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Title: Our New Celebrity 28 Mar 2009 12:56 am
Reviewer: wrappedinharry (Signed) [Report This]
    Great chapter. I love Harry's little internal monologues. He seems pretty intelligent too, which is nice. And it is nice to see a backbone.

    Glad Ron is still his friend.

    And Severus really does nee to remember that he is an adult in a position of authority and not a bullying contemporary of an 11 year old.

    Author's Response: Yeah, he'll get there. He just gets into "angry 17-year-old" mode when it comes to Harry, at least for the moment.
Title: Our New Celebrity 27 Mar 2009 7:11 am
Reviewer: NotEvenHere (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Hey, interesting start for a story. I like Severus in this; he's different than most takes on Snape. Looking forward to more.
Title: Our New Celebrity 24 Mar 2009 1:57 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    Loved it, especially calling Malfoy "smarmy" he definitely is in canon! And I like how Harry told off Ron for his unreasoning prejudice. The potions class was hilarious too. Can't wait for the talk between Severus and Harry!

    Author's Response: Hey I never responded to this!! I'm such an idiot. Thanks!! And yeah...I also just like that word. :-)
Title: Our New Celebrity 24 Mar 2009 1:13 am
Reviewer: b_e_skrewt (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Ooh, interesting! Really good beginning. I like your characterizations of Snape and Harry - they are definitely not quite the stereotypical characters - there is something fresh in both of them. I especially liked the way you maintaned Snape's bastardliness on the outside as far as Harry can tell, yet gently teased out his uncertainty and vulnerabilities for us to see in just a few short paragraphs. And I really like the way you have Harry's sass and bitterness masking a vulnerability he isn't even aware of yet. Very subtle! I'm looking forward to the continuation.

    Author's Response: Why didn't I respond to this right away? W/e I'm an idiot. This review made me really happy. 'Subtle' is hard to achieve, most times. :-)
Title: Our New Celebrity 23 Mar 2009 9:02 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    i love, love, loved the talk between Severus and Dumbledore. How wonderful.

    I felt that Harry is a little too introspective for his character. After reading the books and having basically a blank look at his character, this very detailed introspective Potter seems out of character. I much prefer reading from Snape's point of view.

    i am enjoying your story and am looking forward to the meeting between Snape and Harry! :) Thanks for sharing this story with us!

    Author's Response: Thanks a lot! rnrnHarry is OOC on purpose - I've changed his past life pretty radically and so couldn't leave his character the same, even if I wanted to. My Harry is also a very private character, slow to trust and with a lot to hide, and so in order to give any insight onto who he is I've made him introspective.
Title: Our New Celebrity 23 Mar 2009 4:47 am
Reviewer: CeeCeeMee (Signed) [Report This]
    What an interesting twist on things.

    I like that you haven't turned Ron against Harry and that not all of the Snakes are against Harry having a Gryffie friend.

    I'm adding this to my Faves so I can keep up with your story. Thanks for sharing it with us.

    Author's Response: Thanks! I'm enjoying it so far, too!
Title: Our New Celebrity 22 Mar 2009 5:59 pm
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Somehow I missed this chapter. Ooh, I really love a cheeky Harry! But to make that comment about the Imperious Curse and a stripper. While extremely funny, Harry is taking his life in his hands!

    I'm looking forward to the next chapter. I really like that this is an original take on the whole mentor thing. Harry is not just sitting around taking the Snape's abuse, he's fighting back. Nice work.

    Author's Response: Yeah, Harry's a fighter. LOL. It's gonna cause him some problems, though...
Title: Our New Celebrity 22 Mar 2009 8:12 am
Reviewer: snarky Beth (Signed) [Report This]
    Dumbledore’s meeeaan! Lol, sorry that was just my Severus-sympathy kicking in. I do understand, after all, why he’s pushing Severus. He wants him to actually try, not just say he is and then have issues with Harry throughout it all.

    Anyways, I'm so glad Harry’s still friends with Ron! I love the Weasleys, and often when Harry is re-sorted in fanfics he unfortunately loses his friendship with Ron. I hope all of Harry's friends can continue to get along (though I‘m sure issues will arise), so far they’re trying and that's a good sign :) I wonder about Hermione and how she’ll fit in though…?

    Author's Response: Yeah I sorta like making Sev miserable, sorry...Don't worry, things get better. rnrnI also like Ron and his family. I don't buy that Ron would be so disloyal to a friend just because he made friends with Snape/Malfoy or got sorted into Slytherin. I have reasons for needing Fred and George on Harry's side, too. Don't worry, Hermione'll get in there - in Canon, the four aren't really friends until Halloween, after all.
Title: Our New Celebrity 21 Mar 2009 11:52 pm
Reviewer: Doc Brown (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Oops, sorry about BSODs, the term actually dates back to Win 3.1 and 1991 sharp.)) But my point still stands - noone would widely toss it around till 1995, least of all Harry.

    Author's Response: Thanks for your comments! You're the first person to give me concretes to fix. I'll get to those in the next couple of days. (The once I decide to change - I'm undecided about some because I don't think the specific dates matter too much to the story.) Beevus and Butthead I'll definitely change, though. Could you suggest an alternative? The computer thing is another point. I think Harry'd know about tv shows, just from hanging around others his age, but just because I was familiar with early windows doesn't mean Harry'd be familiar enough to joke about BSODs. Finally, any suggestions for how to make Harry sound younger? I figure he's grown up fast, given his environment, (and he acts a little older than 11 in canon, too, in my opinion) but I do want to make him at least a little childish. I'm just not good at writing kids, I guess.
Title: Our New Celebrity 21 Mar 2009 11:38 pm
Reviewer: Doc Brown (Anonymous) [Report This]
    This is not a bad fic at all, and I'm always excited to see Harry sorted and interacting with his year Slytherins, you do it nicely, so.. just my $0.02:

    - Beavis & Butthead, besides being a strongly american phenomenon, wasn't being aired until 1993.
    - BSOD didn't come into existence until Windows 95NT, thus 1995.
    - We know that Harry's first year in Hogwards was 1991.
    - How in seven hells is Harry knowing all that, neither watching TV, nor having a PC of his own? I doubt primary schools had those either.
    - Harry just sounds too teen for being 11 years old, sorry(

    Author's Response: Thanks for this. I followed many of your suggestions. :-)

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