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Reviews For Rules of the Game
That's a good chapter. Just because I hate when I reread things and find something wrong, there is a couple of typos in this paragraph I noticed. “Oh, and Harry—Neville Longbottom gave this to my, to give to you. He thought it might make you feel better.” I think its supposed to be 'me' instead of 'my'. That bit about Severus stopping Harry from going over the cliff and admitting that he likes him gets me everytime. Fantastic!
I'm going to start crying soon. The detail you can give to one conversation without it feeling drawn out is wonderful. I am in awe.
Snape smelled like his cupboard? And that was comforting? My heart just aches for those two in your story. I'm just rereading and thought you deserve more reviews. Your story is spectacular and still so in character. I shall keep going now...
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