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Reviews For Into the Labyrinth
Okay, nice chapter! You've got a bit of suspense going now, (not that you didn't before, but...it's back!) which is nice. Too bad about Dumbledore. I was hoping he'd stick around a bit. I like the way you have characterized Sirius. It's very believeable that he would jump down Snape's throat at the first mention of detention. His comment about not being able to cook was also a nice details. Small things that add interest to your story. The only critique I have is that the kids seemed a bit...meek, around Umbridge. You might have made them give in just a bit too easily. These are mostly Gryffindors, and I can't see them just turning their friend in, just like that. I'm glad you got over your writer's block, because this is (another) great chapter. Waiting for your next update. Feel free to email me when you want me to beta. Author's Response: Thank you new beta!
Yeah, they didnt give him up that easily. Stubbern Gryffindors,....anyway, you'll find out about the fall of the DA in later chapters. =D
Author's Response: Canon! Woo! thank you. I'm glad people like my story. =D
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