aaw cute harry nice chap.
I am very intrigued about how the snake was able to fog Harry's mind and get him to leave, and about why he would want to. But again, I think my favorite line was Harry feeling bad about leaving Jo and thinking that Jo deserved a better boyfriend. I can't wait to see Snape with this Harry.
hehe, little Harry's a con-artist here. Seriously though, or should I say Siriusly, I hope you post the next chapter soon! Please?
| Title: Trains
| 26 Nov 2007 4:06 am
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| Reviewer: Snapesthe1 (Anonymous)
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Well, if it gets more excellent chapters like this one, let me feed you a review:) The details were excellent. I felt like I was right with Harry and even started to experience some anxiety for him. Really cheered his very Slytherin performance to get on a train, including the way he rationalizes that his parents really are lost:D
Wow!! Harry is being a devious little besom isn't he?! I love it - very Slytherin of him!! Hee!!
I wonder how long the tiny snake has been watching out for Harry - and it makes me both glad that Harry has someone watching out for him, and sad that it's a little snake and not a person!!
I love your Harry 'voice' - you have a great knack of writing how little boys think/speak, and it makes the story so much more real!! Kudios!!
Scarlett
| Title: Trains
| 25 Nov 2007 5:33 am
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| Reviewer: ER (Anonymous)
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Very Slytherin of him, wouldn't you think?
Brilliant chapter. I'm so intrigued by this story! I love how you've written Harry's thoughts.
I loved this part:
"It’s not as easy as it is in the film to make myself cry. I have to think about a lot of sad things, like cats dying and Dudley in a bathing suit and my mum and dad never being able to eat strawberry ice cream. Even then I only get one or two tears, so this time I make myself think about Privet Drive."
You're a tremendous writer; I can't wait until the next chapter!
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