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Reviews For Sons of Reproach
Title: The Hand of Fate 11 Oct 2007 9:34 pm
Reviewer: ddamato (Signed) [Report This]
    Great chapter! *grin*

    Author's Response: Thanks! Always glad to hear that readers are enjoying the story so far. ^_^
Title: The Hand of Fate 02 Sep 2007 9:24 pm
Reviewer: Foolish Wishmaker (Signed) [Report This]
    What an awful choice for Harry to have to make. At least he knows what's good for him. :-) I would have been surprised if he had chosen what he knows (Dursleys) rather than the unknown.

    Author's Response: Yes, that's very true. But even from the vantage point of a twelve-year-old boy, you can undoubtedly see that there isn't too much worse that could happen by going with Severus. Or certainly not too much worse that he could think of at the moment.
Title: The Hand of Fate 29 Aug 2007 7:45 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    i liked the opening with Hedwig. I was all "Poor Hedwig" and then Snape, of all people, took care of her. How nice. :)

    I loved the tug-of-war scene between Snape and Sybil! LOL!

    I love Harry's reflections and thoughts, especially this: "He knew that Uncle Vernon must know he was gone by now, and he didn't want to think about what his uncle would do when he realized that locking Harry up in a room with barred windows didn't help to keep him inside." I wonder too. What would he do? Buy a metal cage? Best stay away, Harry.

    I love how Snape asked Harry when he last ate. So direct. It was funny how when Snape got a meal for Harry, Harry didn't know what it meant at first. XD I guess if I were him, I might expect Snape to sit down and start eating in front of him.

    I fixed this paragraph for you: "Probably both, Harry thought wryly, putting down a half-eaten piece of bacon..." it was all in italics, I just made the first thought italics and made the rest normal.

    I like the small descriptions you put in, like how Snape's clock is half hidden by a jar of murlap tentacles. :)

    I love, love, love the way Snape found out about Harry, with the Legilimency. I also loved how Harry was ease dropping, but still he'd rather stay with Snape even though he knows how Snape found out, and he knows that Snape isn't the nicest.

    Fantastic end to the chapter! Your writing is much improved in this chapter. :)

    Author's Response: Always good to hear a list of things that are good, too, even if constructive criticism is incredibly helpful. :D Thanks a ton, I'm glad you think they're in-character and that the reasoning follows as it should so far. It can be interesting, trying to put myself in twelve-year-old Harry's shoes to see what he would think of situations -- but always fun. ^_^
Title: The Hand of Fate 29 Aug 2007 6:50 am
Reviewer: Solitare (Signed) [Report This]
    Another excellent chapter ^_^ And oh how nice it is to just click the next button! Keep up the great work!

    Author's Response: Thank you! And yes, the next button is always a reader's friend. :D Then you get sad, though, when you run out of next buttons and the story's not finished yet... But it shall continue, I promise!

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