Great story! Severus finally seems to have twigged to what everyone was trying to get him to realise...
But...please update?
| Title: Chapter 12
| 16 Nov 2007 6:35 am
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| Reviewer: salem (Anonymous)
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AWESOME! Very believeable, and I love the way snape interacts with people.
Oh! I do wish you were still updating this fic. Are you? Please? Please??
This is quite possibly one of the best stories I have ever read. It is impeccably written, and the style is excellent. In fact, it rather reminds me of Snape. The thing that struck me most, however, was the fact that Snape was so IC. His reasons for helping Harry, his behavior, the way you described his love of potions...wonderful.
"Potter was alone in every sense of the word, alone before his destiny – as every man was in the end – but alone in his every day world and in his childhood as well." --Amazing, so amazingly Snape. Such a volatile statement that is applicable in your story and in canon.
One problem, however. An awkwardness of words.
"Potter’s father has wronged me and Potter … and Potter has been wronged, wronged by every soul he had reason to trust." --make it had to retain your tense. And since you did not put this in thought form, the "me" is not appropriate here.
Also, the idea of using Harry's first name to show growing affection is a tad overused.
I look forward to finishing this story, unless I find another error or something that I really enjoy, I will review again when I finish.
| Title: Chapter 10
| 31 Jan 2007 3:48 pm
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| Reviewer: lathwyn (Anonymous)
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i was really enjoying this, but you just lost me. sorry, bye.
| Title: Chapter 12
| 29 Jan 2007 9:57 am
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| Reviewer: Slytherin Reader (Anonymous)
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Really great update, don't worry about OOC you keep the characters nicely in the right way. Keep up the good work, love the fic can't wait to ready more
Oh my... this is powerful. As for the three-headed dog, in the books, it was purchased from a Greek person in a pub that Hagrid frequented; probably either the Hog's Head or the Three Broomsticks. The dog is acctually a mythological creature called Cerberus, from the Greek mythology. It guarded the gates to the realms of the Dead. At one point Heracles (Hercules in Latin) subdued Cerberus by strangling him during one of Heracles' ten labors, but other than that, Cerberus was never bested. Much less by music... Unless it was Orpheus who caused this change to overcome him... Orpheus had been the son of a Muse, I can't recall which one, and had been the best mortal composer and musician alive. He fell in love with a beautiful woman, but she died somehow, and then Orpheus went down to Hades' realm to release her. Obviously Cerberus would let Orpheus by on his way down, as he is only there to guard souls on their way *out*, but when Orpheus got to the thrones of Hades and his Queen Persephone (The myth of which I will not repeat here, for it would make this review as long as a book that recounts all American laws, including the rediculous ones that have to deal with it being illegal to hitch a giraffe to a lamppost [That *is* a real law, as is the fact that it is illegal somewhere to walk accross the street with your shoes untied], and thus would be impractical), he had made the pair of them so grieved by his tale and singing that they released his wife, on the condition that he did not look back at her on the way up from Hades' realm. Cerberus was also affected by Orpheus' music, and didn't attack him as he was going up. Unfortunately, Orpheus did look back, and his wife was whisked back to Hades' realm. I can't remember much else of Orpheus, save that he was killed in some way, I think he committed suicide by throwing himself into the sea, but I'm not sure.
Sorry about the length of the review. The story is good, and it fits with several scenes of child abuse that I have read of.
| Title: Chapter 1
| 22 Jan 2007 6:29 pm
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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I like how you made Severus' decision to care for Harry payback to the Marauders.
Snape's so devious he even fools himself in to thinking his motives are selfish.
And poor little Harry- could he be any cuter?
Can't wait to read the next chapter!
| Title: Chapter 12
| 02 Jan 2007 6:31 am
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| Reviewer: Arica, Princess of Rivendell (Anonymous)
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Please update again soon.
| Title: Chapter 12
| 31 Dec 2006 11:39 pm
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| Reviewer: Brittany (Anonymous)
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Hallo!I really like the story, I lke the bloody Baron.. he seems cool.. Draco fits as being nice, snape seems to finally have realised what the Bloody Baron told him. Keep up the good work. Happy New Year!
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