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Reviews For Real Illusions
I'm giving you a "10" for this episode. Well done!
"Harry has been plighted " I think you wanted "plagued" rather than "plighted." "He ought it to Dumbledore" I think you meant "owed it to" Author's Response: Hello thanks for your review and I am happy that you like the idea with the potions. Our Harry is so stubborn he would not talk otherwise, making dear Mr Snape mad :) Even more than usual ^_^ And thanks for pointing out the mistakes... I read and reread, but both words exist and the spelling check did not work. Mmmh, so bad of me, have to dig out my grammar once again! I'll try to fix it ^_^
Author's Response: Thank you for your review! I am happy you like the story!
Funny that you should mention a beta, since I beta for slytherensangel26 and if you'd like I could do the same for you, I'm a former English teacher and used to correcting dozens of papers for content and grammer. Let me know if you still need one, then contact me by my email. Author's Response: Hello! Thanks for reviewing. The Albus/Severus dialogue was a difficult one (well almost all dialogues are for me!), but I can almost never envision Severus shouting at Albus... in this case especially, after all he did contribute to the mess! And I am sure that Severus feels things very deeply, but he almost never shows it and I guess this was not enough to have him explode ^_^ Thanks for offering to be my beta, I think I am all set now, but thanks the same for offering your help! Thanks!
I liked how Severus had to admit how wrong he'd been about Harry, and how he realised that his actions were completely inappropriate. Hopefully, he has realised that Harry is not his father and can begin to see him as a person in his own right. I loved how tender Minerva was when she was sitting with Harry, and how she talked about her past with a baby Harry. Now I can't wait to see how Severus is going to react with an awake Harry. I saw that Kim has offered to beta for you, and since she is my beta, too, I think I can say that she is fantastic! If you would like a second beta, I'm willing to help, too. Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I did like that phrase as well, I just liked how it sounded, something like poor Severus and a dentist ^____^ I'm finding very difficult managing Severus' change of heart at the right pacing, I don't want it to be too sudden, but I'd like it to be a sort of an epifany as well, as if he suddenly could see how Harry really is, so I'm trying to balance it a bit for a while, hopefully it will work ^_^ As for Minerva... I really love her. She looks so severe, but she is mellow deep inside, she just does not want to show it, I loved the way she was at the end of DH and how it shows that she loves Harry, so that's where she comes from. Thanks for offering to help betaing ^_^ I have accepted Kim's offer and if that's not too much for you, I'd really like to send you the chapters to read as well, provided that I don't stop you from writing, since I've become totally addicted to your stories :) |
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