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Reviews For Another Chance At Childhood
it's such a disappointment that Snape never met the Dursleys in the books (yes, i suppose there is hope yet, but it is only slim) because the situation is always so delightfully entertaining to read: the Bane of Harry's Life Hogwarts version (snape) meets the Bane of Harry's Life holiday version (the Dursleys). And seeing how the Dursleys despise magic, and Snape despises Muggles (or at the very least probably has significant prejudices about them) the only outcome can be dramatic fireworks. i love it. you could edit your work a bit and polish up your writing, but the plot and pace are well-done. Author's Response: Thanks :) I'm glad you like it. On my work I don't have an editor or a beta reader because my chapters come rather sporadically. I use mostly MSWord to correct grammar and spelling although I consult some reference books I have if I'm too much in doubt. I would really appreciate any suggestions into correcting my work, as English is not my native language and I only get to practice it while reading (books, magazines, and fanfiction) or writing fanfiction.
1st chapter is a bit cut down at the bottom so I think you must update that one a bit:) A great story I really like it and can't wait to read more:) Keep up the great work and update as soon as you possibly can:) May you be blessed with inspiration and have fun writing:) Bye for now:) Author's Response: I'm not really sure what you meant with 'a bit cut out', but it was supposed to end like that. It was to be a small cliff hanger.
Author's Response: I've been out of sorts, and away from the Inuyasha community. But Present Time was up all the way to chapter 27 in MediaMiner.org I'll post it in my LiveJournal soon if you want to check it there.
That was really well done! I like the way the neighbours were noticing and Petunia was getting worried. Poor Harry. And poor Hedwig! I don't think much of the Order, for saying they'd keep an eye on him and completely ignoring him. Author's Response: On the original draft Hedwig was only hurt, but it didn't flow the way I wanted it. So she had to go. I didn't want her to but there was no other way. As to the neighbors, they really had to be really daft not to notice there were problems in the Dursley house hold, but as it happens in real life too, not everyone is willing to do something to stop the problem. I'm still not sure if I'm going to do more with them, but the idea is intriging and I might still have them do something. The Order in this case is not actually keeping an eye on Harry. They didn't in book six, just the letters, and so I'm using that bit of information. There were no guards outside Privet Drive. The rest will be explained in later chapters. |
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