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Reviews For A Jar of Dead Cockroaches
Fantastic story so far! (yes, I'm going to keep reading... I just thought I ought to comment....)
I know the jar hit him in the head, and that's enough to knock him out and maybe cut him, but did he land on the broken glass on the floor too? Because I don't know if Snape could throw the jar that hard to warrent it shattering that way and not killing poor Harry. Just a thought. Author's Response: And a good one. Well, this is a fictional story, anything can happen =) Thankyou for reading and reviewing, Severus coming to realize that it wasn't just James's son is very important to how this story developes (as in the book thats all he ever saw Harry as being with the exception of the ending of DH) more to come soon! ~Clovergirl22
Another point I have yet to see in this type of fic is that if Snape vowed to Protect Harry and then violated that oath, shouldn't their be some consequences to Snape's magic? Here he has potential caused devastating injury, clearly a violation of a protection oath, magic should be either taking away his magic or causing him some pain in return. At least until he learns a lesson and Harry has returned to health. Perhaps he has to find a ritual to transfer some of his valued and vaulted brains to Harry. Author's Response: Hmmm interesting point there about common room factor and about how Severus "vowed to protect Potter."Its not as literally as it sounds but more of something that he did on using freewill like "sworn to himself" but you'll have to read and find out more! =) Anyway, let you be assured that there is going to be consquences to the man's misdeeds non the less....Thankyou for reading and reviewing =) ~Clovergirl22
I think this would be a really interesting story if Harry did have some sort of brain damage. I'm excited to see what happens to Snape--I'm pretty sure this is going to be unforgivable, even to lenient Dumbledore. Please update soon. -P.G. Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I love details and description. As for Harry =/ well, his case isn't the best to be in (even for us muggles) There is no doubt that Snape's in deep trouble, it's going to be tough to pull out of the pit he gotten himself into...or rather if he can *shrugs* More to come soon ~Clovergirl22
Great story. Poor Harry. Yes I will be sending flowers, chocolates and of course a wizard card! :) Please update soon; I want to know if poor Harry is going to be ok! ;) Author's Response: Thankfully the man still has his common sense. Thankyou for the review! more is to come soon =) ~Clovergirl22
Snape needs some pressure valve, poor guy, Poor Harry. I like this story, (though you do put too much exhibition and tell us too much about what's in each character's head at the start of each chapter instead of showing us) please continue it soon. Author's Response: Thankyou! I'll keep that in mind. More to come! ~Clovergirl22
Lots of drama here; what with Snape’s realization of what he did, Harry’s passing out, the rush to the hospital wing… there’s bound to be more too, once Snape spills the beans to Dumbledore. That conversation’s going to be tough as molasses no doubt. I like the way you wrote Snape’s point of view, he sounds in character. His conflicting and sarcastic thoughts had me snickering at times too :) It’s so like Snape to feel Harry’s to blame for this horrible situation, and clearly he’s cursing ‘Potter’ from here to China for getting him into this mess. The guilt’s there though, poking at the surface. BTW: I agree with your thoughts concerning 'magically friends' Harry and Snape, and am happy with the route you're taking. I find stories more realistic and enjoyable with a slow build up in the relationship, rather then a quick jump. P.S. Here’s some Honey Duke’s sweets for Harry, poor guy ;) Author's Response: Ah yes, and more drama is still to come! From the looks of this Dumbledore is probably gonna fly right off his rocker, but i don't know, the old man has his ways of handling such manners *smirk* and It shall be interesting to see how Snape handles the situation presented to him *gawks*. As for Snape, he's a fun character to write =) It comes naturally to me too, but what's difficult about him is his high vocabuary =X sometimes it take me 20 minutes to get his wordings correct or at the least close to what is considered "Snapish." Yup, 'magically friends' is just OOC for these two and it just doesn't work out as nicely as the realistic, slow build up of trust *sighs* Thankyou for reading and reviewing, I'll make sure I give Harry his Honey Duke's sweets, the kid's going to need them =( ~Clovergirl22 |
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