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Reviews For Thicker Than Water
Title: Son 23 Mar 2008 3:53 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow this is getting to be a very interesting story! Dudley in troouble, about time! And Sev is married and his wife is pregnant and somehow Harry shares his DNA, James's, and Voldemorts?? Far out!

    I have only one small suggestion for you, when you're switching viewpoints or times, put somekind of spacing or stars or something inbetween one paragraph, so the reader is aware of it. Sometimes I was getting confused when you suddenly shifted from Harry's viewpoint to Severus's.

    Other than that, a very good start here. You can check out my stories on here if you want, I shift POV quite alot, and always use spacers.

    One last question, did Sev and Albus make fake ID's in order to pass airport security? LOL!

    Author's Response:

    Oh yeah, Dudley's in for it all right. He'll get his punishment in the next chapter! And even Severus Snape needs someone ta loooove ... (sorry, that's one of my favourite songs, I couldn't help it). Oh, and you missed out Albus from the list :)

     I *did* have spacing between scenes, they must have got edited out for some reason - I'll change that. And I reviewed your Christmassy one-shot for you :)

    I think with magic involved it must be really easy to use fake ID. So yes.


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