| Title: Chapter 3: A Secret Shared
| 21 Feb 2007 5:30 am
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| Reviewer: Kirinin (Signed)
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I think I've held my breath long enough that any other person would have had the decency to pass out by now.
As usual, your tone is gorgeous. You create the perfect mood to highlight and bring forward your main character's feelings, using the box, the fire, the untouched legions of whiskey. Snape giving up Lily because he wanted to protect her is perfectly plausible; Harry keeping his parentage secret, the same. Snape thinks it is uncharacteristic of Harry, but I don't; Harry keeps his secrets well in canon, only revealing things at what he considers to be the 'right' time - or not at all, such as the fact that the Hat wanted to put him in Slytherin.
Severus's near-obsession with the mahogany box might be just a *hair* overdone, but not off-puttingly so. I can see his personality shifting under the weight of this new knowledge, and it is fascinating to witness.
Of course I, and likely all of your readers, are probably waiting for Harry to return, since we are not certain he has died. Hmm.
Also, perfect choice of poem - lovely.
-K
| Title: Chapter 3: A Secret Shared
| 28 Sep 2006 3:53 am
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| Reviewer: Kathy (Anonymous)
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Oh good grief, this is one of the most moving stories in the Severus as father genre that I've ever read. When will you update?
| Title: Chapter 3: A Secret Shared
| 23 Sep 2006 9:50 pm
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| Reviewer: Rezallia (Anonymous)
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This is awesome-- you need to update!
| Title: Chapter 3: A Secret Shared
| 07 Sep 2006 3:22 pm
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| Reviewer: Rhiannon (Anonymous)
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Briliant! Hope to read more soon!
| Title: Chapter 3: A Secret Shared
| 01 Aug 2006 7:57 pm
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| Reviewer: Candy_Stick (Anonymous)
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OMG!! You have become one of my favourite authors! Your writing is amazing and you keep away from OOC and harry-is-snape's-son-they-love-each-other-and-become-the-perfect-family. Like poppy and memory comes second in my list of favourite stories and 1st is Savior. I can't wait to see how this story developes. I bet Harry isn't dead and when Severus opens Harry journal it tells him where he is or something like that. You are an excellent writer and I can't wait to read more.
| Title: Chapter 3: A Secret Shared
| 24 Jul 2006 9:15 pm
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| Reviewer: bluesparrow (Anonymous)
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Ack! Talk about a cliffhanger! I think what I enjoy most about this story is the quality of your writing. I can feel the box under my fingers, feel the quietness of Snape's obsession with it. I do wonder if there is a 'reason' behind all the drinking? It does make me feel a bit uncomfortable--which is not a bad thing. Anyway, like everyone else here, looking forward to an update.
| Title: Chapter 3: A Secret Shared
| 21 Jul 2006 6:41 am
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| Reviewer: Ivanova (Anonymous)
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This is an excellent story so far. For some unknown reason I just love "Snape is Harry's father" stories :-) Your story takes a slight twist on the theme, after death, and I find it quite intriguing. Please post more as soon as possible. Thank you kindly.
Author's Response: Thank you - I'll try to not make you wait too long. :)
| Title: Chapter 3: A Secret Shared
| 17 Jul 2006 3:45 am
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| Reviewer: Lisa (Anonymous)
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Hermione was waaaaaay overwritten. Like many fics, it doesn't seem like she should really be in the story, just that the author's thinking, "Well, Hermione always has to be doing something important, so I have to fit her into this scene somehow." Especially in the scene with Lupin; I think it would have been more effective as just a scene between him and Snape. That was the most jarring thing for me- not that Snape was suddenly not so set against Harry, but that Hermione was becoming so involved in his life. That's what really made him seem unSnapelike. As for the Harry part, that was getting quite interesting, with all the things Snape was discovering. There's a good "ooo, what's going to happen next?" vibe to it.
Author's Response: Sorry you didn't like Hermione ... I don't see her as being "so involved in his life" but rather just as pursuing her natural curiosity as to the nature of the bequest that her best friend left him. She isn't there for no reason ... I'm going to need her later so I hope you can bear with her for now.
| Title: Chapter 3: A Secret Shared
| 16 Jul 2006 12:15 am
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| Reviewer: deb (Anonymous)
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please update soon its been so long since you updated!!
Author's Response: Sorry ... I didn't mean to take so long, honestly. I'll try to write more often.
Again, this was incredibly lyrical and poignant. A real lump-in-the-throat chapter. I'm glad Remus insisted on coming to play.
Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! I appreciate your kind words and yes, I'm glad that Remus came along too ... I was really stuck for awhile without him.
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