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Reviews For O Mine Enemy
I'm glad something has finally reached Harry, as he was beginning to get on my nerves, as canon Harry tends to do. It is sad though that it had to happen to such a sweet person. Your Snape is wonderfully portrayed. I would love to see the two of them start to get closer. The mirror episode was perfect and I expected Harry to soften more, but he is being especially stubborn and doesn't seem to be trying very hard. If I were Snape, I would be concerned about the future of the wizarding world about now also. While your Harry makes sense, one still needs to believe that this young man can save everyone...with this mentor. I believe in the mentor that you've portrayed, I trust in you to make me believe in the savior given the great job you've done thus far! Looking forward to more! Arwen Author's Response: I am so happy you discovered and like my story! I make no apologies for Harry - he'll have to do so himself. ;) As much as I don't want you to get too frustrated with Harry, I hope you'll excuse me for being kind of glad that you are. See, when I started this fic, I knew right off that I didn't want him to have everything together. He is smart, empathetic, and has great potential for power. BUT he's a kid, with all the immaturity, stubborness, impulsiveness that implies. My purpose for portraying him as such (other than it simply being realistic of someone his age) is this: If Harry had it all together...if you could already see the perfect savior of the wizarding world in his 16-year old self... What would he need Snape for?
Author's Response: Thank you for your congratulations! It means a lot to me that you took the time to review. :) And don't feel bad about reading my story instead of studying. Research is overrated, anyway. Fanfiction is where the joy is. ;P
The secret code talk was interesting, and I loved when they were discussing Occlumency--how Snape couldn't believe Harry imagined his cupboard, and Harry telling Snape that he still didn't know the important stuff about Harry. He's right, too. But I wonder if Harry ever will trust him enough to let Snape know some of the 'important stuff'? Poor, poor Arabella Figg! What a horrible death, or is there a small hope that she could be rescued in time? And poor Harry. My heart breaks for him and the huge burden of guilt he's carrying. That was another nice Harry and Snape moment, when Snape came back and tried to comfort, or at least distract Harry. Now I can't wait to see what's going to happen in the next chapter! Are you sure Snape won't sing? Not even a little bit? Cause I think a sweet lullaby would help Harry get right to sleep. How about humming? Author's Response: Yes, will Harry ever trust him enough? I can't tell you how much I just want to throw them into a nice mentor/mentee relationship tomorrow, complete with trust and cuddles! Unfortunately, with the history these two share, a snail's pace is about the best I can do. ;) I feel bad for choosing Mrs. Figg, but better her than Lupin, right? Yes, don't yell at me for considering Lupin's demise, however briefly! It didn't happen! I repeat, it didn't happen!!! Anyway, Lupin will be too important to me for other reasons later on... Sing? Hum? To Harry? I think Snape would rather choke on those moldy cabbages boiled in beetle stew.
Author's Response: I'm liking these long chapters, too! They generate fun reviews! :) Thank you!
Anyway, the dialogue was really great in this chapter! I love how you write Harry. All of the "ums" seem to be perfectly placed, and his voice is just so...so...accurate, for lack of a better word. *is tired* I also loved how Harry kept trying to get into a fight with Snape, but he wouldn't allow Harry to make him angry. Although, for a minute there, I thought that crap was going to hit the fan. But, yay Snape! Way to hold it in! The anger, that is. This line was definitely my favorite and made me laugh outloud: “She sang to me,” Snape answered, surprising Harry by not kicking him out of the lab. "Oh." Yeah, definitely not going to ask Snape to do that. Just the thought would have been enough to cause Harry to shudder if he weren’t already shaking. **Loved it. LOVED IT!!! Oh, but Snape, I can sense you softening! A tad, anyway. He may not actually tuck Harry in, but I'll be he WANTS TO!! *points accusingly* Yes, Snape, you do. I just loved this chapter so much. I love your Harry. I love your Snape even more. I just....*sobs with joy* Thanks for the update :) You're the best! Author's Response: Haha! Snape humming a tune on his way down the corridors to Potions class...now that would probably cause more than a little shock to Hogwarts, yes? :) Thank you for the review! It made me smile so much to hear what you liked!
It is great fun watching Harry come to trust Snape even if he doesn't realize that is what he is doing. Poor Mrs. Figg. But she was a good choice to fill this role in the story. And I do believe that methinks Snape protests too much in this line: "“Prepare for bed, Potter. We will convene in your room in fifteen minutes. And I will not,” Snape repeated, lifting his chin, “be tucking you in, singing you to sleep, or otherwise acting in any way parental toward your wretched teenaged self.”" Author's Response: hehe, I'm glad I'm not the only one who liked that line! It doesn't mean so much to like it if I'm the one who wrote it... ;) Yes, poor Mrs. Figg. I had a hard time choosing her, since I like her & she really doesn't deserve it. But she made the most sense for my purposes. :( Protest too much, indeed... :)
Author's Response: Like fine wine! Yay! I must say, I have had an overwhelming request this round of reviews to either hear or not hear Snape sing. Haha! Thanks for the review!
I like how you balance everything in the story - the humor with the drama and tragic events (which thankfully never stray into melodrama), the tension in Snape and Harry's relationship, how they grudgingly yield to each other about certain things but remain at a stubborn "impasse" about others. I enjoyed Harry's attempts to study Snape... it's like a wildlife show with Harry tracking the Rare and Elusive Snape. And even though the story is from Harry's POV, I still felt for Snape when Harry railed at him to imagine what a life of deprivation is like; I didn't need to know his thoughts - I saw it in how you wrote his closed-off face and restrained anger (and just the fact that he kept the rage restrained for Harry's benefit says a lot). Now I can't wait to see what Snape has up his sleeve. If he's not going to sing to Harry (what a pity...), then what is he planning to do? And I love how he's so adamant about not being parental towards Harry - if he really did hate Harry completely, then being unparental would just go without saying. But the fact that Snape has to insist that he won't be parental shows that he thinks he's in danger of coddling the boy too much (it was lovely though to see him comfort Harry, in his own way, after Figg's death...) And I think you really hit upon something, in Harry appreciating Snape's straightforward way of answering his questions about Mrs. Figg's fate... Harry wants to be respected and treated like an adult, and the fact that Snape can be forthright with him must be very refreshing; he's not like anyone else in Harry's life - he doesn't sugarcoat things in the least, and Harry could come to see that as an important asset in a teacher who needs to train him in various war-related things. It could also be easier for Harry to talk about his feelings to someone whom he's come to trust, but doesn't get horrified by the abuse the way someone like Mrs. Weasley would (with all the attendant pitying and coddling). Author's Response: I have an image in my head of Harry the camera-laden photographer studying black-panther-like Snape, calculating & ready to pounce. It's not a pretty image, actually, but it made me laugh. Thanks for making me laugh! ;) When I made the decision to write this story from Harry's POV, I hoped I would be able to communicate Snape's emotions while still portraying him as incommunicative - difficult proposition, let me tell you, especially when you add in Harry's propensity to overlook the obvious sometimes! So I'm glad you were able to see something of his thoughts in that scene. It makes me happy. :) I loved the thought you put into Snape's assets for a potential teacher to Harry. Well thought out!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Author's Response: Sev is blushing. I shouldn't have told him I added that last line... Oops. ;) Glad you enjoyed it! |
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