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Reviews For A Jar of Dead Cockroaches
Author's Response: Thanks! Much more to come! Thankyou for reading and reviewing! ~Clovergirl22
Author's Response: And more I will do =D thanks for reading and reviewing! ~Clovergirl22
YAY keep on writing - its good for the soul :))) Author's Response: Hahahaha! Yes, I love being a fan of thoes stories as well. More is to come so stay tuned! I agree 100% that writting is good for the soul!!! Thankyou for reading and reviewing! ~Clovergirl22
I think the plot is really good. I haven't read this particular "what if" before and its always great to find a new plot line. I liked Snape's voice in this chapter. It seemed very in character. Harry's voice seems...a bit off. I can't really point to anything specific but his thoughts don't seem his own. Your sentences in the first few paragraphs seem to border on run-ons but you seemed to work that out pretty quickly. By the end I think you have Harry sorted out too. I'd just take another look at the wording in the beginning. After Snape's POV, Harry seems a lot more in character. Now, all that above having been said, I really LOVED this first chapter and I'm on the edge of my seat waiting to read Snape's perspective of the ending there. I wouldn't change anything that actually happens in the fic, just some of the wording in the beginning, like I said. Also, keep in mind that this is just my two cents worth. Guh, I'm really sorry for dragging this review out so long :) One more thing then I'm done, I swear!! PLEASE write the next chapter SOON??? You're killing me here! I don't wanna wait for the edit to find out what happens next! **pouts** Kay, done now! Keep up the great work! ~Brandi~ Author's Response: Hi! Thankyou for the review, It's good to get a good long review despite that it's chapter 1 and nothing really happened yet =D but thankyou very much for the nice long feedback about the characterization. I actually re-edited this chapter before I posted it up here to get all the bugs out *smirks* there still remains to be some and hopefully I can find a beta-reader to nip out the rest (unfortuantly It's been hard looking =( Yes, MUCH more is to come, no worries there. I will be posting up every week or a little some. Thankyou for reading! Glad you enjoyed! ~Clovergirl22
Author's Response: Thanks! More is to come! Thankyou for reading and reviewing! ~Clovergirl22
Author's Response: I'm Happy to say that I already have =) Thanks a bunch for reading and reviewing! More is to come!~! ~Clovergirl22
Yuck though; getting hit with dead cockroaches! Ew! The thought gives me the creeps. I don't know what it was like before your changes, but I love it NOW. Author's Response: Thanks! I had to get out some bugs cause I currently don't have a beta reader =( Harry has awesome luck doesn't he? mmmmm, jars of dead cockroaches, yummy! (lol eww) And Thankyou for reading and reviewing! More is to come! ~Clovergirl22 |
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