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Title: Chapter 1 24 Apr 2006 4:52 pm
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]

    Whoo! What an awesome beginning!! Wow, lol I loved how Draco told Snape what Harry was doing - sleeping with his shoes as a pillow was the kicker. Great job. I loved the meeting Snape and Harry had and it was a good choice to have it from Snape's POV. One minor thing I noticed though was that you used some descriptive words for Harry a little too often - waif, the huge green eyes. Those descriptions need to be nestled in better and not used as casually.

    You have something here, and i'm really excited to read more. Everyone's in charcter, and once more, even with a Slytherin sorting, the Hogwarts universe and Snape being his teacher seems so canon the way he's going about it. Good job!



    Author's Response:

    Thanks for the feedback and kind words.

    I used the repeated descriptions on purpose. Snape doesn't see Harry as a person just now ... only as an annoying child. It will get better, I think. 

Title: Chapter 1 24 Apr 2006 3:11 pm
Reviewer: maur4mee (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I hope that you will continue with this story and that it is not just a one-shot.  Very well written and gripping story line.  I'd love to see how Severus will turn Harry into what he must become.  I'd rather Severus be Harry's mentor than Dumbledore.  I will watch this story -- it's on my favorites list.

    Author's Response: Yes, it will definitely be Severus for Harry's mentor rather than Dumbledore. Somehow I don't think Dumbledore has it in him to understand what Harry's gone through.
Title: Chapter 1 24 Apr 2006 7:31 am
Reviewer: Bratling (Signed) [Report This]
    Poor Harry.  Please, more soon!


    Author's Response: thanks for reviewing!
Title: Chapter 1 24 Apr 2006 6:44 am
Reviewer: Ariana (Anonymous) [Report This]
     This is a wonderful beginning! I particularly enjoyed how you laid the foundations for why Severus is going to help Harry. Often in fanfic he suddenly feels sorry for him or realises that he was mistaken about Harry being his father's son. The idea of vengence is fairly undeveloped, though, and very Snapish! I also liked how frustrated Severus was with Harry... he's going to help him, but he's not going to become sweetness and light! I can't wait to see if you go further with this and how their relationship grows. Great job!

    Author's Response: Thank you! I'm tired of the sudden switch in Snape's personality that you often see in stories as well. There's no way that people change that fast ... I do think that his personality will be evolving a little, because he's definitely not a static character, but it will hopefully be slow enough to be realistic.
Title: Chapter 1 24 Apr 2006 6:20 am
Reviewer: Fairycatcher1 (Signed) [Report This]
    CONTINUE!!!!! I LOVE IT!


    Author's Response: Thank you. :)
Title: Chapter 1 24 Apr 2006 5:34 am
Reviewer: Nafs (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Wow, that certainly was an interesting vignette. I'd like to see it continued, if you have a clear idea of all the ways that the Dursleys abused Harry and how Snape will gain his trust, also if he'd have to go back.  *grin* I'm also a big fan of vengeance-against-the-Dursleys scenes, but that's just me


    Author's Response: I think that vengeance against the Potters might just evolve into vengeance against the Dursleys ... eventually. You'll have to wait for it!
Title: Chapter 1 24 Apr 2006 5:31 am
Reviewer: starangel2106 (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh you just have to continue.  First chapter and you have me hooked, which most authors can't do.   Snape is so IC it's amazing, honestly...just wonderful. waiting for more. :D

    Author's Response: Thank you very much, I tried hard to keep Snape IC. Do let me know if he falls out of character, won't you?
Title: Chapter 1 24 Apr 2006 5:12 am
Reviewer: pdantzler (Signed) [Report This]

    Good first chapter. I haven't read many like it - it sounds very original. I look forward to seeing more

    Keep writing please!



    Author's Response: Thank you very much!

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