| Title: Chapter 4: Journal
| 05 May 2021 12:10 am
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| Reviewer: Cayj (Signed)
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Snape's a fudging idiot! The girl brings you a spell that only you can do to try and find the boy and you wanna sit and wallow in grief that you barely deserve to feel anyway. It's his m.o. He did it when lily and james were killed, he did it for the next 17 years and he's doing it now. It's like he NEEDS to feel like he is to blame and that there's no hope to fix anything or else he cant live his pathetic little life. Well good riddance! Harry's right, there's only one choice: he can never know. Absolutely brilliant how were seeing this new version of harry and it writes very well rather than just downloading a lot of info on us at once. Great story, can't wait to see if you continue it
such a sad chapie, toward to the end, anyway!!
onward to see what in the box!! great detaill in the chapie...
| Title: Chapter 4: Journal
| 04 Dec 2015 1:32 pm
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| Reviewer: tb_ll57 (Anonymous)
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I liked the mix of austerity and lyricality in the way you've written Snape's narration. You conveyed it very well with that line about floating under the surface of a lake-- all the feeling is there, but you only let through the smallest bits of it at just the right times, and you give it room to breathe. I especially loved the last line of this chapter; you do a great job conveying lost opportunities, but that one in particular is heart-rending.
Please update this masterpiece before I go mad
| Title: Chapter 4: Journal
| 07 Apr 2014 5:24 am
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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Wow, watercrystal review pointed me to your story. Probably not much hope you'll continue after all this time but...if a review can still reach you, I hope you'll consider it.
Thank you anyway for the postings so far, this is a very different story and very descriptive writing.
UGH, WHY??? My word, why does this stop? It's so stunning beyond words, I can't even. Wow, what a ride these few chapters. I certainly wish there was more and I definitely hope beyond all possible wishes that you'll pop up out of nowhere to continue this amazing story. Truly, this is a gem.
oh my god!!! (i say this at the risk of sounding like a typical teen but i believe your story deserves it!!)
I LOVE your story!!..your writing is absolutely amazing!..i'm sorry i haven't reviewed for the earlier chapters but i just found this story and couldn't stop till i had finished!! I'm pretty sure i flunking my test tomorrow!! But it was totally worth it!!
I adore your style of writing and your easy command of the language is spellbinding. The way you capture the scene as well a the emotions through just words..its a remarkable skill!!
I could literally picture the scenes and fell the vibes of emotions coming to me while i was reading!!
I'm curious as to why Hermione doesn't wanna be called Miss Granger... anything to do with Ron??
Looking forward to see if and how she manages to convince snape...
Sorry if I have rambled a lot!!..Thanks for taking the time to write such a wonderful fic!!
Looking forward to a speed update!!
PLEASE UPDATE SOON! I need to know what happens next! Also how old are they, because this story is based PREHBP and yet it sounds like this is POSTDH but with Dumbledore alive. So, sorry but I am confused. Is Harry 16, 17, or 18?
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