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Reviews For Savior
Whoo! What an awesome beginning!! Wow, lol I loved how Draco told Snape what Harry was doing - sleeping with his shoes as a pillow was the kicker. Great job. I loved the meeting Snape and Harry had and it was a good choice to have it from Snape's POV. One minor thing I noticed though was that you used some descriptive words for Harry a little too often - waif, the huge green eyes. Those descriptions need to be nestled in better and not used as casually. You have something here, and i'm really excited to read more. Everyone's in charcter, and once more, even with a Slytherin sorting, the Hogwarts universe and Snape being his teacher seems so canon the way he's going about it. Good job! Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback and kind words. I used the repeated descriptions on purpose. Snape doesn't see Harry as a person just now ... only as an annoying child. It will get better, I think.
Author's Response: Yes, it will definitely be Severus for Harry's mentor rather than Dumbledore. Somehow I don't think Dumbledore has it in him to understand what Harry's gone through.
Author's Response: thanks for reviewing!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm tired of the sudden switch in Snape's personality that you often see in stories as well. There's no way that people change that fast ... I do think that his personality will be evolving a little, because he's definitely not a static character, but it will hopefully be slow enough to be realistic.
Author's Response: Thank you. :)
Author's Response: I think that vengeance against the Potters might just evolve into vengeance against the Dursleys ... eventually. You'll have to wait for it!
Author's Response: Thank you very much, I tried hard to keep Snape IC. Do let me know if he falls out of character, won't you?
Good first chapter. I haven't read many like it - it sounds very original. I look forward to seeing more Keep writing please! Author's Response: Thank you very much! |
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