Brilliant...I love the concept of a nice, relaxed, cool Snape. Plus...the ringtone on my mobile phone is Sweet Child O Mine. :)
I'm speachless. I'm ... well... where do I start? How does one express appreciation for something such as this? Characters in character, situation wild, it's amazing! I absolutely love this story. It's just jumped to the top of my list of favorites. Keep this summer going forever!
i really like this. it is well constructed. i'm really enjoying this new side of snape. i can't wait to find out harry reaction to talking with georgie. i'm loving this story.
| Title: Gun, Roses, Beer, and Antics
| 27 Jun 2008 10:08 pm
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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I'm loving this! I can't wait for more. I'll make sure that I'm not reading this in a public or work setting next time though. Loud snorting laughter has a proper place ya know... Please keep the updates coming.
SHEla WOLFsbane
| Title: Gun, Roses, Beer, and Antics
| 27 Jun 2008 7:39 pm
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| Reviewer: chibisnape (Anonymous)
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WOW!!! I love it, this is so different from all the other stories out there!!! just wow please update soon ^_^
| Title: Gun, Roses, Beer, and Antics
| 27 Jun 2008 11:26 am
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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I like your story. Saying that I found the dialogue to overpower the actions doesn't mean that I dislike your story. I just added a second review, because in my first review, I said something wrong. Don't take my meaning wrong.
Author's Response: I had no intention of offending you. I'm sorry.
| Title: Gun, Roses, Beer, and Antics
| 27 Jun 2008 5:24 am
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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I meant to stay in my review that "All the dialogue is a little overpowering though, without so many descriptions of the actions that could go along with them but don't." There is a lot of talk, not enough doing, the characters look blank to me, what they are doing, especially when Snape and the trio meet your original characters. It was a lot of chaos and women popping in with dialogue, and the canon characters being shoved into the background. They should never be in the background. :)
Author's Response: I'm sorry you did not like my story, but I will take your note of your suggestions. I had been toying with the idea of eliminating one of the men and/or merging them as one character. I am currently in the process of doing so. My personal style is a lean toward heavy dialogue, but that is something I'm too stubborn to change. I will add some actions to the piece, but I often do my characterizations via their dialogue and how they speak. I also build my characters slower than most authors and have been trying to pick up the pace of that. This is something I am currently working on in my original pieces as well. Again, I am sorry you disliked my story, but I do thank you for your advice. I am looking into everything you have said. Even if I don't change everything, I want you to know that it is still appreciated.Carpe Diem
| Title: Gun, Roses, Beer, and Antics
| 27 Jun 2008 2:11 am
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| Reviewer: Pellegrina (Anonymous)
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This is really an unique idea - I don't think I've seen anything like this before!!! And a Severitus to boot - fantastic! I love those! I really enjoyed reading this so far and sincerely hope that the perfectionism you mentioned wont keep you from updating soon!!!
| Title: Gun, Roses, Beer, and Antics
| 26 Jun 2008 11:38 pm
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| Reviewer: fanficaholic (Anonymous)
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I really like this story. I like this version of Snape and I like his friends. I can't wait for more!
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