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Reviews For Rules of the Game
lovely! loved the end, especially about them owning a cat! LOL. you had a couple of typos you may want to fix. Sorry, I didn't keep a tally of them so I can't point them out. I'm glad that the story has finally come out,I'm really glad that Harry wasn't really, really injured the way some stories make him, I found that this was much more believable. Poor guy. I love how Harry kept asking for reaffirmation at the end as he was led out. He has good friends. I wonder what they will do next about this situation. Great story! Thanks so much for posting it!
lovely, lovely chapter! I laughed about the DADA antics. Oh man, Lockhart is very ridiculous and very entertaining. Of course only the boys notice. XD This part needs to be structured better in it's direction, time: The candelabra Neville was hanging from suddenly disintegrated, and he plunged through the air, landing directly on Lockhart. You switched a little too quick and left your readers behind both times. I really, really liked the detention scene with Snape and the diagnostic potion that lit things up. I loved their conversation and how Snape told him that “A wizard who pulls back on a promise is a very poor wizard indeed.” Great line. Great job on all their interactions! Thanks so much for sharing!!
Aw, porr Harry's cast won't let him fly. : Poor kid. Won't play Quidditch this year, that's awful but I guess he's got a lot more going on this year anyway. I loved how Neville stepped up and flashed the camera in Colin's face and berrated him. It's a very strong move and I liked this hint of his strength inside and that he might be able to take charge. Lockhart having his students just read from his books is hilarious! Did they do that in JKR's COS? I can't remember... Poor Harry falling down and hitting his head. Poor guy. I love how Seamus pulled a prank and they paid a Hufflepuff to call out present! LOL! I loved this line: “But–I don’t want to be famous. I just want to stop being the stupid hag.” LOL. I liked how in this version the trio were walking back with Percy when they came upon the ghastly Chamber of Secrets scene. Your Percy is really interesting, I like how... responsible he is and it's different than the pompous, joking manner he is in the books. I liked how Ginny was there and crying, I wonder if that was what she would be like for real if she hadn't been possesed. I think it's Ron in this story that's possessed, poor Ron.
I forgot to mention how I loved how you structured the scenes around each of the young Gryffindors, their Christmas and what they were about to do. It was a very interesting form to read and done well. I really liked it as a rare change. I also LOVED Harry's little daydreams. it was so precious, both because of what it was and also how you wrote it so simply with Harry's childish wishes and desiring heart. Lovely. Precious. I never get to read something so simple and lovely, at least not like that. Great job and thank you so much. :)
Oh no! Poor Harry! He can't go back there! He might not make it, he'll probbaly get turned out again. It seems like he's just going to go and not say a word... I love how Hermione's catching on about Harry. He has great friends. Interetsing how you introduced Parseltounge to Harry and that Snape knows... I'm worried that he's hearing the basilick and not telling anyone though... Good chapter! |
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