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Reviews For Real Illusions
Author's Response: Well... I actually rewrote that letter a couple of times ^_^ The signature was a difficult point, because I did not know if I had to let Harry sign as HP or HJP. But in the end I decided for HJP for two reasons: first of all it's a way for Harry to state that he acknowledges he is his father's son and that he cannot change that, but on the other hand it also puts weight on his apology for what his father and godfather did. It's a sort of "I know who I am and I respect my family, although they were not perfect". But it does have the effect of making Severus angry. Harry wanted to enforce his apology, but Severus chooses to accept it as an insult instead.
Author's Response: Thanks! I a writing the next chapter, but it will take a few more days!
I'm glad at least that that horrible summer is over, and I'm hoping that things will begin to get better for Harry. I really liked how you wrote about the gulf between Harry and his friends, how even though they all love one another dearly, he thinks that they could never understand what he's going through, grieving for Sirius and suffering the abuse of his family. Part of this may be correct, but it can also be a characteristic of grief, and perhaps of abuse, too, to think that you're alone, and no one else could understand or has been through the same things. Anyway, I thought that was very realistic. And Remus' grief is also very real and hard to read about. The part about how Remus' pain being on the surface and Harry's pain being buried is so touching. I especially liked the line: "they were just two faces of the same coin and neither was ready to share their pain." That's very well-written. And now I'm curious to see Snape's reaction to the letter. It was very mature, and brave, of Harry to send it. I hope Snape can respond in kind. Author's Response: Thanks for your review and thank you for the deep understanding of my story. You hit the nail right on the head with your response and it's really great for me. My own experience is - luckily - the one of a happy childhood, but there was bad moments as well and when you are deep in the hole, it's difficult to share your feelings with people who never felt like you do. Harry's friends love him so much, but they cannot really understand what he feels after Sirius' death and all the rest. Remus certainly understands pain, but at the same time he is too focused on his own loss, not just Sirius, but all the friends he lost, and he is not strong enough, or maybe not detached enough to be a parental figure for Harry, even though he loves him deeply. Harry needs someone who is able to focus on him alone, I think ^_^ And Severus' reaction... well now that the new chapter is out... I think it was predictable, in a way, but there's more to come! I am also happy that you find the story is well written ^_^. It is difficult to convey one's feelings in a foreign language, sometimes I struggle so much that I'm afraid I almost writing nonsense, but I am absolutely sure I would not be able to write fanfiction in Italian.
Author's Response: Thanks for your kind review! I am so happy you like it. Next chapter is coming soon and I hope you'll like it even more! Thanks for reading!
Author's Response: Well... I don't think Snape likes "spam" :) Next chapter is actually done and just being beta-ed, so I hope you'll be able to see his reactions soon! Thanks for reading!
Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for your reviews ^_^ You are absolutely right, there are a lot of traditional elements in my story. I really like this kind of story, this is what this site is about after all :), but the truth is, that I always see glimpses of elements I like in other fanfictions, but never together (or rarely) or just not in the way I hoped them to be, so I decided that - difficult as it is - I'd like to try and put something together on my own. I hope it makes sense. I don't like the gruesome details myself. I'd rather dwell on the feelings the torture brought, not how the wounds were inflicted. Maybe I'll have to detail a few wounds better later on, but it won't get further than this. The "action" is going to start in the next chapter for good and I hope you'll still like the story.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review, I am so happy you like the story!
Author's Response: Thank you for liking the story ^_^ I'll post more asap!
Author's Response: Thank you! I am so happy you like it. I am working on the next chapters already and hope to post more very soon :)
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