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Title: World War I 02 Apr 2009 8:48 pm
Reviewer: wellyuthink (Signed) [Report This]
    Ah! You're writing faster than I can keep up! Anyway - brilliant chapter - and it covered loads of ground. I especially liked the way you handled the inter-house co-operation and the various ways Harry avoided Snape. The way Snape reeled him in, though, was perfect! My favourite part was definitely when Snape managed to trick Harry into revealing his secret and Harry's reaction to that...! Oh, and yes the paragraphs are much better now - five or six lines high is probably the most you can get away with without it looking too much like block text.

    Just two things I noticed:

    The Matron looked taken aback at his frowardness - Should be 'forwardness'.

    And Quiddich should be Quidditch.

    Other than that, great chapter! I'm going right on to read the next!

    Author's Response: Thanks so much! Sorry I forgot to respond to this review - I'm really glad you liked this chapter. It's one of my favorites, too.
Title: World War I 01 Apr 2009 5:12 am
Reviewer: Rachael (Anonymous) [Report This]
    WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH RHIANNAN YOU HAVE TO UPDATE YOU ARE SOOOOOO AWESOME I LOVE THIS FIC!!!!! Seriously, it's great. This is amazing, and I love your writing style and I like Harry, even, which I NEVER do!

    Author's Response: Wow, thanks!! It's really too bad I can't talk at writing club - you could help me throw ideas around like my sister has started to. (She's the person who reviewed just before you did)
Title: World War I 01 Apr 2009 12:19 am
Reviewer: qtuani7 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Again, awesome chapter! Twas confuzled bout somethin though, didn't notice til after I reviewed before. 11 year old that knows about the treaty of Versailles? Conceivable but you said you wanted to show an uber mature 11 year old that was still young too---still being pretty badly educated might help give that effect. Plus, gotta keep in mind that the American education system sucks ((grin))
    This chapter is probably your best written yet, and is longest, so yays! Write more!!

    Author's Response: Thank you!! You might of missed it, but I mentioned that Harry used to read History books in his spare time, bacause he could hide out from Dudley in the school library. :-)
Title: World War I 01 Apr 2009 12:01 am
Reviewer: DaShrimp (Anonymous) [Report This]
    !!NANNAN!!

    I just emailed you this Beta'd up, so go get that sometime. In the meantime, write the next bloody chapter! I want more intense 11 year old!

    Author's Response: You are so weird. Qtuani and DaShrimp?? What kinda names are those?? Anyway everyone, I'd like to introduce my brat of a sister, Gwendolynn
Title: World War I 30 Mar 2009 9:15 pm
Reviewer: crazychick84 (Signed) [Report This]
    lol I cannot believe I forgot to add this to my story alerts! oh well now I have hehe and im glad because this is getting really good! I love the whole thing and cannot wait for more! :D

    Author's Response: Thanks!!! Sorry I forgot to respond to this sooner!
Title: World War I 28 Mar 2009 3:59 pm
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    This is very good! I'm so glad that Snape and Poppy have seen his injuries finally. I hope that this means that Harry wont' have to go back to the Durseleys. Well done, and I can't wait for the next chapter.

    Author's Response: Don't worry. Snape's protective instinct will kick in soon. (Whether Harry appreciates it or not...)
Title: World War I 28 Mar 2009 1:38 pm
Reviewer: Marylou (Signed) [Report This]
    Very interesting, please please update soon, want moore. Thank you for that long , absorbing chapter.
Title: World War I 28 Mar 2009 11:06 am
Reviewer: wrappedinharry (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, damn, what a place to finish! This chapter was brilliant. I loved it. Your premise to have Harry popular and likeable even amongst the students of the other houses is wonderful. Will the Boy Who Lived bring unity to the Hogwarts houses?

    And he is a metamorphmagus and obviously quite powerful too. I always thought he must have metamorphmagi tendencies because he could make his hair grow back when Petunia practically shaved his head.

    I am surprised that Severus didn't just request that Minerva enter Gryffindor Common room and bring Harry out when he suspected he ws in there. I am not sure Minerva would aid and abet a student in his continuing flaunting of a teacher's direct orders...nor Dumbledore for that matter. Certainly not to the extent they have ignored Harry's blatant disobedience, even if they find it amusing.

    Still, it made for a very amusing scenario, but now Harry has to pay the piper. I wonder how Severus will react to Harry's injuries AND his prodigious powers.

    Can't wait to see. I will be putting this on my story alert list.

    Lesley~

    Author's Response: Thanks so much!! rnrnAbout Minerva and Albus- Minerva is not actively hiding Harry so much as quietly not noticing. It's mostly just Severus' perception that she's actively hiding him. She doesn't spend much time in the Gryffindor common rooms. She's also in a (relatively friendly and teasing) rivalry with Snape, and so enjoys watching him get bested by an 11-year-old, especially one of his own. She also doesn't appreciate his always blaming Gryffindors for trouble, so seeing one of his own causing so much is a vindictive pleasure for her. rnrnAlbus likes how the two rival houses are coming together over the issue, and goes for the "greater good". Then, since he's decided to leave it alone, he also decides, like Minerva, to enjoy it. Both figure that Snape can handle it perfectly well on his own, which, of course, he does.
Title: World War I 28 Mar 2009 8:56 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow. Great story!! Poor Harry. It was amazing that he managed to avoid Snape for so long - I don't think that that has happened in any other story before. I loved Snape's use of the howler, and his intuition of Harry's situation.

    What a cliffhanger! I do hope that you are able to update soon.

    I increased the rating for your story from K+ to 16+ because Harry curses a whole lot. It's not really appropriate to have the story rated K+ if he does that, because K+ means that the story is okay for Elementary students. 16+ means more like 16 year olds and up.

    Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah sorry again about the cliffie. I do try to avoid them. rnrnThanks for changing the rating for me. You're absolutely correct and I should've realized that before.
Title: World War I 28 Mar 2009 6:22 am
Reviewer: cora (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Well done! Very well done actually. I love the insight you give into Snape and Harry's thoughts. I really like your Harry. I always thought that he should be angrier at the whole world considering the way his family is treating him. Can't wait to read more.

    Author's Response: Thanks! I thought so, too. It never made sense to me that Harry would be angry in the 5th and 6th books but never before. Having a rough childhood like Harry dealt with (even in canon) makes a child grow up FAST. I never particularly liked Canon Harry because he grew up in a situation a bit like mine was, but seemingly suffered no emotional problems from it. It was like as soon as he got to Hogwarts he became a sweet, tractable, loving, trusting child, when he'd had no reason to be so before that. I'd think that he'd EXPECT Severus' reaction to him as a matter of course, and be surprised by love and protection from adults, rather than vica versa. Anyway, thanks for your review!

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