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Title: Damn that Hat! 09 Jan 2010 10:32 pm
Reviewer: Aszrael (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Now with the story ;P The Slytherins seems a little too friendly, they should be more collected. Thats my opinion at least. I can understand and think thats really Harry/Snape ways of thinking about each other and general thing.

    Author's Response: I admit, this story is a BIT AU on the Slytherins, but then I just don't think you can categorize 11 year olds that easily into 4 groups and have the groups really look all that different. Maybe the older years, but not the first years. Whatever. Hope you read on and enjoy the rest of the story.
Title: Damn that Hat! 19 Nov 2009 8:13 am
Reviewer: slytherensangel26 (Signed) [Report This]
    nice start! on to the next one!

    Author's Response: Yey!! New reader!! Hope you like!!
Title: Damn that Hat! 27 Jul 2009 7:22 am
Reviewer: Ivy-Green (Signed) [Report This]
    Whoa-ho? What's this? A saucy Harry? That's a new one! I could totally get into this! Intriguing beginning!

    Author's Response: Thanks!! I hope you continue to like it as you read on!! Thanks so much for reviewing. I LOVE getting reviews from older chapters - they're really unexpected, and so really fun. :-)
Title: Damn that Hat! 29 Jun 2009 4:38 am
Reviewer: LuvHP (Anonymous) [Report This]
    LOL This was very interesting! Harry is so going to be a lot of trouble for Severus lol! Great Chapter! ^_^

    Author's Response: Thanks! LOL Glad you like it! :-)
Title: Damn that Hat! 08 May 2009 10:53 am
Reviewer: becky (Anonymous) [Report This]
    You've got a great story started but it's got a few problems. However, it would be a lot easier to read if you would separate each person's dialogue into separate paragraphs. It's difficult to tell who's speaking. For example you wrote:

    “I most certainly did not! I agreed that Minerva should mentor the boy! Not ME!” But Dumbledore insisted. “You did. The fact that you thought it would be McGonagall means nothing. Do you refuse now?” His voice held a warning, but Severus ignored it.

    The above paragraph reads as if a single person is speaking when actually there is two--or at least I think there is. I'm not sure.

    I strongly suggest you get a beta reader to help you with your dialogue. Also, a beta reader would also help you with your punctuation and grammar.

    Author's Response: Yes, I do that better, later. Please let me know if you find grammar mistakes - I do have a beta, but she can't catch everything.
Title: Damn that Hat! 09 Apr 2009 3:08 am
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    Already, they're misunderstanding each other... I really liked the part where Snape asks Dumbledore if he realizes that he hates children. Very nice, lol.

    -P.G.

    Author's Response: Thanks!! (Sorry I forgot to respond to this right away!)
Title: Damn that Hat! 28 Mar 2009 12:30 am
Reviewer: wrappedinharry (Signed) [Report This]
    Hmm, not Draco then, but Theo and Blaise. I have to laugh because I am the author of a story where Theo tries to kill Harry with a poison potion.

    And Harry even hates the Gryffindor colours...far too garish. Oh, well...no doubt he will hate Gryffindors too. He had no thoughts when Ron WAS sorted into Gryffindor.

    Author's Response: LOL sorry I forgot to respond to this. Yeah I can't imagine living in an entire room of red and yellow...I'd feel like I was at the circus or something. (Though I'd point out you were wrong about his attitude towards Lions) :-)
Title: Damn that Hat! 19 Mar 2009 8:03 pm
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    Good job here, I like how you presented Severus and Harry, and the other Slytherins and how Sev stressed that they were to treat each other respectfully.

    The only thing I noticed is that you need to go back up to the conversation between Snape and Dumbledore and paragraph the conversation, you should have a new paragraph for each speaker.

    Author's Response: Thanks! I'll try to do the pararaphing better in the future, and maybe fix Snape and Dumbledore when I fix other errors.
Title: Damn that Hat! 19 Mar 2009 2:29 am
Reviewer: crazychick84 (Signed) [Report This]
    Ooh I like the idea, I love a defiant Harry and this one looks like he could drive Snape mad! im sure Snape will be punishing him soon if he checks out all those things forbidden! : )

    Author's Response: Oh yes. I don't think Harry'll be an easy nut to crack. Should be fun. Thanks for the review! :-)
Title: Damn that Hat! 17 Mar 2009 7:52 pm
Reviewer: wellyuthink (Signed) [Report This]
    Ooo, exciting. I can already foresee fireworks between those two! You've done well with setting the scene so far and I'm definitely looking forward to the 'story' part. I would advise splitting up the paragraphs a bit more though, so they're easier to read through. Otherwise, great start!

    Author's Response: Thanks alot! Is the paragraphing better now? You're one of two that mentioned it.

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