| Title: The truth in pen and ink
| 12 Oct 2007 12:04 am
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| Reviewer: Kristeh (Signed)
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This is a great beginning! Harry's pain is obvious, and I feel really bad for him.
I liked Snape's comments about Slytherin being the House for needy children, and it implies that he would have done something for Harry sooner. I'm curious to see what he has in mind.
Interesting. Although I hope we get to see part of the backstory.
| Title: The truth in pen and ink
| 09 Oct 2007 7:03 am
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| Reviewer: JEN77 (Anonymous)
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HEY, I LIKE THIS. WHY DID YOU NOT THINK IT IS GOOD ENOUGH? IT IS ORIGINAL. PLEASE POST MORE.
| Title: The truth in pen and ink
| 09 Oct 2007 5:50 am
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| Reviewer: Harriverse (Anonymous)
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No, no! It's us who give YOU cookies. You have quite a start here. I'm guessing it's the end of 5th year from the ministry/Sirius coments. Where is Voldy? Snape is sounding like a concerned teacher rather than a Death Eater/Spy. Is his spying over that he could devote time to Harry? His coments on how Slytherin is the house for the damaged was interesting. Let's hear more.
I can't see why you'd want to take this down. This is very good. I very much want to see it develop. I hope you keep going with it. You've come up with a unique way for Snape to find out what was going on and gave him a good avenue for deciding to help.
| Title: The truth in pen and ink
| 09 Oct 2007 5:25 am
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| Reviewer: Shellie (Signed)
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I really hope you do continue this, its wonderful! You have hooked me in with the beginning chapter. What an interesting plot device.
| Title: The truth in pen and ink
| 09 Oct 2007 4:57 am
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| Reviewer: Eniledam (Anonymous)
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Well I thought it was VERY good! Excellent job, I think that this is a very good plotline that you should follow up on! You just need to do a bit of grammatical work and everything will work itself out.
Excellent job! If you need advice or anything at all, don't be a stranger!
Keep up the great work!
| Title: The truth in pen and ink
| 09 Oct 2007 4:54 am
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| Reviewer: AlxBlack (Anonymous)
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keep going, its a great start
| Title: The truth in pen and ink
| 09 Oct 2007 4:29 am
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| Reviewer: Polaris (Signed)
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You shouldn't have stressed about posting that, it was good! I liked Severus taking things into his own hands, it was impressive. The only issue I had was with the formatting of the text, it was kind of clumped together into one lump. I'm not sure how you spread it out but you know.
Anyway, thanks for an enjoyable read!
OMG!! Poor Harry!! I hope Severus can help him, and I'm glad that at last someone isn't turning a blind eye to Harry's situation!! Please do continue, I think you have a fantastic start to what would be a terrific story!!
Scarlett
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