Snape is getting so cute. With his worried little self. It's really funny that he and Remus discuss how Harry needs a nap... that's just really funny.
Harry's angry little rant was cute too. I like how he remains strong despite everything that happens. And he knows he's not repressing his own magic.
That was a nice twist to the story with him loosing his magic
I think your portrayl of Harry is really accurate. I mean he would grieve over Petunia I think... but he wouldn't forget that she didn't treat him well... It's really sad that Harry's not allowed to go to the funeral.
I think this is one of my favorite chapters. One reason is because of the line "I'll fight for you, if it comes to that"... which in this scene is really light hearted (it seems), but grows to have deeper meaning. I also like Snape's attempts at being comforting "do not be apprehensive" lol. And I like Harry's reactions to things such as "that was just a bucketload of comfort". And Harry's drugged up/sickly ramblings are really funny/cute.
I love your Snape. LIke how he shows off, pretending that he really is going to Obliviate Hermione. Or how he remarked on Ron's face when Harry swore. All these little details make this story so entertaining. Oh and it's funny that Harry and Snape stayed in the dark for their conversation.
This was great! I loved the things that came out of Harry's mouth!
First off, I've just noticed how similar the tests are, with Snape standing by, assuring Harry that he's not alone, to events later on. I think this forshadowing is an element that really makes your story so good. It makes your story solid with a well thought out plot. It seems as though you really knew where you were going with your story before you wrote it, instead of randomly going along.
Also, the second test is really funny, perfectly Snape like. And I like the little note that Snape sent Harry.
btw... although I've read this story before and I know it's posted elsewhere... I get really excited when you update. It's nice to read it again at a slower, more steady pace. (last time, I read it at every possible moment between work and school...I started the when you were nearly finished with it.)
The first decorum! I really like that word. And now the introduction to the needles. All I can think about that is "T_T poor Harry".
I also like that Snape is starting to care about Harry, in his own way. Especially his reaction to the fact that Harry had to endure the Cruciatus at 14. Oh and I like that Snape is giving Harry the chance to make his own decision on the bone marrow donation. That way, you can establish the danger of the procedure (instead of surprising us later, making it seem random, or that Snape is an idiot that he didn't know), and yet still have Harry go through with it (because of his saving people thing).
I like how early on you show how Snape supports Harry (such as physically in the hospital). And I noticed the first "breathe"... which might not actually be the first I don't know... anyway, it's surprising how much that one word brings to mind. All the support and strength Snape later gives to Harry.
Also, I liked how you had the pizza during the conversation between Snape and Harry. They were talking about a serious subject that could quickly turn mushy or cheezy... but with the humor of Snape grimacing with each bite of pizza. I think that really balanced out the scene.
Great chapters! If Malfoy is eavesdropping then why don't they just put up a silencing charm?
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