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Title: Dumbledore's Betrayal 27 Oct 2008 8:08 am
Reviewer: Nakago (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh. I've never read something like this. I start to wonder who Severus murdered to create a horcrux... Not very nice, professor, not nice at all.

    But... It creates new possibilities. And this is really interesting. So I'm waiting for more. Will Severus revive? If so how they will treat each other? Adult Harry and Severus who has only a part of his soul...

    Author's Response: Well, his Horcrux is created in a little bit different manner than Voldemorts. The magic used is not quite as Dark.  Although, consider that Snape worked as a spy for Voldemort for many years, I'm sure that he was not a choirboy. Also, he did murder Dumbledore, don't forget, although it was not done with malicious intent.  He did take a life.  Thanks for reviewing. 
Title: Dumbledore's Betrayal 27 Oct 2008 7:51 am
Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous) [Report This]
    It's quite interesting, but I wasn't sure about the time frame, and watch the Americanisms: "I need time to process this" is definitely one.

    Author's Response:

    Oh, I hadn't thought that that statement might not be considered British enough.  Thanks for pointing that out.  Time frame, well it takes place shortly after the Final Battle. Almost right after. Sorry if that's a little unclear.

Title: Dumbledore's Betrayal 27 Oct 2008 7:04 am
Reviewer: toast (Signed) [Report This]
    oooo that was great i can't wait to find out wut happens next

    Author's Response: Thank you, I appreciate your review.  It was a little scary posting my first story!  :)
Title: Dumbledore's Betrayal 27 Oct 2008 6:58 am
Reviewer: NotEvenHere (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Hey Dawn! I'm so glad you decided to take the plunge. Congrats on your first fic. You have a good story idea here and I like Harry's conflicted emotions in the beginning. I hope to see him struggle with his decisions in the next chapters to come. I liked Dumbledore in here as well. I thought you wrote his character well. I like how he justified himself. My only suggestion is that you keep working on Harry's emotions. This is a very hard and tiring, exhausting time in his life. After all, things were supposed to be simple now. And now it's all turned on its head. I'd like to see that struggle and conflict reflected even more as you continue on. I am very happy you are doing this, Dawn. Great start. :o)

    Author's Response:

    Thank you Tabitha!  I couldn't have done it without your help!  Thanks again.  You are right, I will try and work harder on Harry's emotions.  He has been through alot, and this is supposed to be a happy time for him, now he has THIS to deal with.   Thanks for reviewing!  ;)


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