Title: Breakdown
| 18 Feb 2005 1:01 pm
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Reviewer: Rachel A. Prongs (Anonymous)
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Well, at least *Gordon* can do something right. *sigh* What I'm thinking about is; how can they punish him with magic at all? For Harry magic was an escape from everything bad. The only ones who's hurt him with magic is his enemies - what is he to think when his friends starts doing the same?
Go you. I loved it.
Title: Breakdown
| 18 Feb 2005 12:35 pm
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Reviewer: annoyed (Anonymous)
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This funky blue-gray background is hard on the eyes, and frankly the site is poorly setup. If someone is going to attempt to compete with established services, they should differentiate themselves in a positive fashion.
Title: Breakdown
| 18 Feb 2005 9:16 am
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Reviewer: Harper (Anonymous)
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Nice chapter and nice site :D i think the POV thing from Hermione was a bit awkward since you already wrote the beginning of this chapter in the previous one. Still, despite this and the fact Harry was a little ooc it was still a fairly good chapter. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: I argued with myself a lot over whether to overlap with the last chapter, and finally decided that it was going to happen no matter what, since I wasn't going to do Harry's perspective and it made no sense to start someone else's POV in the middle of Harry's breakdown. After trying several different approaches (part of the reason this chapter took so long!), I finally settled on Hermione for giving a different perspective (and explaining why his friends weren't in the room with him). I'm sorry to hear that you felt that Harry was OOC, but I'd like to hear more about *why* you felt he was OOC.
Title: Breakdown
| 18 Feb 2005 7:00 am
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Reviewer: Mikee (Anonymous)
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Title: Breakdown
| 18 Feb 2005 6:54 am
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Reviewer: steffles (Anonymous)
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I hope Gordon lays into them again. I really enjoy this original character. I does what an outsider character should, give you a fresh perspective, but he isn't jarring or falsely inserted into the story.
I like that we got the kids' view of events as well. I hope the adults have FINALLY learned to be careful with Harry. Please be quicker with the next chapter, if possible. I'll for one be waiting eagerly no matter how long it takes.
Title: Breakdown
| 18 Feb 2005 6:13 am
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Reviewer: zorro x (Anonymous)
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Oh, poor Harry. I love Gordon, though. Absolutely cannot wait for Snape to live out three days as Harry Potter. Please update quickly!
Title: Breakdown
| 18 Feb 2005 6:13 am
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Reviewer: ennui deMorte (Anonymous)
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Great chapter!! I love seeing the scene from Hermione's point of view ~ definitely gave the scene a whole different feel. I am SO looking forward to two things: (1) The scene where Gordon explains exactly what happened with Harry ~ can't wait to see their reactions. Harry should be happy that Remus was angry with Arthur for the book. and (2) Severus at the Dursleys. Looking forward to more!!
Author's Response: Due to some changes in the plot treatment, I've decided not to include Severus at the Dursleys in the main story. However, you can find it here (and eventually at FF.net) under the name "Snape's Punishment". :-)
Title: Breakdown
| 18 Feb 2005 6:11 am
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Reviewer: raven (Anonymous)
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Could you pretty please add another chapter.....please???
Title: Breakdown
| 18 Feb 2005 6:07 am
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Reviewer: jbcna (Anonymous)
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That was a really geat chapter so emotional finnaly he is opening up cant wait for more!!!!!!!!!
Title: Breakdown
| 18 Feb 2005 5:17 am
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Reviewer: Tithe (Anonymous)
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Well, took you long enough to update, but it was definitely worth it. I've been waiting for Harry to break down forever now. By the way, I loved the whole 'Contrariwise' thing. Clever, I guess. Anyway, update soon.
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