thanks for the review!
Title: Chapter 13: In the Cupboard 06 Aug 2009 6:56 pm
Reviewer: Kristeh (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, Severus has caught on! Now the fun can begin, lol!

    I loved Harry sleeping on the floor by the bed (even if the poor kid didn't have much of a choice) and there were some great lines here, such as:

    >>> He was supposed to be the terrifying Potions Master, not the hugs and flowers potions teacher.

    I had a crazy, but hilarious mental image of Severus skipping about Hogwarts, strewing flowers in his wake, and pausing to hug students and pat them on the head. Talk about a disturbing image...

    And another line that made me grin:

    >>>It looked like Lockhart had thrown up in here on Valentine's Day.


    Now I just can't wait for the next chapter...luckily I don't have to!

    Author's Response: HAHAHA!! Yeah, the whole flowers and potions teacher one I actually got the idea when I drew a picture of myself skipping around him throwing flower petles when some of my friends and I were trying to illustrate the 404 ways to annoy Severus Snape... or it was something like that. This was number 12, I think. Glad you liked it! :D Thanks again!

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