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Reviews For Atoning The Past
The letter was well written, I'm glad this version of James realized that he was being unfair and mean to Severus, and regretted his actions, it makes me like him better. I couldn't stand him in canon, or Sirius either, who made excuses for him when there should have been none. Anyway, great job. Also, if you need a beta, I'm available, just email me in my profile. Author's Response: yes...I wonder too. -rolls eyes- I would have thought by ch. 8 something would have been discussed but they're so stubborn...lol... I think James grew up. I mean people always write him as such a terrible person...but I think children are cruel...and I took in what Sirius said, James was 15 when that incident happened. he was a 15 year old boy who didn't know better...sort of...so writing him like that when he is twenty-two is like saying that James never changed with the war. I think you find in a lot of Severitus fics that the author will make James petty to make Severus a better person... But James had to be a good person...or something like that...he couldn't have been so terrible if Lily married him. As to the whole canon thing...I never saw James as much more than just Harry's father...and I always knew he was a bully...but who isn't even just a little bit? I'm a character writer for the most part so I really always focus on that a lot...and James was really interesting to explore... i don't generally use a beta...I just don't think I can handle it much...lol...but thanks for the offer...might take you up on it maybe...lol... thanks for the review... by the way I did start reading your fic it's pretty good, haven't gotten around to reviewing but yeah, I like it... glad you enjoyed the chapter...
I think your story has alot of potential and I can't wait to see the direction that you take it. I wonder whether you will allow Harry's appearance to change. Please update soon, I am anxious to see everyone's reactions to this discovery. Author's Response: yes, a glitch in the uploading...my fault really for not checking on it after it was posted and fixing it. But I have fixed it and now it is much more readable. Thank you for your review...mmm...potential...lol...I'm still not completely sure about his appearance...in fact a lot of my plot ideas have changed...I blame it on the characters. I'm writting ch. 7 (the end) and ch. 8 (also the end...mmm) and I can't help but wonder how long this will be because most of those two chapters still keep sounding like the begining to me...lol... anyhow, thanks for the review, again and I'm so glad you're enjoying it.
Other than that, I'm enjoying this fic. Author's Response: The letter did need a lot of betaing...I think that might have been my third or fourth attempt at it and in my opinion every one of them sucked...I don't write letters. I just couldn't capture James' voice in the letter. I couldn't keep it together myself while writing it that at times I just thought of giving up on it...but my best friend made me write it. lol...she insted on it. As to the formatting accident. It was my fault from earlier last night. My flashdrive and computer weren't happy with each other and might have accidentally messed up the formatting...I mean when I closed and re-opened the document it wa in a different font even...so I think that was the problem even though it looked fine when I was uploading it...I also didn't check on it afterwards like I usually do to make sure it's okay...but it has been fixed and it's fine. thank you for telling me about the problem. and thanks for the review...glad you're enjoying the story.
Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying it so much. I did go back and repost it...I hadn't realized it was posted that way until I came to look at my reviews...but the problem has been fixed. Thank you for informing me of my mistake...it happened while it was uploading and might have been because I had some trouble with the document earlier. thanks for the review.
Author's Response: Something screwed up when I put it up. I think it might have happened because earlier I had some trouble with the document...so I'm hoping that it didn't make the entire story like this and that I have to go back and put spaces between every paragraph...that would be terrible tedious...anyhow I have fixed it and it should be easier to read now...thank you for the review and informing me of the slight problem... |
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