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Reviews For Impalpable
This is brilliant!
The phrase is "intents and purposes" NOT "intensive purposes." This occurs in several chapters. I also noticed a number of homophone spelling errors. A spell checker won't catch them. I recommend you reread each chapter carefully and you should find them. Sorry I didn't make a list as I went along. I did just look over chapter 8 again and didn't find anything except for Mein Kampf (should have an "a" not an "o"). Also should be "Severus eyed the red-headed mother sourly" (eyed, past tense, not eyes, present tense) to be consistent. Author's Response: I just went through all my chapters and only found one instance of my saying 'intensive purposes.' As for the reference to Hitler's book, I was going from memory from when I read it back in high school (don't tell my brother, he went on for two hours once how I should never read that book!). I rarely have access to the Internet so I was unable to look it up. As for the other errors, I'm prone to mixing them up and not noticing. My betas have never caught on either, so, if you had the time, I would appreciate it if maybe you could go through and be a gamma/delta reader for me. Thanks. :) And by the way, thank you for signing in and at least telling me you think that the story is funny. The person below you was snippy and said nothing but how I was wrong on the title. Honestly, if I don't like a story I usually don't even comment, but if I feel that compelled to leave one, I at least try to mention SOMETHING I liked about it. I have half a mind to tell them off, but Internet fighting is lame and really, I have a busy life and not enough time to spend on twits like that. They didn't even sign in, so it's not like they would receive a notification about it. Anyway, thank you for the feedback. I do appreciate it, even if the errors made you dislike the story. I am always looking to improve my writing.
Author's Response: I'm so glad I helped to improve your day! Your review really made me smile! Keep reading and thank you so much!
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Molly does rock, she's like a lioness defending her cubs, and the way she handled Baylor was just too funny. And of course I loved how Sev just thrashed Lucius all over, go Sev! You rule! Loved the way the British wizards reacted to Sev's new look too--see you never really know a person till you see him without his professional attire. And in his own home. Kudos and anytime you want me to beta let me know! Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you!!
Molly had me cracking up with trying to shove veggies down everyone's throat. I can't wait to see what happens when they return to the magical world. Oh, I forgot, do the kids have another year of school left? Can't wait for the next chappie. Author's Response: They're going into their seventh year. :)
Molly is so much fun to write! I think I need to writer her more often.
Thank you for the review! You rock my socks! :)
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